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On August 11 2011 07:27 Z3kk wrote: PPPFFFTTTTTTTTCHHHHHH
LOOOOOL
Ahahahaha...you'd think all those yuri VNs would be put to good use looool great read but it felt really creepy, to say the least
Someone really needs to send this to Slayers Jessica LOL It's like wtf, how should I write this, fuck english lol. hard to make it flow or think of a decent plot when it involves H
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Just read over what I wrote, what the hell did I write...wtf..
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.... I don't know, but imo the whole reason Hotbid's Idra x Tossgirl worked was that it was supposed to be funny. No offence, but this just seems creepy. If I was either of these two I'd be really uncomfortable rreading this.
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On August 11 2011 07:51 Redmark wrote: .... I don't know, but imo the whole reason Hotbid's Idra x Tossgirl worked was that it was supposed to be funny. No offence, but this just seems creepy. If I was either of these two I'd be really uncomfortable rreading this. They made me do it, I am really bad writing H. Maybe I should go back and use the edit button
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Blazinghand
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On August 11 2011 07:51 Redmark wrote: .... I don't know, but imo the whole reason Hotbid's Idra x Tossgirl worked was that it was supposed to be funny. No offence, but this just seems creepy. If I was either of these two I'd be really uncomfortable rreading this.
If I were IdrA i'd be uncomfortable reading Hot_Bid's article, too >.> I think these are supposed to be a little uncomfortable.
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On August 11 2011 07:54 Blazinghand wrote:Show nested quote +On August 11 2011 07:51 Redmark wrote: .... I don't know, but imo the whole reason Hotbid's Idra x Tossgirl worked was that it was supposed to be funny. No offence, but this just seems creepy. If I was either of these two I'd be really uncomfortable rreading this. If I were IdrA i'd be uncomfortable reading Hot_Bid's article, too >.> I think these are supposed to be a little uncomfortable. Wrote an All Age version to compensate for the creepy route.
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Poll: Wow the H version of Chapter 2 turned out horriblyKeep it there spoilered (13) 72% Delete it (5) 28% 18 total votes Your vote: Wow the H version of Chapter 2 turned out horribly (Vote): Delete it (Vote): Keep it there spoilered
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The pairing I never knew I liked until it was laid before me... >_>
I'm getting tempted to write some of my own...I have a few ideas but I'm so lazy...
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End of Volume 1 every one post your opinions and whether if I should continue to write a second volume or just stop here.
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Make a 2nd volume please
There are many issues to explore, how will Jessica handle her new love for Eve with BoxeR still around? How can Jessica and Eve keep their love a secret? etc.
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On August 11 2011 09:52 RPR_Tempest wrote:Make a 2nd volume please There are many issues to explore, how will Jessica handle her new love for Eve with BoxeR still around? How can Jessica and Eve keep their love a secret? etc. If I was gonna use a cheap cop out I would say BoxeR went off to US to compete in a lot of tournaments for a VERY LONG TIME. and left Jessica back in Korea to manage SlayerS and Yellow while he was gone.
But since I try to be a good writer, I won't do that
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On August 11 2011 09:55 Blasterion wrote:Show nested quote +On August 11 2011 09:52 RPR_Tempest wrote:Make a 2nd volume please There are many issues to explore, how will Jessica handle her new love for Eve with BoxeR still around? How can Jessica and Eve keep their love a secret? etc. If I was gonna use a cheap cop out I would say BoxeR went off to US to compete in a lot of tournaments for a VERY LONG TIME. and left Jessica back in Korea to manage SlayerS and Yellow while he was gone. But since I try to be a good writer, I won't do that
Eve ===> Yandere. Go.
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On August 11 2011 09:56 Z3kk wrote:Show nested quote +On August 11 2011 09:55 Blasterion wrote:On August 11 2011 09:52 RPR_Tempest wrote:Make a 2nd volume please There are many issues to explore, how will Jessica handle her new love for Eve with BoxeR still around? How can Jessica and Eve keep their love a secret? etc. If I was gonna use a cheap cop out I would say BoxeR went off to US to compete in a lot of tournaments for a VERY LONG TIME. and left Jessica back in Korea to manage SlayerS and Yellow while he was gone. But since I try to be a good writer, I won't do that Eve ===> Yandere. Go. I am not writing school days
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On August 11 2011 09:56 Z3kk wrote:Show nested quote +On August 11 2011 09:55 Blasterion wrote:On August 11 2011 09:52 RPR_Tempest wrote:Make a 2nd volume please There are many issues to explore, how will Jessica handle her new love for Eve with BoxeR still around? How can Jessica and Eve keep their love a secret? etc. If I was gonna use a cheap cop out I would say BoxeR went off to US to compete in a lot of tournaments for a VERY LONG TIME. and left Jessica back in Korea to manage SlayerS and Yellow while he was gone. But since I try to be a good writer, I won't do that Eve ===> Yandere. Go. yes please. Starcraft Days gogogo. It's okay if your erotic writing skills suck, I'm sure you'll get better at this if you keep at it. Besides, we all know your mind is advanced enough to think of good scenes
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On August 11 2011 10:38 antilyon wrote: WTF I just read... you didn't like it? ='(
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On August 11 2011 07:51 Redmark wrote: .... I don't know, but imo the whole reason Hotbid's Idra x Tossgirl worked was that it was supposed to be funny. No offence, but this just seems creepy. If I was either of these two I'd be really uncomfortable rreading this.
Idra x Tossgirl actually started as JAEDONG X LOMO and hotbid just replaced the names lol
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On August 11 2011 11:20 Louuster wrote:Show nested quote +On August 11 2011 07:51 Redmark wrote: .... I don't know, but imo the whole reason Hotbid's Idra x Tossgirl worked was that it was supposed to be funny. No offence, but this just seems creepy. If I was either of these two I'd be really uncomfortable rreading this. Idra x Tossgirl actually started as JAEDONG X LOMO and hotbid just replaced the names lol I just read that, I need to use more Starcraft jokes in my novels
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On August 11 2011 10:54 Blasterion wrote:you didn't like it? ='( Well, you know, it's kinda awkward, like when you see porn for the first time and you think it's gross, but at the same time you kinda like it but don't know why?
I can't describe better than this :p
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On August 12 2011 05:04 antilyon wrote:Show nested quote +On August 11 2011 10:54 Blasterion wrote:On August 11 2011 10:38 antilyon wrote: WTF I just read... you didn't like it? ='( Well, you know, it's kinda awkward, like when you see porn for the first time and you think it's gross, but at the same time you kinda like it but don't know why? I can't describe better than this :p I'll admit, between all the H Yuri Novel I read I didn't know what I had to go with THAT Style. Even now reading it makes me go like wtf..lol. I call it inexperience
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