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Caller
Profile Blog Joined September 2007
Poland8075 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-07-16 22:39:23
July 16 2012 22:37 GMT
#4861
good story except that byakuren is buddhist, and buddhists don't believe in "God" per se, also usually buddhists see life as a cycle, and such a principled man would, in buddhists lives, already be closer to nirvana, so this would in essence be a happy mment, not quite the sad one.

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Archas
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States6531 Posts
July 16 2012 22:53 GMT
#4862
Yeah, you're right about that. I don't know too much about Buddhism, so I basically took some artistic liberty in writing. I'm glad you liked the story anyway, though.
The room is ripe with the stench of bitches!
Caller
Profile Blog Joined September 2007
Poland8075 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-07-17 03:09:45
July 17 2012 03:08 GMT
#4863
this phoenix project so troll

first put naked loli vampires on cover
then make all songs short versions

but there is a true administrator and old yuanxian, so i don't mind
the old yuanxian is giving me chills
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Caller
Profile Blog Joined September 2007
Poland8075 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-07-17 03:16:43
July 17 2012 03:16 GMT
#4864
on another note, ui-70 apparently realized that people like listening to touhou music, cuz they're releasing another album

listen to the crossfade here http://ui-70.sakura.ne.jp/nyohi/mp3/ui70-12summer-cfdemo.mp3

meh, ui-70 were always demetori's inferior cousins, but at least they're going away from that techno crap
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Archas
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States6531 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-07-17 03:33:39
July 17 2012 03:27 GMT
#4865
More UI-70 is good. Not sure I like the emphasis on the synth-guitar lead, though. I much prefer the "dirty metal" style like from Bewitching Flowers Bloom in the World of Law, or in that Wonderful Life in the Cemetery from the crossfade. I see that style as their niche; if they go with that, I don't see UI--70 as an inferior Demetori.

In other news, I found the most bizarre Touhou arrangement ever.

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Dullahan
Profile Blog Joined April 2009
United States248 Posts
July 17 2012 04:52 GMT
#4866
On July 12 2012 06:09 Dullahan wrote:
So a few months ago I decided I would try importing some Touhou music. Ended up getting 2 Demetori CDs and added on a Tutti Sound CD that seemed interesting from some brief spot checks on youtube.

I finally got around to listening to the Tutti Sound album a few weeks ago during the drive down the coast of CA and back up, and wow this CD was totally worth every penny. Made the trip so epic.

Tutti Sound: Toho Film Music Selection
(EoSD arrangements)
http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL81E70C50F39990CC

And my parents really liked it too XD


Minor repost, I fixed the order of the songs from Geinokai's uploaded playlist (it was in reverse order previously)
http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL8123CB0F5A2D1232

Preview:
d3_crescentia
Profile Blog Joined May 2009
United States4054 Posts
July 17 2012 13:03 GMT
#4867
In case anyone's interested in NSFL Touhou art:

http://strangetouhouart.tumblr.com/
once, not long ago, there was a moon here
JSH
Profile Blog Joined July 2009
United States4109 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-07-17 16:12:31
July 17 2012 15:31 GMT
#4868
Japanize Dream
C-Clays

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mmm~
"It's called a miracle because it doesn't happen" - Just like my chances of reaching C- on ICCUP
dkpl
Profile Joined March 2009
Canada1485 Posts
July 17 2012 18:00 GMT
#4869
On July 17 2012 12:08 Caller wrote:
this phoenix project so troll

first put naked loli vampires on cover
then make all songs short versions

but there is a true administrator and old yuanxian, so i don't mind
the old yuanxian is giving me chills


WHERE

oh for C82? \o/


Blah, seems like our friend isn't going to C82 anymore, boooooo
Anopob: also, in between the most familiar parts, necrofantasy is like kekeke and necrofantasia is like bum b um bum
Caller
Profile Blog Joined September 2007
Poland8075 Posts
July 17 2012 18:03 GMT
#4870
On July 18 2012 03:00 dkpl wrote:
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On July 17 2012 12:08 Caller wrote:
this phoenix project so troll

first put naked loli vampires on cover
then make all songs short versions

but there is a true administrator and old yuanxian, so i don't mind
the old yuanxian is giving me chills


WHERE

oh for C82? \o/


Blah, seems like our friend isn't going to C82 anymore, boooooo


this is from retaisai, just a sample cd of the songs they're doing (only bits of each song)

i'll upload it tonight
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dkpl
Profile Joined March 2009
Canada1485 Posts
July 18 2012 00:41 GMT
#4871
Anopob, if you're wondering why I haven't been in mumu lately, it's because ever since I set up a second display, the bandwidth was (unbeknownst to me) killing my remote desktop connection with massive lag. I've managed to disable the second display remotely (only took about 7 hours of constant attempts where I would d/c before I actually clicked anything) so starting tomorrow, I'll likely be back to hanging out in mumuplayer at work.
Anopob: also, in between the most familiar parts, necrofantasy is like kekeke and necrofantasia is like bum b um bum
Archas
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States6531 Posts
July 18 2012 00:57 GMT
#4872
On July 17 2012 06:31 Archas wrote:
I was bored, so I decided to write a short story.

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The old man was dying.

We all knew there was naught to be done for him. The old man, once so vigorous and hale, was slowly succumbing to the incurable illness. My heart ached to see him in such a state; this man had, just months ago, been cheerfully spreading the words and law of our God to the temple visitors, or assisting the village people in their daily tasks. What a vibrant personality he had exhibited! Even those who traveled a path ill-suited for the Faith could not help but admire the man. Hardly a week went by without one of the villagers venturing to our temple to express their gratitude for his selflessness and charity. From the very moment the old man inherited his dharma name, he had worked solely toward the betterment of his fellows.

No longer. Lying before me was a husk, the near-skeletal remains of what was once a proud and noble monk. The glint in his eyes had dimmed, and every breath was a struggle. A warrior to the last, our old friend…

He had led a long, fruitful life, full of joy and wonder. I knew that his time was exhausted, but it pained me no less to understand that simple truth. Surely there was a less agonizing end to the First Life. Surely, he had earned more than this! Surely, he could...

Sitting at the old man’s bedside, these thoughts consumed me all at once, and my discipline faltered. My vision grew blurry with tears. Tears of rage, grief, sadness. It wasn’t fair! He deserved better! A more noble soul could not be found, and yet he lies here, wasting away from the illness, wracked by pain in every waking moment! Could nothing be done?!

“Dry your tears, my child.”

It was the old man, having just awakened from another of his increasingly frequent slumbers. The remark struck me like a blow, though he meant no unkindness in his words. Rather, the impact of his words shamed me. I was weeping for a man that would return once more after departing his mortal shell. There was no need to mourn one who, having achieved nirvana, would again grace the world with his presence.

I gently grasped his hand, childishly wishing that such a futile gesture would keep him in this world. “How… are you feeling, Master?”

The old man, my cherished mentor, mustered a weak smile. “Do not worry for me. All is as it should be. Though my time is short, you must not mourn for me.”

“I hear the truth in your words, but… it’s so difficult to…”

My master uttered a short laugh, though his weakened body twisted the sound into something monstrous. “Your devotion is flattering, my child, but do not let emotion cloud your senses. This is all part of the cycle…” His words trailed off, eyes losing focus even as they remained locked on my own.

All became a whirlwind in my mind. Panic gripped me as the teachings, the Faith, the Eightfold Path, escaped me in that moment of terror. No, not yet! There is more I must say! I whispered his name, gently shook his hand. No response was availed… yet something was amiss. His breathing, labored as it was, continued. His grip on my own hands remained. The old man was not dead… yet something had afflicted him.

Suddenly, his focus returned. A spark of life emerged as the familiar glint appeared in my master’s eyes. And he spoke, not with the monumental effort of a man soon to die, but with the same vitality that defined his life:

“Scroll. Fetch me a scroll.”

“What? I… I don’t…”

“Fetch the scroll. Quickly!” Such force of voice was unheard of in the old man. He was always soft-spoken; firm at times, yes, but never one to raise his voice unnecessarily. Driven partly by the request of a dying man, and partly by confusion from such a strange reaction, I released my grasp on the master’s hand and withdrew a scroll and quill from the bedside chest with all haste.

“Listen closely, my child. Do not question the things I will ask you to pen, for I am not long for this world. Do as you are told.”

I readied the quill, even as a kind of fear crept into the back of my mind. This man before me was not the master I knew. What was happening?

“The young girl who frequents the shrine. The transcendent, the Itinerant One. She will show us the way.”

“Master, I don’t—“

“Write it down!”

The old man had… shouted at me. Behavior in defiance of every facet of his personality. I was shocked, but retained the presence of mind to put to paper this mysterious phrase. Scarcely did I finish before he spoke again, more hoarsely than before.

“Foe becomes friend, and friend to foe. An unholy savior sees the virtue of the darkest light. Penitence exacted for a kindness unshared.”

Madness. The old man was succumbing at last to the ravages of the illness. He was babbling incoherencies, nothing more than —

“WRITE IT DOWN!!”, the master bellowed. Such strength did his outburst take that his mouth contorted in a demonic fashion. Blood trickled from his split lips, as he began to tremble unconsciously; whether by excitement or insanity, I could not say.

Terror now ran wild through my body, the sheer incomprehensibility of what was transpiring nearly paralyzing my actions. “Master, what is happening? I don’t understand!”, I pled… though I did as he demanded.

The old man ignored me, and persisted in his mania. “Fear of power lost leads to fear of those who wield that power. The thousand-year crucible will be shattered by unsuspecting hands. The land will know the Lotus!”

The glint in his eyes shone, an impossible radiance that threatened to blind me. Slowly, the light subsided, to reveal… the old dying man. Whatever otherworldly vigor had possessed him had departed, leaving a creature even more pitiful than before. He spoke once more, in a tremulous whisper that seemed ready to collapse.

“… Remember the name… the one who guides the Lotus… Myouren…”

His time was at an end. The shock from that supernatural event nearly kept me from seeing it, but I caught it in time. Today, this man would die.

I waited silently, for he had more to impart upon me, though his voice became ever fainter. I strained to make out his dying words.

“…-eda no Aichi… -ust know… -ll her…”

His eyes closed. His breathing all but ceased. Silence so profound it became almost deafening.

Then my master spoke one final word.

+ Show Spoiler +
"Na... mu... san...”

Just out of curiosity, does anyone else have any feedback on this story besides Caller?
The room is ripe with the stench of bitches!
Chronopolis
Profile Joined April 2009
Canada1484 Posts
July 18 2012 03:49 GMT
#4873
On July 18 2012 09:57 Archas wrote:
Show nested quote +
On July 17 2012 06:31 Archas wrote:
I was bored, so I decided to write a short story.

+ Show Spoiler +
The old man was dying.

We all knew there was naught to be done for him. The old man, once so vigorous and hale, was slowly succumbing to the incurable illness. My heart ached to see him in such a state; this man had, just months ago, been cheerfully spreading the words and law of our God to the temple visitors, or assisting the village people in their daily tasks. What a vibrant personality he had exhibited! Even those who traveled a path ill-suited for the Faith could not help but admire the man. Hardly a week went by without one of the villagers venturing to our temple to express their gratitude for his selflessness and charity. From the very moment the old man inherited his dharma name, he had worked solely toward the betterment of his fellows.

No longer. Lying before me was a husk, the near-skeletal remains of what was once a proud and noble monk. The glint in his eyes had dimmed, and every breath was a struggle. A warrior to the last, our old friend…

He had led a long, fruitful life, full of joy and wonder. I knew that his time was exhausted, but it pained me no less to understand that simple truth. Surely there was a less agonizing end to the First Life. Surely, he had earned more than this! Surely, he could...

Sitting at the old man’s bedside, these thoughts consumed me all at once, and my discipline faltered. My vision grew blurry with tears. Tears of rage, grief, sadness. It wasn’t fair! He deserved better! A more noble soul could not be found, and yet he lies here, wasting away from the illness, wracked by pain in every waking moment! Could nothing be done?!

“Dry your tears, my child.”

It was the old man, having just awakened from another of his increasingly frequent slumbers. The remark struck me like a blow, though he meant no unkindness in his words. Rather, the impact of his words shamed me. I was weeping for a man that would return once more after departing his mortal shell. There was no need to mourn one who, having achieved nirvana, would again grace the world with his presence.

I gently grasped his hand, childishly wishing that such a futile gesture would keep him in this world. “How… are you feeling, Master?”

The old man, my cherished mentor, mustered a weak smile. “Do not worry for me. All is as it should be. Though my time is short, you must not mourn for me.”

“I hear the truth in your words, but… it’s so difficult to…”

My master uttered a short laugh, though his weakened body twisted the sound into something monstrous. “Your devotion is flattering, my child, but do not let emotion cloud your senses. This is all part of the cycle…” His words trailed off, eyes losing focus even as they remained locked on my own.

All became a whirlwind in my mind. Panic gripped me as the teachings, the Faith, the Eightfold Path, escaped me in that moment of terror. No, not yet! There is more I must say! I whispered his name, gently shook his hand. No response was availed… yet something was amiss. His breathing, labored as it was, continued. His grip on my own hands remained. The old man was not dead… yet something had afflicted him.

Suddenly, his focus returned. A spark of life emerged as the familiar glint appeared in my master’s eyes. And he spoke, not with the monumental effort of a man soon to die, but with the same vitality that defined his life:

“Scroll. Fetch me a scroll.”

“What? I… I don’t…”

“Fetch the scroll. Quickly!” Such force of voice was unheard of in the old man. He was always soft-spoken; firm at times, yes, but never one to raise his voice unnecessarily. Driven partly by the request of a dying man, and partly by confusion from such a strange reaction, I released my grasp on the master’s hand and withdrew a scroll and quill from the bedside chest with all haste.

“Listen closely, my child. Do not question the things I will ask you to pen, for I am not long for this world. Do as you are told.”

I readied the quill, even as a kind of fear crept into the back of my mind. This man before me was not the master I knew. What was happening?

“The young girl who frequents the shrine. The transcendent, the Itinerant One. She will show us the way.”

“Master, I don’t—“

“Write it down!”

The old man had… shouted at me. Behavior in defiance of every facet of his personality. I was shocked, but retained the presence of mind to put to paper this mysterious phrase. Scarcely did I finish before he spoke again, more hoarsely than before.

“Foe becomes friend, and friend to foe. An unholy savior sees the virtue of the darkest light. Penitence exacted for a kindness unshared.”

Madness. The old man was succumbing at last to the ravages of the illness. He was babbling incoherencies, nothing more than —

“WRITE IT DOWN!!”, the master bellowed. Such strength did his outburst take that his mouth contorted in a demonic fashion. Blood trickled from his split lips, as he began to tremble unconsciously; whether by excitement or insanity, I could not say.

Terror now ran wild through my body, the sheer incomprehensibility of what was transpiring nearly paralyzing my actions. “Master, what is happening? I don’t understand!”, I pled… though I did as he demanded.

The old man ignored me, and persisted in his mania. “Fear of power lost leads to fear of those who wield that power. The thousand-year crucible will be shattered by unsuspecting hands. The land will know the Lotus!”

The glint in his eyes shone, an impossible radiance that threatened to blind me. Slowly, the light subsided, to reveal… the old dying man. Whatever otherworldly vigor had possessed him had departed, leaving a creature even more pitiful than before. He spoke once more, in a tremulous whisper that seemed ready to collapse.

“… Remember the name… the one who guides the Lotus… Myouren…”

His time was at an end. The shock from that supernatural event nearly kept me from seeing it, but I caught it in time. Today, this man would die.

I waited silently, for he had more to impart upon me, though his voice became ever fainter. I strained to make out his dying words.

“…-eda no Aichi… -ust know… -ll her…”

His eyes closed. His breathing all but ceased. Silence so profound it became almost deafening.

Then my master spoke one final word.

+ Show Spoiler +
"Na... mu... san...”

Just out of curiosity, does anyone else have any feedback on this story besides Caller?


The writing is powerful, though the scene is slightly cliche. What does a Heida reincarnation and Namu-san mean though? I didn't say anything cause I didn't get the implications of the story.
Kaneh
Profile Joined April 2009
Canada737 Posts
July 18 2012 08:14 GMT
#4874
On July 18 2012 09:57 Archas wrote:
Show nested quote +
On July 17 2012 06:31 Archas wrote:
I was bored, so I decided to write a short story.

+ Show Spoiler +
The old man was dying.

We all knew there was naught to be done for him. The old man, once so vigorous and hale, was slowly succumbing to the incurable illness. My heart ached to see him in such a state; this man had, just months ago, been cheerfully spreading the words and law of our God to the temple visitors, or assisting the village people in their daily tasks. What a vibrant personality he had exhibited! Even those who traveled a path ill-suited for the Faith could not help but admire the man. Hardly a week went by without one of the villagers venturing to our temple to express their gratitude for his selflessness and charity. From the very moment the old man inherited his dharma name, he had worked solely toward the betterment of his fellows.

No longer. Lying before me was a husk, the near-skeletal remains of what was once a proud and noble monk. The glint in his eyes had dimmed, and every breath was a struggle. A warrior to the last, our old friend…

He had led a long, fruitful life, full of joy and wonder. I knew that his time was exhausted, but it pained me no less to understand that simple truth. Surely there was a less agonizing end to the First Life. Surely, he had earned more than this! Surely, he could...

Sitting at the old man’s bedside, these thoughts consumed me all at once, and my discipline faltered. My vision grew blurry with tears. Tears of rage, grief, sadness. It wasn’t fair! He deserved better! A more noble soul could not be found, and yet he lies here, wasting away from the illness, wracked by pain in every waking moment! Could nothing be done?!

“Dry your tears, my child.”

It was the old man, having just awakened from another of his increasingly frequent slumbers. The remark struck me like a blow, though he meant no unkindness in his words. Rather, the impact of his words shamed me. I was weeping for a man that would return once more after departing his mortal shell. There was no need to mourn one who, having achieved nirvana, would again grace the world with his presence.

I gently grasped his hand, childishly wishing that such a futile gesture would keep him in this world. “How… are you feeling, Master?”

The old man, my cherished mentor, mustered a weak smile. “Do not worry for me. All is as it should be. Though my time is short, you must not mourn for me.”

“I hear the truth in your words, but… it’s so difficult to…”

My master uttered a short laugh, though his weakened body twisted the sound into something monstrous. “Your devotion is flattering, my child, but do not let emotion cloud your senses. This is all part of the cycle…” His words trailed off, eyes losing focus even as they remained locked on my own.

All became a whirlwind in my mind. Panic gripped me as the teachings, the Faith, the Eightfold Path, escaped me in that moment of terror. No, not yet! There is more I must say! I whispered his name, gently shook his hand. No response was availed… yet something was amiss. His breathing, labored as it was, continued. His grip on my own hands remained. The old man was not dead… yet something had afflicted him.

Suddenly, his focus returned. A spark of life emerged as the familiar glint appeared in my master’s eyes. And he spoke, not with the monumental effort of a man soon to die, but with the same vitality that defined his life:

“Scroll. Fetch me a scroll.”

“What? I… I don’t…”

“Fetch the scroll. Quickly!” Such force of voice was unheard of in the old man. He was always soft-spoken; firm at times, yes, but never one to raise his voice unnecessarily. Driven partly by the request of a dying man, and partly by confusion from such a strange reaction, I released my grasp on the master’s hand and withdrew a scroll and quill from the bedside chest with all haste.

“Listen closely, my child. Do not question the things I will ask you to pen, for I am not long for this world. Do as you are told.”

I readied the quill, even as a kind of fear crept into the back of my mind. This man before me was not the master I knew. What was happening?

“The young girl who frequents the shrine. The transcendent, the Itinerant One. She will show us the way.”

“Master, I don’t—“

“Write it down!”

The old man had… shouted at me. Behavior in defiance of every facet of his personality. I was shocked, but retained the presence of mind to put to paper this mysterious phrase. Scarcely did I finish before he spoke again, more hoarsely than before.

“Foe becomes friend, and friend to foe. An unholy savior sees the virtue of the darkest light. Penitence exacted for a kindness unshared.”

Madness. The old man was succumbing at last to the ravages of the illness. He was babbling incoherencies, nothing more than —

“WRITE IT DOWN!!”, the master bellowed. Such strength did his outburst take that his mouth contorted in a demonic fashion. Blood trickled from his split lips, as he began to tremble unconsciously; whether by excitement or insanity, I could not say.

Terror now ran wild through my body, the sheer incomprehensibility of what was transpiring nearly paralyzing my actions. “Master, what is happening? I don’t understand!”, I pled… though I did as he demanded.

The old man ignored me, and persisted in his mania. “Fear of power lost leads to fear of those who wield that power. The thousand-year crucible will be shattered by unsuspecting hands. The land will know the Lotus!”

The glint in his eyes shone, an impossible radiance that threatened to blind me. Slowly, the light subsided, to reveal… the old dying man. Whatever otherworldly vigor had possessed him had departed, leaving a creature even more pitiful than before. He spoke once more, in a tremulous whisper that seemed ready to collapse.

“… Remember the name… the one who guides the Lotus… Myouren…”

His time was at an end. The shock from that supernatural event nearly kept me from seeing it, but I caught it in time. Today, this man would die.

I waited silently, for he had more to impart upon me, though his voice became ever fainter. I strained to make out his dying words.

“…-eda no Aichi… -ust know… -ll her…”

His eyes closed. His breathing all but ceased. Silence so profound it became almost deafening.

Then my master spoke one final word.

+ Show Spoiler +
"Na... mu... san...”

Just out of curiosity, does anyone else have any feedback on this story besides Caller?


The descriptions and imagery is excellent, but I don't understand the plot. Is it simply a description of Byakuren's life? if so, then why is there a dying old man and his disciple? And why does it matter that he's in so much pain, or that a miraculous event happened?
Archas
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States6531 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-07-18 15:11:25
July 18 2012 15:10 GMT
#4875
On July 18 2012 12:49 Chronopolis wrote:
The writing is powerful, though the scene is slightly cliche. What does a Heida reincarnation and Namu-san mean though? I didn't say anything cause I didn't get the implications of the story.

To be honest, I focused a lot more on the writing than the plot, lol. I'm new at writing stories!

My goal for this was to keep the implications of the story purposefully vague, to let the reader imagine what had happened on their own. I wanted the different readers to come up with different possible reasons for how the story turned out as it did. Maybe it didn't work out so hot, but there it is.

On July 18 2012 17:14 Kaneh wrote:
The descriptions and imagery is excellent, but I don't understand the plot. Is it simply a description of Byakuren's life? if so, then why is there a dying old man and his disciple? And why does it matter that he's in so much pain, or that a miraculous event happened?

Again, writing > plot. I gotta work on that. If/when I write another short story, I'll put more effort into the backstory; I just wanted to sound cool, I guess. :D

Anyway, the way I imagined the plot: + Show Spoiler +
The old man is a Buddhist, the narrator is his disciple. The setting is a thousand or so years before the current Gensokyo (with Reimu running around), with Byakuren as a little girl. Byakuren visits the temple often, along with her brother, Myouren. It's coincidence that the old man is dying on that day from some disease; however, some prophetic power awakens within him, and while under the command of that power, he sees Byakuren's future. He urges his disciple to write down what he sees (though it's a typically cryptic vision, lol!), and as the power wears off, tells his disciple to seek out Hieda no Aichi (the first of the Are chroniclers) to inform her of this important event. He also tells the disciple to find Myouren, as he's the catalyst for making Byakuren the powerful monk that modern Gensokyo knows her as (since his early death causes her to seek immortality through black magic). The old man then dies.


Of course, you two are right in that the plot was weak and muddled. I tried to go for a narrative style that focused on that, but it didn't seem to work. I'll mix it up next time.

Thanks for the feedback, guys.
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Antiochus
Profile Joined March 2010
Canada548 Posts
July 18 2012 16:22 GMT
#4876
A friend of mine linked this to me, just going to leave it here for everyone else to enjoy.

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JSH
Profile Blog Joined July 2009
United States4109 Posts
July 18 2012 16:49 GMT
#4877
On July 19 2012 01:22 Antiochus wrote:
A friend of mine linked this to me, just going to leave it here for everyone else to enjoy.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e2UHx-Rn44U&feature=player_embedded


I don't think enjoy is the right word

I'm still scarred from the UN Owen one ;_:
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Archas
Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States6531 Posts
July 18 2012 20:27 GMT
#4878
In other news, I'm totally lovin' this. Happy hardcore arrangement of a song I never thought happy hardcore would work for.

+ Show Spoiler [Fate of Sixty Years] +
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Caller
Profile Blog Joined September 2007
Poland8075 Posts
July 19 2012 00:37 GMT
#4879
dkpl i thot u wanted that album
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Profile Blog Joined July 2010
United States6531 Posts
Last Edited: 2012-09-21 19:48:48
July 19 2012 00:49 GMT
#4880
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