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decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 14:28:02
October 06 2011 06:32 GMT
#1
Just wanted to make sure my resume looks good for my career fair tomorrow as i try to land some interviews. I know there's a lot of professionals here and wondered if you guys had any improvements/changes you guys think would be appropriate?

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English
Profile Joined April 2010
United States475 Posts
October 06 2011 06:35 GMT
#2
Looks good to me, gl!
mOnion
Profile Blog Joined August 2009
United States5657 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 06:39:29
October 06 2011 06:37 GMT
#3
if your gpa is over 3.0 i would put it on there

what job is this for? if there's anything remotely computer related I would put basic microsoft office shit on there. it's rarer than you think, being proficient in Excel can up your starting salary 10k

do you have any scholarships? societies?

also you should DEFINITELY have a statement at the beginning "Searching for an entry level position in blahhhhhhh"
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decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 06:42:21
October 06 2011 06:42 GMT
#4
Its for pretty much any supply chain management internship. GPA is just under 3.3. I'll throw on that i'm proficient in word/excel/access (pretty much a requirement for my degree)
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yourwhiteshadow
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States442 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 06:43:40
October 06 2011 06:42 GMT
#5
you don't need your "xyz packaging inc." experience to take up that much space. just make a comma separate list, and add a section that has references.

also, if you had awards/high gpa/etc you should add that.
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rsvp
Profile Blog Joined January 2006
United States2266 Posts
October 06 2011 06:43 GMT
#6
3 suggestions:

1. I like how you were specific in mentioning "Ropak, Orbis, Xytec, etc." Specifics and examples are good. More would be even better (for example, was there a big case you helped with in your internship? At least what kind cases were they?). Another thing you can do is mention some sort of volume - "tracked inventory of 100,000 items," "trained 5 new employees each month," etc.

2. Keep your tenses the same. I believe you should be using past tense for everything that you've stopped doing, and present tense for things you're still doing (ex. so as a kitchen worker, you greeted and served customers.)

3. What is your role as a current member of the Supply Chain Management Association? You might as well leave it out if all you're going to say is "current member."
Trang
Profile Joined October 2009
Australia324 Posts
October 06 2011 06:47 GMT
#7
Any referees?
Any languages you know (if more than just English) and what level of competence.
If it might be relevant to the job, maybe whether you have a driver's license and such.
Manifesto7
Profile Blog Joined November 2002
Osaka27154 Posts
October 06 2011 06:48 GMT
#8
Keep your language uniform.

Inspecting
Training
Loading
Packing

or

Inspect
Train
Load
Pack

etc.


Again, under the first part of work experience you have

Observed blah blah blah
Researched blah blah blah
Organizational work around the office.

verb verb noun is jarring to me


Under dining services you have mixed tenses:
Greet / Assisted / Tracked

Need greeted


Put your current work above work you have finished to maintain chronological order unless the work you finished is directly related to the job you are applying for.

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decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
October 06 2011 06:48 GMT
#9
Literally just joined the supply chain association as i just switched into the major before my senior year.
Not really any oustanding awards (deans list once lol).
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AoN.DimSum
Profile Blog Joined September 2008
United States2983 Posts
October 06 2011 06:52 GMT
#10
Add some skills:

Computer: MS Office, ( and other programs that you use)
by my idol krokkis : "U better hope Finland wont have WCG next year and that I wont gain shitloads of skill, cause then I will wash ur mouth with soap, little man."
Azzur
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
Australia6260 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 07:01:34
October 06 2011 06:59 GMT
#11
I've helped some of my friends recently on improving their CVs:

- Firstly, use CV (it sounds better and resume is a little dated language). You can also format it a bit nicer (i.e. use headers/footers and put lines there and page numbers).

- References and academic transcripts should be included. Ask for letters of recommendation from previous employers.

- Describe your work activities in more detail. When writing, keep in mind 3 things:
1. What you did.
2. How you overcome it.
3. The results (don't forget this important point).

For example, for one of your roles, you put "Research information relevant to cases". You can:
1. Describe what information was needed
2. What methodology / strategy you used to find the information.
3. Results of your research.

- Follow this for each of the roles that you have written. For example, in your Warehouse role, you mentioned that you trained new employees.
1. How did you train them?
2. What issues arose and how did you overcome them?
3. The results (e.g. they fit into the company well and this lowered turnover, etc).

- And then, you can describe challenges in your work (when you write this, keep the 3 points mentioned in mind).
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 07:42:55
October 06 2011 07:00 GMT
#12
Update below
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decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
October 06 2011 07:02 GMT
#13
On October 06 2011 15:59 Azzur wrote:
I've helped some of my friends recently on improving their CVs:

- Firstly, use CV (it sounds better and resume is a little dated language). You can also format it a bit nicer (i.e. use headers/footers and put lines there and page numbers).

- References and academic transcripts should be included. Ask for letters of recommendation from previous employers.

- Describe your work activities in more detail. When writing, keep in mind 3 things:
1. What you did.
2. How you overcome it.
3. The results (don't forget this important point).

For example, for one of your roles, you put "Research information relevant to cases". You can:
1. Describe what information was needed
2. What methodology / strategy you used to find the information.
3. Results of your research.

- Follow this for each of the roles that you have written. For example, in your Warehouse role, you mentioned that you trained new employees.
1. How did you train them?
2. What issues arose and how did you overcome them?
3. The results (e.g. they fit into the company well and this lowered turnover, etc).

- And then, you can describe challenges in your work (when you write this, keep the 3 points mentioned in mind).


What is CV?
I think most people just add "references available on request" at the bottom that i've seen
how reasonable is it to eat off wood instead of your tummy?
Azzur
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
Australia6260 Posts
October 06 2011 07:04 GMT
#14
On October 06 2011 16:02 decafchicken wrote:
Show nested quote +
On October 06 2011 15:59 Azzur wrote:
I've helped some of my friends recently on improving their CVs:

- Firstly, use CV (it sounds better and resume is a little dated language). You can also format it a bit nicer (i.e. use headers/footers and put lines there and page numbers).

- References and academic transcripts should be included. Ask for letters of recommendation from previous employers.

- Describe your work activities in more detail. When writing, keep in mind 3 things:
1. What you did.
2. How you overcome it.
3. The results (don't forget this important point).

For example, for one of your roles, you put "Research information relevant to cases". You can:
1. Describe what information was needed
2. What methodology / strategy you used to find the information.
3. Results of your research.

- Follow this for each of the roles that you have written. For example, in your Warehouse role, you mentioned that you trained new employees.
1. How did you train them?
2. What issues arose and how did you overcome them?
3. The results (e.g. they fit into the company well and this lowered turnover, etc).

- And then, you can describe challenges in your work (when you write this, keep the 3 points mentioned in mind).


What is CV?
I think most people just add "references available on request" at the bottom that i've seen

CV = curriculum vitae

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Curriculum_vitae
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
October 06 2011 07:08 GMT
#15
On October 06 2011 16:04 Azzur wrote:
Show nested quote +
On October 06 2011 16:02 decafchicken wrote:
On October 06 2011 15:59 Azzur wrote:
I've helped some of my friends recently on improving their CVs:

- Firstly, use CV (it sounds better and resume is a little dated language). You can also format it a bit nicer (i.e. use headers/footers and put lines there and page numbers).

- References and academic transcripts should be included. Ask for letters of recommendation from previous employers.

- Describe your work activities in more detail. When writing, keep in mind 3 things:
1. What you did.
2. How you overcome it.
3. The results (don't forget this important point).

For example, for one of your roles, you put "Research information relevant to cases". You can:
1. Describe what information was needed
2. What methodology / strategy you used to find the information.
3. Results of your research.

- Follow this for each of the roles that you have written. For example, in your Warehouse role, you mentioned that you trained new employees.
1. How did you train them?
2. What issues arose and how did you overcome them?
3. The results (e.g. they fit into the company well and this lowered turnover, etc).

- And then, you can describe challenges in your work (when you write this, keep the 3 points mentioned in mind).


What is CV?
I think most people just add "references available on request" at the bottom that i've seen

CV = curriculum vitae

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Curriculum_vitae


Never heard of it...might be an austrailia/usa difference..
how reasonable is it to eat off wood instead of your tummy?
kainzero
Profile Blog Joined January 2009
United States5211 Posts
October 06 2011 07:11 GMT
#16
right now it looks pretty bland...
do you have any specific experiences that would look good?
numbers and details also help

for example
"managed a yearly budget of $50000 to make travel arrangements for over 50 players, coaches, and staff"

looks much better than
"assisted with budget for travel arrangements and on-field decisions"
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
October 06 2011 07:15 GMT
#17
On October 06 2011 16:11 kainzero wrote:
right now it looks pretty bland...
do you have any specific experiences that would look good?
numbers and details also help

for example
"managed a yearly budget of $50000 to make travel arrangements for over 50 players, coaches, and staff"

looks much better than
"assisted with budget for travel arrangements and on-field decisions"


i wish it was 50k T_T

More like "Helped manage a yearly budget of 2000$ to make travel arrangements for 30 players" Should i put that instead?
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AoN.DimSum
Profile Blog Joined September 2008
United States2983 Posts
October 06 2011 07:20 GMT
#18
Helped and assisted are both passive words. Need a better word choice or just delete helped.
by my idol krokkis : "U better hope Finland wont have WCG next year and that I wont gain shitloads of skill, cause then I will wash ur mouth with soap, little man."
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20068 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-06 14:28:17
October 06 2011 07:42 GMT
#19

update below

Its almost 4am T_T need to sleep for class, will continue in morning.
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cz
Profile Blog Joined August 2007
United States3249 Posts
October 06 2011 08:10 GMT
#20
You aren't selling yourself nearly enough. Glitz it up a bit: be clear on your accomplishments, and sell them. There's an excellent, amazing book on this called "The Damn Good Resume Guide." it's basically a collection of resumes, all in the same format. I don't know if you can find it online, but look for it, as it's really amazing.
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