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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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mOnion
United States5657 Posts
what job is this for? if there's anything remotely computer related I would put basic microsoft office shit on there. it's rarer than you think, being proficient in Excel can up your starting salary 10k do you have any scholarships? societies? also you should DEFINITELY have a statement at the beginning "Searching for an entry level position in blahhhhhhh" | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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yourwhiteshadow
United States442 Posts
also, if you had awards/high gpa/etc you should add that. | ||
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rsvp
United States2266 Posts
1. I like how you were specific in mentioning "Ropak, Orbis, Xytec, etc." Specifics and examples are good. More would be even better (for example, was there a big case you helped with in your internship? At least what kind cases were they?). Another thing you can do is mention some sort of volume - "tracked inventory of 100,000 items," "trained 5 new employees each month," etc. 2. Keep your tenses the same. I believe you should be using past tense for everything that you've stopped doing, and present tense for things you're still doing (ex. so as a kitchen worker, you greeted and served customers.) 3. What is your role as a current member of the Supply Chain Management Association? You might as well leave it out if all you're going to say is "current member." | ||
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Trang
Australia324 Posts
Any languages you know (if more than just English) and what level of competence. If it might be relevant to the job, maybe whether you have a driver's license and such. | ||
Manifesto7
Osaka27149 Posts
Inspecting Training Loading Packing or Inspect Train Load Pack etc. Again, under the first part of work experience you have Observed blah blah blah Researched blah blah blah Organizational work around the office. verb verb noun is jarring to me Under dining services you have mixed tenses: Greet / Assisted / Tracked Need greeted Put your current work above work you have finished to maintain chronological order unless the work you finished is directly related to the job you are applying for. | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
Not really any oustanding awards (deans list once lol). | ||
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AoN.DimSum
United States2983 Posts
Computer: MS Office, ( and other programs that you use) | ||
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Azzur
Australia6259 Posts
- Firstly, use CV (it sounds better and resume is a little dated language). You can also format it a bit nicer (i.e. use headers/footers and put lines there and page numbers). - References and academic transcripts should be included. Ask for letters of recommendation from previous employers. - Describe your work activities in more detail. When writing, keep in mind 3 things: 1. What you did. 2. How you overcome it. 3. The results (don't forget this important point). For example, for one of your roles, you put "Research information relevant to cases". You can: 1. Describe what information was needed 2. What methodology / strategy you used to find the information. 3. Results of your research. - Follow this for each of the roles that you have written. For example, in your Warehouse role, you mentioned that you trained new employees. 1. How did you train them? 2. What issues arose and how did you overcome them? 3. The results (e.g. they fit into the company well and this lowered turnover, etc). - And then, you can describe challenges in your work (when you write this, keep the 3 points mentioned in mind). | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
On October 06 2011 15:59 Azzur wrote: I've helped some of my friends recently on improving their CVs: - Firstly, use CV (it sounds better and resume is a little dated language). You can also format it a bit nicer (i.e. use headers/footers and put lines there and page numbers). - References and academic transcripts should be included. Ask for letters of recommendation from previous employers. - Describe your work activities in more detail. When writing, keep in mind 3 things: 1. What you did. 2. How you overcome it. 3. The results (don't forget this important point). For example, for one of your roles, you put "Research information relevant to cases". You can: 1. Describe what information was needed 2. What methodology / strategy you used to find the information. 3. Results of your research. - Follow this for each of the roles that you have written. For example, in your Warehouse role, you mentioned that you trained new employees. 1. How did you train them? 2. What issues arose and how did you overcome them? 3. The results (e.g. they fit into the company well and this lowered turnover, etc). - And then, you can describe challenges in your work (when you write this, keep the 3 points mentioned in mind). What is CV? I think most people just add "references available on request" at the bottom that i've seen | ||
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Azzur
Australia6259 Posts
On October 06 2011 16:02 decafchicken wrote: What is CV? I think most people just add "references available on request" at the bottom that i've seen CV = curriculum vitae http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Curriculum_vitae | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
On October 06 2011 16:04 Azzur wrote: CV = curriculum vitae http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Curriculum_vitae Never heard of it...might be an austrailia/usa difference.. | ||
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kainzero
United States5211 Posts
do you have any specific experiences that would look good? numbers and details also help for example "managed a yearly budget of $50000 to make travel arrangements for over 50 players, coaches, and staff" looks much better than "assisted with budget for travel arrangements and on-field decisions" | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
On October 06 2011 16:11 kainzero wrote: right now it looks pretty bland... do you have any specific experiences that would look good? numbers and details also help for example "managed a yearly budget of $50000 to make travel arrangements for over 50 players, coaches, and staff" looks much better than "assisted with budget for travel arrangements and on-field decisions" i wish it was 50k T_T More like "Helped manage a yearly budget of 2000$ to make travel arrangements for 30 players" Should i put that instead? | ||
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AoN.DimSum
United States2983 Posts
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
update below Its almost 4am T_T need to sleep for class, will continue in morning. | ||
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cz
United States3249 Posts
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Neo27
United States154 Posts
Skills: - Accustomed to operating in a fact-paced environment requiring little supervision. (add, if applicable) -Assisted with budgeting etc etc --> - Coordinate Team Travel Arrangements and On-field decisions, Apportioned available budget for respective events. -Organizational work around office --> - Enhanced office efficiency by restructuring organization of process documents and records. Personal preference, but I would say "Expected Graduation May 2012" Eventually change to "Graduated May 2012" Try to fill out some of that white space: -Trained 5 new employees --> Trained new employees on proper operating procedures and safety requirements Bottom line is, start each line with an "Action" word, and use big words, even if you have to look them all up (like I do.) Good Luck. | ||
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MisterD
Germany1338 Posts
Also, i would write "Other skills" instead of just skills, somewhat makes the impression that these three programs are all you've learned x) at your bachelor degree you state may 2012, the text gives the impression that you already have that degree. Did you mistype the date or are you currently studying towards that degree? if so, i'd change the text to actually state your current highest finished education and change what is there to "currently studying towards bachelor of Arts supply chain management". That's at least what people expect over here, they always only ask for the latest completed degree. and i dare you to put a "playing starcraft as a hobby, thus trained in general resource management and multitasking" on there haha  | ||
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emperorchampion
Canada9496 Posts
You never want them to actually sound like job descriptions, don't just list what you did. List what you have accomplished, and the outcomes. You always want to be "demonstrating" not "claiming", this is how you build credibility. Credibility makes you seems legit, and being legit gets you interviews. Neo27 has the right idea. Include words specific to the activity to demonstrate your level of mastery over a particular topic. Imo the arrows look like unnecessary clutter. School date should be from when you started to expected year of graduation. If you can I would advise making it two pages. If you can't/don't want to, I would take out the computer skills because as you pointed out everyone can do that (if they are really concerned they will ask in interview). Use the extra space that makes to fill in the descriptions with more useful stuff. As a personal example, I worked fast food, I don't put "served coffee, got bitched at by customers", I put "worked with team to achieve fastest drive-thru times in the region, faced paced environment, communication skills, ect, ect". Any chump can serve donuts or throw boxes around in a warehouse, demonstrate why you are different. Another somewhat personal taste thing, I prefer to have the activity description, then the location, because what you actually did is more important that where you did it. Rugby Player MSU ect... -Studied strategy and coached nubs therefore developed teamwork and communication skills WHERE THE FUCK IS OLY LIFTING? Don't you pretty much train yourself, and won a medal in a recent competition! Stick that shit on there, it shows dedication and "self-starting". If you are limited on space, take out the reference part because you don't really need it (it's pretty much like writing "The End"). Anyways, gl! | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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OpticalShot
Canada6330 Posts
2. I assume your contact info is in the blacked out section below your name. 3. You may want to include "fluent in English" or "native English speaker" and if you have any second/third/more proficient languages, don't hesitate to add them in (as MisterD suggested above). This would all probably go under the Skills section in your resume. More languages = more power. 4. In my resume I have a one-liner purpose at the top of the page (below name and contact info) saying like "Purpose: to be employed as a x working for y, for a career in z." Probably stating the obvious, but I like to tell them exactly what my goal is. --- More detailed things I'd recommend: --- 5. I understand that you're still working at the warehouse (-Present) but I'd just put every single verb in past tense anyway. 6. "Organizational work around the office" <--- what did you do exactly here? 7. Assisted in preparing and closing down of serving stations. Besides the little edit, this sentence needs more glitter. Make it sound more epic without becoming a flamboyant liar. 8. Developed strong teamwork and leadership skills. Leader > Teacher, at least in resume language. 9. Placed in high pressure situations to make quick decisions on field ---> Made quick and sound decisions in high pressure situations on the field. --- and my last advice: --- 10. If you can afford a little more space... squeeze in what you do in your afternoons, evenings, and weekends. Even Starcraft could give you an edge here, as long as you mix it in with other things like sports, political debates, latest market trends, etc. Show you have a diverse interest, can tolerate working with people of different personalities, and that you're basically the most interesting man in the world. I put "urban simulation games" in my resume (last paragraph of my 2-page version) and that came up as a pretty cool conversation in two of my interviews (one of which led to my current job as a transportation engineer). Along with what cz said, there are probably 200+ people with similar education as you, applying for the same position. Every single one of them will say Bachelor of x, probably a 3+ GPA, proficient in MS Office, and some sort of work experience. How will you make yours stand out and above the others? | ||
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Deleted User 101379
4849 Posts
IMHO resumes should always highlight the experiences that are relevant to the job you are applying to while keeping info on the other stuff to the minimum. How exactly do the jobs you put on there relate to the job you want to have? | ||
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DrArmature
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GL mate! Slam the Career Fair!! oh, p.s. most campuses have a career services department, eat that stuff up. They will do mock interviews, resume critiques, and all types of seminars. These are an added buffer if you are trying to pad that bad boy. | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
Thoughts on whether or not to keep Skills - microsoft bullshit and References available upon request on there? Current draft: | ||
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Masamune
Canada3401 Posts
- Sex idol  Oh and don't mention anything about being a Red Wings fan... that's generally frowned upon. | ||
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bonifaceviii
Canada2890 Posts
But hey, I'm no HR person. | ||
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emperorchampion
Canada9496 Posts
-Having both GPA's seems a little redundant... -Have you done anything in your shipping job outside of just "doing the job"? ie, anything that lead to increased efficiency or lead to an understanding of supply chain/logistics ect? If so you want to work that into the description, just putting "picking orders and loading/unloading shipments" doesn't tell them anything that you have learned from the job. Cut out the points, make fewer, longer points about what you learned by doing the activities. I would say that in general, unless previous work you have done is specific to what you are applying for, they will genuinely not give a fuck about what you did previously. They want to know what you put in, and what you took out of previous job/activities. You can move move shit around, good for you, they probably aren't hiring a janitor. -Again, outcomes!! You observed court proceedings, good for you. Next. Seriously though, add how your internship added some sort of skill or knowledge that makes you a better candidate for what you are applying for. -Again, outcomes. Washing dishes != supply chain and logistics. -Supply Chain Managment Association??? What have you done, what is your position? Why are you adding this, then saying nothing about it? It seems extremely relevant, but there is nothing there... The most important thing is to demonstrate, not claim. Anybody can claim anything. Anybody can claim that they "attained good leadership skills from captaining a team," demonstrate how you attained the said skills by being a captain. Things I think are good: -A lot of useful skills gained in the packing job, just make them work for you -Intern experience -"Interacted with co-staff and customers to reach optimal service times", good but how? Maybe more specific. Can describe more by cutting the other crap. -Familiar with large scale operations ect... -Budget management for rugby team -Oly stuff You already know my stance on References, Skills ect, don't need that crap. Edit: To clarify on demonstrating, look at the rugby part. You say it gave you leadership skills, then two bullets later you talk about on field leardership. Imo those points should be together. You gained leadership, communication, ect, BY or THROUGH the experience of being an on-field leader, integral part of the team or whatever. Now instead of saying "yeah I just have this skill" you are saying "I developed this skill by doing this _____" Oh, also you should include any results from your rugby team, ie winning anything, quarterfinalists, player of the year, ect. | ||
LosingID8
CA10828 Posts
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Charger
United States2405 Posts
On October 07 2011 00:23 emperorchampion wrote: -Supply Chain Managment Association??? What have you done, what is your position? Why are you adding this, then saying nothing about it? It seems extremely relevant, but there is nothing there... This is bothering me as well, it seems like perhaps the most relevant part of your resume for the job you are after but there isn't anything here. If possible, there should be a ton of details here because it actually applies to the position. | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
On October 07 2011 00:23 emperorchampion wrote: -One thing I forgot was that you need an objective at the beginning of the resume -Having both GPA's seems a little redundant... -Have you done anything in your shipping job outside of just "doing the job"? ie, anything that lead to increased efficiency or lead to an understanding of supply chain/logistics ect? If so you want to work that into the description, just putting "picking orders and loading/unloading shipments" doesn't tell them anything that you have learned from the job. Cut out the points, make fewer, longer points about what you learned by doing the activities. I would say that in general, unless previous work you have done is specific to what you are applying for, they will genuinely not give a fuck about what you did previously. They want to know what you put in, and what you took out of previous job/activities. You can move move shit around, good for you, they probably aren't hiring a janitor. -Again, outcomes!! You observed court proceedings, good for you. Next. Seriously though, add how your internship added some sort of skill or knowledge that makes you a better candidate for what you are applying for. -Again, outcomes. Washing dishes != supply chain and logistics. -Supply Chain Managment Association??? What have you done, what is your position? Why are you adding this, then saying nothing about it? It seems extremely relevant, but there is nothing there... The most important thing is to demonstrate, not claim. Anybody can claim anything. Anybody can claim that they "attained good leadership skills from captaining a team," demonstrate how you attained the said skills by being a captain. Things I think are good: -A lot of useful skills gained in the packing job, just make them work for you -Intern experience -"Interacted with co-staff and customers to reach optimal service times", good but how? Maybe more specific. Can describe more by cutting the other crap. -Familiar with large scale operations ect... -Budget management for rugby team -Oly stuff You already know my stance on References, Skills ect, don't need that crap. Edit: To clarify on demonstrating, look at the rugby part. You say it gave you leadership skills, then two bullets later you talk about on field leardership. Imo those points should be together. You gained leadership, communication, ect, BY or THROUGH the experience of being an on-field leader, integral part of the team or whatever. Now instead of saying "yeah I just have this skill" you are saying "I developed this skill by doing this _____" Oh, also you should include any results from your rugby team, ie winning anything, quarterfinalists, player of the year, ect. -For the SCMA, i literally JUST joined so i don't have much to say about it, by the end of the year i will though. Should i just remove this for now? -Warehouse experience, even at a laboring level, i feel is relevant to applying for any sort of internship as you just get a "feel" for who/what/when/where/how shit as to get done as warehousing is a pretty large part of logistics. -Dining services job - again i mostly want to get across that i was part of a large scale operation - a lot of supply chain managing goes into serving thousands of people a day -Lawyer internship - I mostly have this because i used to be pre-law and switched to supply chain. If nothing my boss will give me a great referral/recommendation because he's smart, successful, a top lawyer in the state, and a friend. Just trying to make it sound like i'm either a) well-rounded or b) somehow relevant to SCM. Should i just remove the part about court? Keep in mind i am applying for an internship...which is what i will be using to gather truly relevant experience in my field to THEN apply for a job. | ||
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Deleted User 101379
4849 Posts
On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: -Dining services job - again i mostly want to get across that i was part of a large scale operation - a lot of supply chain managing goes into serving thousands of people a day You didn't make it clear (at least to me) that it's something large scale. To me it sounds more like "Fried Burgers for McDonalds". Highlight the work you did that was important to supply chain management stuff and everything else should be done in 2-3 words. EDIT: Didn't see that you updated that part, but still i don't see how supply chain management comes into it. | ||
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bonifaceviii
Canada2890 Posts
On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: -For the SCMA, i literally JUST joined so i don't have much to say about it, by the end of the year i will though. Then, for the love of God, don't include it. There's no shittier way to bomb an interview (and to waste people's time) than your potential employwer asking you to elaborate on an item they think is very relevant and you flubbering because you don't actually know anything about it. On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: -Warehouse experience, even at a laboring level, i feel is relevant to applying for any sort of internship as you just get a "feel" for who/what/when/where/how shit as to get done as warehousing is a pretty large part of logistics. I completely agree. I have no problem with this section. On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: -Dining services job - again i mostly want to get across that i was part of a large scale operation - a lot of supply chain managing goes into serving thousands of people a day The problem is that those two things don't necessarily follow. Unless you were actually doing supply chain management for the dining services company it really doesn't matter how big the company was that you worked for. It's not the size of the company, it's the size of the job. On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: -Lawyer internship - I mostly have this because i used to be pre-law and switched to supply chain. If nothing my boss will give me a great referral/recommendation because he's smart, successful, and a friend. Just trying to make it sound like i'm either a) well-rounded or b) somehow relevant to SCM Include it as an activity, then. It's great to have character references from stuff you do on the side (charity and volunteering work is a great example), but you're making it seem like this position was part of your working history and then not backing it up. On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: Keep in mind i am applying for an internship...which is what i will be using to gather truly relevant experience in my field to THEN apply for a job. That's fine, but you need to be able to back up what little experience you do have. This resume is writing huge cheques that you can't possibly cash. | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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Orpheos
United States1663 Posts
try to tailor these statements to the kind of qualities the internship is looking for. be it analytical skills, organizational skills etc. also some stuff is extraneous. like "served thousands of customers daily". | ||
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emperorchampion
Canada9496 Posts
On October 07 2011 00:45 decafchicken wrote: -Warehouse experience, even at a laboring level, i feel is relevant to applying for any sort of internship as you just get a "feel" for who/what/when/where/how shit as to get done as warehousing is a pretty large part of logistics. -Dining services job - again i mostly want to get across that i was part of a large scale operation - a lot of supply chain managing goes into serving thousands of people a day Ok, now explain how working in a warehouse contributes to your knowledge of logistics. No one gives a shit if you can pack boxes if you can't apply that knowledge to the field. BUT if you can convince your employer that it is an applicable skill, and that you have gained a mastery over it, then you have a huge advantage over other applicants. Don't write "packed 1-1000 boxes/day", write "gained understanding of the basis of logistics and supply through first hand warehouse experience" or something of the like. Under the Packing job, probably all the points except for the one about training can be combined into a single, informative, effective point. Similarly with the dining service. Use the extra lines to space things out a bit more, it looks pretty cluttered right now. Edit: Actually the spacing is pretty decent lol, nvm about that. and a few wording edits. | ||
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UrASofty
Canada772 Posts
On October 07 2011 01:35 Orpheos wrote: you want more of your statements to be like the first one of your rugby club. tell what you did but also say what skills you learned or demonstrated(unless its super obvious but even then consider doing it). try to tailor these statements to the kind of qualities the internship is looking for. be it analytical skills, organizational skills etc. also some stuff is extraneous. like "served thousands of customers daily". this. instead of just saying what you did tie it into a skill. served thousands of customers daily, try and relate it to time management skills or multitasking or some other skill. also i'm not sure how other people do their resumes but my university taught us to usually include a summary of skills/qualifications at the very top. i.e. ability to multiask in fast paced environment (you worked at a restaurant) - good team work skills (rugby), organized, proven leader etc etc (don't just say it though tell them where and how you developed the skill) if you don't want to include a skills summary that's fine but just fine tune some of the stuff you've said in the work experience section. as someone earlier in the thread mentioned follow this guideline, your task(what you did), anything you overcame, and the skills you developed (what you learned). | ||
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emperorchampion
Canada9496 Posts
On October 07 2011 02:40 UrASofty wrote: this. instead of just saying what you did tie it into a skill. served thousands of customers daily, try and relate it to time management skills or multitasking or some other skill. also i'm not sure how other people do their resumes but my university taught us to usually include a summary of skills/qualifications at the very top. i.e. ability to multiask in fast paced environment (you worked at a restaurant) - good team work skills (rugby), organized, proven leader etc etc (don't just say it though tell them where and how you developed the skill) if you don't want to include a skills summary that's fine but just fine tune some of the stuff you've said in the work experience section. as someone earlier in the thread mentioned follow this guideline, your task(what you did), anything you overcame, and the skills you developed (what you learned). Imo he doesn't have enough room to include a skill summary, also imo he's better off representing skills through activities. | ||
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udgnim
United States8024 Posts
employers are not really interested in your daily duties, but they are interested in the skills you used to accomplish those duties and any notable accomplishments for example, if your manager set goals/quotas to meet and you were able to consistently meet or exceed those goals/quotas, then make sure that is stated on your resume. Example: Consistently met and exceeded shipping quotas through prudent usage of time management and prioritization skills this tells the employer that you can prioritize and manage your time well to meet goals so unless you're looking to become a warehouse intern, I'm pretty sure things like * Picking orders and loading/unloading shipments * Tracking and placing inventory in warehouse are unimportant to an employer. if you still want to make mention of those, you can still repackage them into something like this: Helped expedite the picking order process to load and unload shipments through active communication with team members this tells the employer that you can work with others to accomplish tasks and that you understand that good communication is an integral part of the process. the gist of it is that you need to avoid being too general, highlight the skills you used to do your job, state any notable accomplishments at that job, and orient the job description statements to what is important to the employer I also think you should be more specific with your job titles. "Warehouse Employee" and "Intern" are too generic for me. A more specific title will give the employer a much better initial impression of what your duties & responsibilities and the description statements will help expand upon that. | ||
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LosingID8
CA10828 Posts
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supaplex
United States75 Posts
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kainzero
United States5211 Posts
On October 06 2011 23:27 decafchicken wrote: Thoughts on whether or not to keep Skills - microsoft bullshit and References available upon request on there? I think References upon request is pretty obvious so that it doesn't need to be there. I feel like Microsoft skills are extremely important if you can demonstrate how well you can use them. "I can write in Word" is not very telling... but something like "Can design spreadsheets in Excel to perform linear regression analysis and can link Excel data to Access databases" is pretty cool. (my experience is that people over 35 are quite awful with computers and they don't know what they're missing, so you gotta bring it to them.) | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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AoN.DimSum
United States2983 Posts
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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Dalguno
United States2446 Posts
On October 07 2011 10:15 decafchicken wrote: first callback! got an interview tomorrow with a big company Awesome, good luck! | ||
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Manifesto7
Osaka27149 Posts
On October 07 2011 10:15 decafchicken wrote: first callback! got an interview tomorrow with a big company 10% of all future earnings go into the TL.net Advice Account. | ||
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LaSt)ChAnCe
United States2179 Posts
contrary to what someone said, do NOT put your references on your resume you should have a section of skills and abilities (aside from what you have outlined in your experience) i also like to put "key achievements" for each of my previous jobs. i am also personally (personal preference only) against having an "activities" section - when i was a supervisor and did a lot of interviews, i never looked at that shit. if you want, PM me and i can send you a copy of my resume. it's IT, but the same concepts transfer over, and it's helped me every job and promotion i've applied for also, udgnim's advice is sound | ||
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emperorchampion
Canada9496 Posts
On October 07 2011 11:02 Manifesto7 wrote: 10% of all future earnings go into the TL.net Advice Account. Hahahaha | ||
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AoN.DimSum
United States2983 Posts
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Melchior
United States112 Posts
A couple more notes: -Just stick with one of the GPAs -- since they're the same number, having them both doesn't add anything. If anything, your major GPA should be higher than your overall GPA, so just put the cumulative one. -Use a consistent date format. May-August, 2011 for your law internship should be May 2011-August 2011. Consider changing your activity dates to Month Year format too. Abbreviating dates is also acceptable, as long as you do it consistently. -Please use tables or some other method to make sure your dates are actually right-justified. Your dates for SCMA and Rugby are noticeably out of alignment and it looks sloppy. -You don't have them right now, but in case you feel tempted to add them back on: objectives and references are not necessary. If you're applying for a specific job post, they know what your objective is, and if you're sending it out as a general resume, a general objective tells them absolutely nothing. Similarly, if they want references they'll ask for them, and it's just a waste of space to put "references available upon request." All that being said, a resume can only get you so far. If I had two tips for job hunting, they'd be 1) don't sell yourself short, and 2) it's a numbers game -- there is no such thing as a "safety" job, so apply to as many as possible. Good luck with your job search! I'm in the same boat myself, so maybe I'll have my own resume-critiquing blog up soon! :-P | ||
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decafchicken
United States20022 Posts
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LaSt)ChAnCe
United States2179 Posts
On October 08 2011 01:51 decafchicken wrote: any interview advice? :D smile a lot, if they ask you something you don't know the answer to - admit it. honesty and humbleness will get you a long way they will probably ask you what your greatest weakness is. come up with something that isn't career or production affecting and doesn't fault your character (a commonly quoted example is for someone who has moved within the past few years to say that their greatest weakness is that they have no local professional network) smile. | ||
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HereBeDragons
1429 Posts
On October 08 2011 02:16 LaSt)ChAnCe wrote: smile a lot, if they ask you something you don't know the answer to - admit it. honesty and humbleness will get you a long way they will probably ask you what your greatest weakness is. come up with something that isn't career or production affecting and doesn't fault your character (a commonly quoted example is for someone who has moved within the past few years to say that their greatest weakness is that they have no local professional network) smile. Yes, I really agree with the smile and politeness. Smiling a lot makes things less awkward; it's a much nicer atmosphere, and it can buy you valuable time to think. Be-careful about your body language: namely don't shake your legs, spin a pen, or anything like that during the interview. Relax and move you hands while you're talking, you're not a stone. The interviewer and you with both be looking at each other the whole time, so a lot of communication can go through via your gestures as well as things you say. Although, I can't comment much on this since interviews in countries with different cultural background are not quite the same sometimes. At the end of the day, no one knows yourself better than you, so our advices won't matter that much. You know what to do. | ||
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SpoR
United States1542 Posts
So instead of like 4 bullet points that are just the generic "Consistantly blanked blank blank blankedly" it's : + Show Spoiler + Managed records and commissions via Excel. Organized spreadsheet reports for monthly submissions via mail including copies of customer contracts and identification files. Sold, exchanged, and returned products and plans for customers and handled all money transactions via Wireless Standard and XCharge. Activated, upgraded, and modified customer accounts through secure servers (EROES, SPOT). Maintained integrity and outstanding rapport with customers and their private information (SS#, DL, contracts, bills). Trouble shooting and break/fix problem solving for customers and the store, with all makes and models of mobile devices; including laptops, routers, printers, and other accessories. Ordered and negotiated merchandise from various sources, often finding the best deals to save on cost and increase revenue. Assisted customers in choosing the best products for their technical level and educated them in the products and devices they purchased. Placed various calls with Verizon call center to resolve issues out of my jurisdiction to assist customers further with their technical/billing issues. Negotiated deposits/temporary contracts for out of stock phones and placed calls and arranged times to meet with clients. Organized meetings with the owner and co-workers regularly to brainstorm ideas and techniques to increase sales and new projects involving FiOS products, and the latest technologies. Occasionally set up booths and events during and after store hours to up-sell FiOS products and cell phone related services. Continually learning and researching company and competitor’s products through internal educational programs as well as my own internet and word of mouth resources. Regularly received shipments to input merchandise data (Wireless Standard) for use in sale, to keep records, prevent shrinkage, and to view trends in popular items. Trained new employees with the methods and techniques I have learned in sales, as well as in the tools, information, and programs needed to complete transactions and catalog data. On the other hand, I haven't gotten a job so I don't know maybe I need another critique myself. edit- in fact i'm going to go ahead and make the same blog with my resume (and ill put my old one up too so you can see it). | ||
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SpoR
United States1542 Posts
On October 08 2011 02:33 HereBeDragons wrote: Yes, I really agree with the smile and politeness. Smiling a lot makes things less awkward; it's a much nicer atmosphere, and it can buy you valuable time to think. Be-careful about your body language: namely don't shake your legs, spin a pen, or anything like that during the interview. Relax and move you hands while you're talking, you're not a stone. The interviewer and you with both be looking at each other the whole time, so a lot of communication can go through via your gestures as well as things you say. Although, I can't comment much on this since interviews in countries with different cultural background are not quite the same sometimes. At the end of the day, no one knows yourself better than you, so our advices won't matter that much. You know what to do. Make a list of your 6 best attributes, its hard to think of them on the spot. And the question comes up often enough. | ||
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LaSt)ChAnCe
United States2179 Posts
On October 08 2011 20:44 SpoR wrote: I went to a IT place for an interview like 9 months ago and the guy told me that my resume (which looked similar to yours) was very poor. He said that he used to be the main interview guy for CEOs and CFOs etc. And I should elaborate specifically everything that I did in the jobs. So instead of like 4 bullet points that are just the generic "Consistantly blanked blank blank blankedly" it's : + Show Spoiler + Managed records and commissions via Excel. Organized spreadsheet reports for monthly submissions via mail including copies of customer contracts and identification files. Sold, exchanged, and returned products and plans for customers and handled all money transactions via Wireless Standard and XCharge. Activated, upgraded, and modified customer accounts through secure servers (EROES, SPOT). Maintained integrity and outstanding rapport with customers and their private information (SS#, DL, contracts, bills). Trouble shooting and break/fix problem solving for customers and the store, with all makes and models of mobile devices; including laptops, routers, printers, and other accessories. Ordered and negotiated merchandise from various sources, often finding the best deals to save on cost and increase revenue. Assisted customers in choosing the best products for their technical level and educated them in the products and devices they purchased. Placed various calls with Verizon call center to resolve issues out of my jurisdiction to assist customers further with their technical/billing issues. Negotiated deposits/temporary contracts for out of stock phones and placed calls and arranged times to meet with clients. Organized meetings with the owner and co-workers regularly to brainstorm ideas and techniques to increase sales and new projects involving FiOS products, and the latest technologies. Occasionally set up booths and events during and after store hours to up-sell FiOS products and cell phone related services. Continually learning and researching company and competitor’s products through internal educational programs as well as my own internet and word of mouth resources. Regularly received shipments to input merchandise data (Wireless Standard) for use in sale, to keep records, prevent shrinkage, and to view trends in popular items. Trained new employees with the methods and techniques I have learned in sales, as well as in the tools, information, and programs needed to complete transactions and catalog data. On the other hand, I haven't gotten a job so I don't know maybe I need another critique myself. edit- in fact i'm going to go ahead and make the same blog with my resume (and ill put my old one up too so you can see it). CEO's and CFO's don't really get interviews.. lol | ||
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mmp
United States2130 Posts
On October 08 2011 01:51 decafchicken wrote: any interview advice? :D Just go in confident, be yourself. Your interviewer is working with your resume and that will guide the discussion, so hopefully you're already confident and knowledgeable about yourself. Your interviewer will likely pose questions/problems and ask how you'd solve them. If you're not certain, just remember to be honest about what you do and do not know/understand and what you would need to learn to reach a solid answer -- never guess, never make shit up. | ||
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BlackJack
United States10568 Posts
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