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emperorchampion
Profile Blog Joined December 2008
Canada9496 Posts
October 06 2011 18:29 GMT
#41
On October 07 2011 02:40 UrASofty wrote:
Show nested quote +
On October 07 2011 01:35 Orpheos wrote:
you want more of your statements to be like the first one of your rugby club. tell what you did but also say what skills you learned or demonstrated(unless its super obvious but even then consider doing it).
try to tailor these statements to the kind of qualities the internship is looking for. be it analytical skills, organizational skills etc.
also some stuff is extraneous. like "served thousands of customers daily".


this.

instead of just saying what you did tie it into a skill. served thousands of customers daily, try and relate it to time management skills or multitasking or some other skill.

also i'm not sure how other people do their resumes but my university taught us to usually include a summary of skills/qualifications at the very top.
i.e. ability to multiask in fast paced environment (you worked at a restaurant)
- good team work skills (rugby), organized, proven leader etc etc (don't just say it though tell them where and how you developed the skill)

if you don't want to include a skills summary that's fine but just fine tune some of the stuff you've said in the work experience section. as someone earlier in the thread mentioned follow this guideline, your task(what you did), anything you overcame, and the skills you developed (what you learned).


Imo he doesn't have enough room to include a skill summary, also imo he's better off representing skills through activities.
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udgnim
Profile Blog Joined April 2009
United States8024 Posts
October 06 2011 19:03 GMT
#42
when describing your job experience, you need to filter it and orient it to what an employer considers to be relevant to what they are looking for

employers are not really interested in your daily duties, but they are interested in the skills you used to accomplish those duties and any notable accomplishments

for example, if your manager set goals/quotas to meet and you were able to consistently meet or exceed those goals/quotas, then make sure that is stated on your resume.

Example:

Consistently met and exceeded shipping quotas through prudent usage of time management and prioritization skills


this tells the employer that you can prioritize and manage your time well to meet goals

so unless you're looking to become a warehouse intern, I'm pretty sure things like

* Picking orders and loading/unloading shipments
* Tracking and placing inventory in warehouse


are unimportant to an employer. if you still want to make mention of those, you can still repackage them into something like this:

Helped expedite the picking order process to load and unload shipments through active communication with team members


this tells the employer that you can work with others to accomplish tasks and that you understand that good communication is an integral part of the process.

the gist of it is that you need to avoid being too general, highlight the skills you used to do your job, state any notable accomplishments at that job, and orient the job description statements to what is important to the employer

I also think you should be more specific with your job titles. "Warehouse Employee" and "Intern" are too generic for me. A more specific title will give the employer a much better initial impression of what your duties & responsibilities and the description statements will help expand upon that.
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LosingID8
Profile Blog Joined December 2006
CA10835 Posts
October 06 2011 20:51 GMT
#43
^ solid advice, i'd just make this small change
Helped Expedited the picking order process to load and unload shipments through active communication with team members
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supaplex
Profile Joined July 2011
United States75 Posts
October 06 2011 21:04 GMT
#44
Id center this around a strong thesis. Like 'I picks things up and put them down'. Whats up with your GPA?
kainzero
Profile Blog Joined January 2009
United States5211 Posts
October 06 2011 21:47 GMT
#45
On October 06 2011 23:27 decafchicken wrote:
Thoughts on whether or not to keep Skills - microsoft bullshit and References available upon request on there?

I think References upon request is pretty obvious so that it doesn't need to be there.

I feel like Microsoft skills are extremely important if you can demonstrate how well you can use them. "I can write in Word" is not very telling... but something like "Can design spreadsheets in Excel to perform linear regression analysis and can link Excel data to Access databases" is pretty cool.

(my experience is that people over 35 are quite awful with computers and they don't know what they're missing, so you gotta bring it to them.)
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20168 Posts
October 06 2011 22:18 GMT
#46
Got back from the career fair, will know for a bunch of companies by tonight/tomorrow if i have any interviews. The rest the deadline for applications/submissions is monday and i'll hear back from them in a week or two. Thanks for all the help everyone and i'll fix it up a bit more!
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AoN.DimSum
Profile Blog Joined September 2008
United States2983 Posts
October 06 2011 22:37 GMT
#47
good luck! This blog has given me ideas on my own resume! lol
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decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20168 Posts
October 07 2011 01:15 GMT
#48
first callback! got an interview tomorrow with a big company
how reasonable is it to eat off wood instead of your tummy?
Dalguno
Profile Blog Joined January 2011
United States2446 Posts
October 07 2011 01:53 GMT
#49
On October 07 2011 10:15 decafchicken wrote:
first callback! got an interview tomorrow with a big company


Awesome, good luck!
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Manifesto7
Profile Blog Joined November 2002
Osaka27177 Posts
October 07 2011 02:02 GMT
#50
On October 07 2011 10:15 decafchicken wrote:
first callback! got an interview tomorrow with a big company


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LaSt)ChAnCe
Profile Blog Joined June 2005
United States2179 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-07 02:20:41
October 07 2011 02:17 GMT
#51
your tenses on your jobs are correct except for the "trained" 5 new employees part. i'd spin it as "Assist with training of new-hire employees." or however. don't put the specific number in there, and if you do - the correct way to say it would be "five"

contrary to what someone said, do NOT put your references on your resume

you should have a section of skills and abilities (aside from what you have outlined in your experience)

i also like to put "key achievements" for each of my previous jobs. i am also personally (personal preference only) against having an "activities" section - when i was a supervisor and did a lot of interviews, i never looked at that shit.

if you want, PM me and i can send you a copy of my resume. it's IT, but the same concepts transfer over, and it's helped me every job and promotion i've applied for


also, udgnim's advice is sound
emperorchampion
Profile Blog Joined December 2008
Canada9496 Posts
October 07 2011 02:31 GMT
#52
On October 07 2011 11:02 Manifesto7 wrote:
Show nested quote +
On October 07 2011 10:15 decafchicken wrote:
first callback! got an interview tomorrow with a big company


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AoN.DimSum
Profile Blog Joined September 2008
United States2983 Posts
October 07 2011 02:55 GMT
#53
holy shit call back on the same day?? that is quick lol
by my idol krokkis : "U better hope Finland wont have WCG next year and that I wont gain shitloads of skill, cause then I will wash ur mouth with soap, little man."
Melchior
Profile Joined January 2011
United States112 Posts
October 07 2011 04:37 GMT
#54
As everyone has already been saying, you need to show the results of what you did, not your responsibilities. Any numbers you can provide are great, because they catch the eye (so write 1000 not one thousand) and are the only way the recruiters can quantify your impact. I don't know the specifics of your work, so I can't help you too much here, but try to show that you contributed to the organization more than just being another ant in the colony.

A couple more notes:
-Just stick with one of the GPAs -- since they're the same number, having them both doesn't add anything. If anything, your major GPA should be higher than your overall GPA, so just put the cumulative one.

-Use a consistent date format. May-August, 2011 for your law internship should be May 2011-August 2011. Consider changing your activity dates to Month Year format too. Abbreviating dates is also acceptable, as long as you do it consistently.

-Please use tables or some other method to make sure your dates are actually right-justified. Your dates for SCMA and Rugby are noticeably out of alignment and it looks sloppy.

-You don't have them right now, but in case you feel tempted to add them back on: objectives and references are not necessary. If you're applying for a specific job post, they know what your objective is, and if you're sending it out as a general resume, a general objective tells them absolutely nothing. Similarly, if they want references they'll ask for them, and it's just a waste of space to put "references available upon request."

All that being said, a resume can only get you so far. If I had two tips for job hunting, they'd be 1) don't sell yourself short, and 2) it's a numbers game -- there is no such thing as a "safety" job, so apply to as many as possible.

Good luck with your job search! I'm in the same boat myself, so maybe I'll have my own resume-critiquing blog up soon! :-P
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20168 Posts
October 07 2011 16:51 GMT
#55
any interview advice? :D
how reasonable is it to eat off wood instead of your tummy?
LaSt)ChAnCe
Profile Blog Joined June 2005
United States2179 Posts
October 07 2011 17:16 GMT
#56
On October 08 2011 01:51 decafchicken wrote:
any interview advice? :D


smile a lot, if they ask you something you don't know the answer to - admit it. honesty and humbleness will get you a long way

they will probably ask you what your greatest weakness is. come up with something that isn't career or production affecting and doesn't fault your character (a commonly quoted example is for someone who has moved within the past few years to say that their greatest weakness is that they have no local professional network)

smile.
HereBeDragons
Profile Joined May 2011
1429 Posts
October 07 2011 17:33 GMT
#57
On October 08 2011 02:16 LaSt)ChAnCe wrote:
Show nested quote +
On October 08 2011 01:51 decafchicken wrote:
any interview advice? :D


smile a lot, if they ask you something you don't know the answer to - admit it. honesty and humbleness will get you a long way

they will probably ask you what your greatest weakness is. come up with something that isn't career or production affecting and doesn't fault your character (a commonly quoted example is for someone who has moved within the past few years to say that their greatest weakness is that they have no local professional network)

smile.


Yes, I really agree with the smile and politeness. Smiling a lot makes things less awkward; it's a much nicer atmosphere, and it can buy you valuable time to think. Be-careful about your body language: namely don't shake your legs, spin a pen, or anything like that during the interview. Relax and move you hands while you're talking, you're not a stone. The interviewer and you with both be looking at each other the whole time, so a lot of communication can go through via your gestures as well as things you say.

Although, I can't comment much on this since interviews in countries with different cultural background are not quite the same sometimes.

At the end of the day, no one knows yourself better than you, so our advices won't matter that much. You know what to do.
SpoR
Profile Blog Joined November 2010
United States1542 Posts
Last Edited: 2011-10-08 11:50:21
October 08 2011 11:44 GMT
#58
I went to a IT place for an interview like 9 months ago and the guy told me that my resume (which looked similar to yours) was very poor. He said that he used to be the main interview guy for CEOs and CFOs etc. And I should elaborate specifically everything that I did in the jobs.

So instead of like 4 bullet points that are just the generic "Consistantly blanked blank blank blankedly"
it's :

+ Show Spoiler +
Managed records and commissions via Excel. Organized spreadsheet reports for monthly submissions via mail including copies of customer contracts and identification files.
 Sold, exchanged, and returned products and plans for customers and handled all money transactions via Wireless Standard and XCharge.
 Activated, upgraded, and modified customer accounts through secure servers (EROES, SPOT). Maintained integrity and outstanding rapport with customers and their private information (SS#, DL, contracts, bills).
 Trouble shooting and break/fix problem solving for customers and the store, with all makes and models of mobile devices; including laptops, routers, printers, and other accessories.
 Ordered and negotiated merchandise from various sources, often finding the best deals to save on cost and increase revenue.
 Assisted customers in choosing the best products for their technical level and educated them in the products and devices they purchased.
 Placed various calls with Verizon call center to resolve issues out of my jurisdiction to assist customers further with their technical/billing issues.
 Negotiated deposits/temporary contracts for out of stock phones and placed calls and arranged times to meet with clients.
 Organized meetings with the owner and co-workers regularly to brainstorm ideas and techniques to increase sales and new projects involving FiOS products, and the latest technologies.
 Occasionally set up booths and events during and after store hours to up-sell FiOS products and cell phone related services.
 Continually learning and researching company and competitor’s products through internal educational programs as well as my own internet and word of mouth resources.
 Regularly received shipments to input merchandise data (Wireless Standard) for use in sale, to keep records, prevent shrinkage, and to view trends in popular items.
 Trained new employees with the methods and techniques I have learned in sales, as well as in the tools, information, and programs needed to complete transactions and catalog data.


On the other hand, I haven't gotten a job so I don't know maybe I need another critique myself.


edit- in fact i'm going to go ahead and make the same blog with my resume (and ill put my old one up too so you can see it).
A man is what he thinks about all day long.
SpoR
Profile Blog Joined November 2010
United States1542 Posts
October 08 2011 11:46 GMT
#59
On October 08 2011 02:33 HereBeDragons wrote:
Show nested quote +
On October 08 2011 02:16 LaSt)ChAnCe wrote:
On October 08 2011 01:51 decafchicken wrote:
any interview advice? :D


smile a lot, if they ask you something you don't know the answer to - admit it. honesty and humbleness will get you a long way

they will probably ask you what your greatest weakness is. come up with something that isn't career or production affecting and doesn't fault your character (a commonly quoted example is for someone who has moved within the past few years to say that their greatest weakness is that they have no local professional network)

smile.


Yes, I really agree with the smile and politeness. Smiling a lot makes things less awkward; it's a much nicer atmosphere, and it can buy you valuable time to think. Be-careful about your body language: namely don't shake your legs, spin a pen, or anything like that during the interview. Relax and move you hands while you're talking, you're not a stone. The interviewer and you with both be looking at each other the whole time, so a lot of communication can go through via your gestures as well as things you say.

Although, I can't comment much on this since interviews in countries with different cultural background are not quite the same sometimes.

At the end of the day, no one knows yourself better than you, so our advices won't matter that much. You know what to do.


Make a list of your 6 best attributes, its hard to think of them on the spot. And the question comes up often enough.
A man is what he thinks about all day long.
LaSt)ChAnCe
Profile Blog Joined June 2005
United States2179 Posts
October 08 2011 14:22 GMT
#60
On October 08 2011 20:44 SpoR wrote:
I went to a IT place for an interview like 9 months ago and the guy told me that my resume (which looked similar to yours) was very poor. He said that he used to be the main interview guy for CEOs and CFOs etc. And I should elaborate specifically everything that I did in the jobs.

So instead of like 4 bullet points that are just the generic "Consistantly blanked blank blank blankedly"
it's :

+ Show Spoiler +
Managed records and commissions via Excel. Organized spreadsheet reports for monthly submissions via mail including copies of customer contracts and identification files.
 Sold, exchanged, and returned products and plans for customers and handled all money transactions via Wireless Standard and XCharge.
 Activated, upgraded, and modified customer accounts through secure servers (EROES, SPOT). Maintained integrity and outstanding rapport with customers and their private information (SS#, DL, contracts, bills).
 Trouble shooting and break/fix problem solving for customers and the store, with all makes and models of mobile devices; including laptops, routers, printers, and other accessories.
 Ordered and negotiated merchandise from various sources, often finding the best deals to save on cost and increase revenue.
 Assisted customers in choosing the best products for their technical level and educated them in the products and devices they purchased.
 Placed various calls with Verizon call center to resolve issues out of my jurisdiction to assist customers further with their technical/billing issues.
 Negotiated deposits/temporary contracts for out of stock phones and placed calls and arranged times to meet with clients.
 Organized meetings with the owner and co-workers regularly to brainstorm ideas and techniques to increase sales and new projects involving FiOS products, and the latest technologies.
 Occasionally set up booths and events during and after store hours to up-sell FiOS products and cell phone related services.
 Continually learning and researching company and competitor’s products through internal educational programs as well as my own internet and word of mouth resources.
 Regularly received shipments to input merchandise data (Wireless Standard) for use in sale, to keep records, prevent shrinkage, and to view trends in popular items.
 Trained new employees with the methods and techniques I have learned in sales, as well as in the tools, information, and programs needed to complete transactions and catalog data.


On the other hand, I haven't gotten a job so I don't know maybe I need another critique myself.


edit- in fact i'm going to go ahead and make the same blog with my resume (and ill put my old one up too so you can see it).


CEO's and CFO's don't really get interviews.. lol
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