EPTStory About a Zergling - Page 3
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evanthebouncy!
United States12796 Posts
It is abit too strong for it. It's like you're trying to make a nice ice tea then you dump some chili pepper into it. I have no rpboem with swears it just doesn't seem to fit. Other than that it's a nice cute story <3 | ||
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Chef
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But artistically I disagree for the same reasons. It might take a certain knowledge of psychology, or rare personal experience to understand why it fits perfectly, but it's quite literal. I would be altering the only part that is realistic to make it fit with what people think realistic should be (which of course is fantasy). I could explain in detail, but only if you ask. | ||
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7mk
Germany10157 Posts
Personally I was surprised people were surprised about it - I also thought it fit perfectly, even though I probably don't quite understand it - at least not in the way you do, just like I generally don't understand all of your story - I don't think I even want to, I have my own interpretation of it - but I love it. | ||
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EEEE1234
Canada55 Posts
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Sky
Jordan812 Posts
Interesting. | ||
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food
United States1951 Posts
decent story considering you had to base it off sc read it to the end since youve made somewhats an impression before with the attitude in some posts | ||
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Jonoman92
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hazelynut
United States2196 Posts
On July 22 2009 03:02 Chef wrote: Generally I agree. Although it wasn't contrived (I was just transposing real thoughts into a fantasy universe) most people in my audience didn't get it/like it and therefore it should be changed. I thought the "Zerglings don't fuck" added a perfect sense of something (realism? despair? cruel realization?) to the piece, and I would argue that it became that much stronger and evocative because people don't get it. Startling your reader into disagreeing, and more importantly thinking, is all part of good literature. | ||
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Corrupt
Bulgaria1312 Posts
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