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Hi TL!
I've had plenty fun learning html and after 2 days of heavy study I've managed to implement a Javascript image slider to my webcomic at www.ballongo.com. I guess the code is bad but after plenty trial and error it actually does change images when ordered to!
I also made a new logo specially designed for Teamliquid.
And finally, for this Monday update, I have published 3 new episodes:
Part 20. Barbecue
www.ballongo.com
Part 19. Feeding Time
www.ballongo.com
Part 18. Defence
www.ballongo.com
Thank you for your time! Harsh feedback welcome
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It'd be a lot better if the colors were solid. At the same time, though the coloring could benefit from some uniformity, I was disappointed at the overuse of simple geometric shapes and static imagery. I felt that going frame to frame was a bit of a "find the differences" game rather than a real presentation.
Ambitious project, GL.
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GJ on the javascript n stuff I suppose, but I'm not sure what you expect people to think about the comic themselves. Maybe if you should elaborate on what you are trying to create here because for now im just looking at a couple of shapes with varying colors and some facial expressions..
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I fixed the background in your tl header and made the colors a bit more vibrant and smoothed the edges
Also a little advice. people that read web comics generally lose interest very quickly. You need to change up the scenery a bit I think if you want to really capture peoples interest. make your guys go to the moon or the ocean or paris or something to keep it fresh.
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Good stuff. Like the simplistic approach.
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its cartman in rock form!
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On November 19 2012 05:30 Coagulation wrote:I fixed the background in your tl header and made the colors a bit more vibrant and smoothed the edges a bit. + Show Spoiler +Also a little advice. people that read web comics generally lose interest very quickly. You need to change up the scenery a bit I think if you want to really capture peoples interest. make your guys go to the moon or the ocean or paris or something to keep it fresh. Thanks for the header buff Coagulation!
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Land for those background trees. I bet they are so happy now.
Though, I'm having a little trouble understand what's supposed to be funny in the second one.
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On November 20 2012 01:37 DigiGnar wrote: Land for those background trees. I bet they are so happy now. Though, I'm having a little trouble understand what's supposed to be funny in the second one. If you mean the one with the mother bird feeding her young: The brown character tries to mimic the young birds to get fed as well, but he ain't, so he is sad. Perhaps I didn't do his mouth and expression eager-looking enough.
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On November 20 2012 02:35 HowardRoark wrote:Show nested quote +On November 20 2012 01:37 DigiGnar wrote: Land for those background trees. I bet they are so happy now. Though, I'm having a little trouble understand what's supposed to be funny in the second one. If you mean the one with the mother bird feeding her young: The brown character tries to mimic the young birds to get fed as well, but he ain't, so he is sad. Perhaps I didn't do his mouth and expression eager-looking enough.
Maybe a beak!
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Tbh I thought the nest was the tree's face or something.
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On November 20 2012 04:11 DigiGnar wrote:Show nested quote +On November 20 2012 02:35 HowardRoark wrote:On November 20 2012 01:37 DigiGnar wrote: Land for those background trees. I bet they are so happy now. Though, I'm having a little trouble understand what's supposed to be funny in the second one. If you mean the one with the mother bird feeding her young: The brown character tries to mimic the young birds to get fed as well, but he ain't, so he is sad. Perhaps I didn't do his mouth and expression eager-looking enough. Maybe a beak! Hehe, maybe it wasn't as obvious as I thought. So, I made the baby birds twitter by adding a note symbol, and then have our hero shape its mouth as a beak and try to imitate the twitter of the baby birds (but louder and out of tune). Hopefully it is clearer like this. + Show Spoiler +
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O: face shud be 2nd panel, = ( face 3rd panel. 4th panel shud be little birds taking a shit on the rock while other rocks laughing :D
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On November 20 2012 06:34 HeavOnEarth wrote: O: face shud be 2nd panel, = ( face 3rd panel. 4th panel shud be little birds taking a shit on the rock while other rocks laughing :D Allright, I made you an R-rated unofficial version
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...Big Dango Family?
On November 20 2012 06:34 HeavOnEarth wrote: O: face shud be 2nd panel, = ( face 3rd panel. 4th panel shud be little birds taking a shit on the rock while other rocks laughing :D I like "r u for rela?" look of the bird though. Shitting is bit too unsubtle to be funny for me, but everyone has their preferences. :p Also that was actually pretty fast update..
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nice. you got fan fic already lol
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Make him chirp twice, so he looks needy and pathetic! 2 & 3. INTERACTIVE WEB-COMIC INITIATE WARP-SPEED.
Then, you should do a follow up with the birds when they grow up. (crapping up on the whatever the hell that things is.)
Though, KUDOS on that chirp.
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On November 20 2012 10:11 DigiGnar wrote: Make him chirp twice, so he looks needy and pathetic! 2 & 3. INTERACTIVE WEB-COMIC INITIATE WARP-SPEED.
Then, you should do a follow up with the birds when they grow up. (crapping up on the whatever the hell that things is.)
Though, KUDOS on that chirp. The follow up turned out sad and grim. But nature is sometimes. So is revenge. I call this highly unofficial episode for "The first flight of the baby bird":
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You should move things around more between frames so it's easier to show us what you want us to see.
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