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United States47024 Posts
On March 28 2009 15:47 HeavOnEarth wrote: the syllables, what? and 1,2,5? u best not be telling me they rhyme hey fuck this stressed shit i ain't no asian prick i'm done with the wasting of my time
eh can u tell me where i messed up i can't tell if it's unstressed or not ugh that limerick went differently in my head curse these ... shackles of rules>_>
See, if you say that out loud, stressing the words you do is awkward.
When you speak normally, you wouldn't stress "two" in the first line, "they" in the second line, and "my" in the last line. Similarly, the word "asian" is pronounced with emphasis on the first syllable, not the second, so line 4 is messed up.
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On March 29 2009 03:06 TheYango wrote:Show nested quote +On March 28 2009 20:50 Klive5ive wrote: Oz think they can four-nil CJ But Sky-High has something to say He gets in the zone and brings it all home "DON'T FUCK WITH ME HMM K?" You're 2 syllables short on the last line.
FUCK is 2 syllables and there's a pause before HMM.
So it's: 1)DON'T 2,3)FUCK.... 4)WITH 5)ME 6).... 7)HMM 8)K?
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On March 29 2009 03:26 JeeJee wrote: how's fuck 2 syllables? Start quietly rolling the f.... FFFFFUCK then add a small pause for effect.
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for some reason i laughed really hard at umbrella attain
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On March 29 2009 03:33 Klive5ive wrote:Start quietly rolling the f.... FFFFFUCK then add a small pause for effect.
wouldn't it be better to just turn the "k" into "ok" as the accent is on the last one anyway so it works out and keep fuck as one syllable (which works out too since it's pretty easy to stress fuck) since it should be more stressed anyway.. stressing f... over fuck sounds weird O_o it's like some parental-controlled limerick
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On March 29 2009 04:21 JeeJee wrote:Show nested quote +On March 29 2009 03:33 Klive5ive wrote:On March 29 2009 03:26 JeeJee wrote: how's fuck 2 syllables? Start quietly rolling the f.... FFFFFUCK then add a small pause for effect. wouldn't it be better to just turn the "k" into "ok" as the accent is on the last one anyway so it works out and keep fuck as one syllable (which works out too since it's pretty easy to stress fuck) since it should be more stressed anyway.. stressing f... over fuck sounds weird O_o it's like some parental-controlled limerick Hmm it's pretty hard to explain how it should be enunciated over the internet.
Imagine the way Vinnie Jones would say "DON'T FUCK WITH ME" when he's pissed off. The FUCK is really exaggerated, so much so it's 2 syllables long. Then the HMM part of it is meant to be like a deep sound that you can hardly hear. You could skip it out and just have a 2 syllable pause instead. Or just a growl.
EDIT: Haha I know this is a stupid discussion. Just trust me, you can make it fit if you try.
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On March 29 2009 03:26 JeeJee wrote: how's fuck 2 syllables?
when i fuck your mom, it's two syllables
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United States4126 Posts
I lol'd. I like the story that goes along with it
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United States47024 Posts
Psh, the meter doesn't even work
Best attempt to get the meter to work so far, IMO:
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Valhalla18444 Posts
FakeSteve is so busy at work His duties he just cannot sherk But still he finds time To StarCraft and rhyme And be TL's resident jerk
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Valhalla18444 Posts
On March 27 2009 15:59 defenestrate wrote: For Fart God and Crotchmaster - Steve, please continue this
Gods are fickle and two-faced as Janus. Any slight will be taken as heinous; All their goodwill is spent. Flouting Nature's intent, On the battlefield Crotch faces Anus.
They struggled four nights and a day With feces and penile swordplay They paused for a second Epiphany beckoned "Hey, doesn't this seem kinda gay?"
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Whilst browsing TL on this eve, A pleasant surprise I received. Fresh rhymes in a blog-- Reprieve from this bog-- Five stars you deserve here, FakeSteve!
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sAviOr[gm], death of toss, by Bisu was dealt 3-0 loss, but when July ran for food, Maestro took out the lube, and showed that young upstart who's boss.
fail, I know :p
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On March 30 2009 15:03 ShaLLoW[baY] wrote: sAviOr[gm], death of toss, by Bisu was dealt 3-0 loss, but when July ran for food, Maestro took out the lube, and showed that young upstart who's boss.
fail, I know :p
The Maestro forever he'll be, But playing against Jae Dong Lee, He'll find he's a newb And put back that lube-- In minutes, he'll type out GG.
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This is a bump for great justice Although this rhyme may not suffice Please don't flame me much Or my teddy I'll clutch While I sit here enjoying my bliss.
/boredom 5/5 blog
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