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Alborz
Canada1551 Posts
Mt. Alborz Rap Studios What are your thoughts? Would you buy my music? How can I improve? | ||
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armada[sb]
United States432 Posts
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Alborz
Canada1551 Posts
I have been doubting whether I should freestyle my albums or write. Almost all my other albums are all freestyle, especially Cops and I on the album The Body Never Lies. I like free styling more. Please let me know how you feel about the other songs? | ||
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Alborz
Canada1551 Posts
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ninazerg
United States7291 Posts
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Swede
New Zealand853 Posts
A couple of other things: get into it more. You don't sound like you're getting anything out of rapping. You don't need to sound happy like this is your favourite thing in the world (in fact that's probably somewhat contrary to the vibe of rap in general), but you need something... anger, sadness, conviction. At the very least it needs to sound confident. I know a lot of musicians who can do sick stuff but because they can't do it confidently it sounds like a wet towel. Last thing, there needs to be some clear distinction between sections of a song. You might have a particular rhythm or rhyming theme for the chorus for example, or maybe you sing it instead. Either way, music is all about being interesting, and if you just rap in the same way the whole time it won't be interesting. Are you improvising the rhythm or do you have at least a general idea of how it's gonna go? Also, do you have any experience playing an instrument of any kind? | ||
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sc4k
United Kingdom5454 Posts
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sob3k
United States7572 Posts
Im sorry, you are really bad at rap. | ||
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ninazerg
United States7291 Posts
I stayed up till dawn. I just ate a fawn. This is chess, you a pawn. Mow my lawn. You wanna step, you gonna be gone. I smacked Vince Vaughn. | ||
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dRaW
Canada5744 Posts
On May 20 2013 19:51 ninazerg wrote: You make me yawn. I stayed up till dawn. I just ate a fawn. This is chess, you a pawn. Mow my lawn. You wanna step, you gonna be gone. I smacked Vince Vaughn. HIP HOP DONT DROP THE SOAP YOU OAF TIC TAC TOE DONT YOU KNOW YOU A HOE | ||
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ninazerg
United States7291 Posts
On May 20 2013 19:54 dRaW wrote: HIP HOP DONT DROP THE SOAP YOU OAF TIC TAC TOE DONT YOU KNOW YOU A HOE YO I LIVE IN PAREE, CITY L'AMOUR SO GET READY FOR WAR AT YOUR DOOR I AM FRENCH LIKE ALANIS MORRISETTE I LIKE COFFEE AND EAT A BAGETTE PARLEZ-VOUS FRANCAIS? YO COME TO MARSEILLES WE SMOKE CIGARETTE CUZ YOU GAY JE VAIS BIEN, ET VOUS? YOU BABY SCREAM WAH WAH WAH, TAIS-TOI. | ||
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Zealos
United Kingdom3576 Posts
It feels like its close to being "there" Something is definetly missing though, I think it would probably be the rhythm. The first song for example, if written would be like Now-I-Try-To-Accept-Others All disjointed and stuff, I dunno : D | ||
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GaNgStaRR.ElV
Canada535 Posts
Confidence is key, the rest can be worked on slowly. Now for some shameless self-promotion, which I believed I earned by somehow sitting through all 5 tracks... https://soundcloud.com/eastmanmusic | ||
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QuanticHawk
United States32135 Posts
On May 20 2013 20:01 ninazerg wrote: YO I LIVE IN PAREE, CITY L'AMOUR SO GET READY FOR WAR AT YOUR DOOR I AM FRENCH LIKE ALANIS MORRISETTE I LIKE COFFEE AND EAT A BAGETTE PARLEZ-VOUS FRANCAIS? YO COME TO MARSEILLES WE SMOKE CIGARETTE CUZ YOU GAY JE VAIS BIEN, ET VOUS? YOU BABY SCREAM WAH WAH WAH, TAIS-TOI. hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahhahah | ||
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virpi
Germany3599 Posts
and work on your technique, you're not really flowing. you've got a long a way to go. first step: buy a good microphone. second step: learn how to record your voice in a more appealing way. third (and most important step): practice your ass off. | ||
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GaNgStaRR.ElV
Canada535 Posts
On May 21 2013 00:33 virpi wrote: are u serious? the production of the tracks is terrible. did you use your headset to record? your voice is too monotone, stuff needs to burn, YOU need to burn. you want people to feel your music, you don't want to tranquillize them. and work on your technique, you're not really flowing. you've got a long a way to go. first step: buy a good microphone. second step: learn how to record your voice in a more appealing way. third (and most important step): practice your ass off. I wouldn't invest in any gear until you can get to a stage where you can rap for people without feeling embarassed/sounding like your making a joke of it. The audio quality is definately not the biggest turn off here. The vocals are clear enough for this level of stuff. And why you on trap beats? | ||
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Jealous
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The former statements of you being too monotone are accurate. You need more inflection, more passion - you sound half-asleep and that is not a good way to get people to listen up and actually pay attention to what you're saying, just like in real life. Your first track in particular should be a lot more lively, a lot more "GET THE FUCK UP." Unlike some of the other people in this thread, I like the beats you have chosen for this. They should be easy to work off of and establish the energy I mentioned above. Good luck! You're on the right track. I've known countless rappers who had delivery and talent but no drive or commitment. You clearly have this final aspect - the rest will come with time, practice, and equipment. On May 20 2013 23:01 GaNgStaRR.ElV wrote: More expression in your voice, less monotone, I mean you sound depressed but not in an Eminem, "angry at the world" kind of way, more like a "i dont want my neighbours, friends or even myself to hear me" kind of way. Confidence is key, the rest can be worked on slowly. Now for some shameless self-promotion, which I believed I earned by somehow sitting through all 5 tracks... https://soundcloud.com/eastmanmusic This is pretty nice, I like it! In a few moments it feels like you might have a little too much going on, but you transitions are often fresh. In some tracks (TouchMyFlow in particular) your progression of transitions is a little too linear (as in, it goes the same amount of bars before every layer gets added/removed almost every time), although I have heard many other DJs do this and it might be the right way to go about it? Idk, just my opinion. I guess I do like more cacophonous techno so perhaps its just subjective. like OnFire, which is my favorite of yours so far (haven't listened to ALL of them, ~10). Definitely like your choice of sounds. | ||
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Capped
United Kingdom7236 Posts
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GaNgStaRR.ElV
Canada535 Posts
On May 21 2013 01:58 Jealous wrote: Your voice sounds like it's too far "above" the music, and not mixed in well. Also I think maybe your mic/recording quality needs to climb before anyone would buy this music. Your current mic registers the impact of your words as a >pumf< sound almost, like it was too close to your mouth and with no screen. Might be my speakers but others have agreed with me so I think that I'm probably not imagining it. The former statements of you being too monotone are accurate. You need more inflection, more passion - you sound half-asleep and that is not a good way to get people to listen up and actually pay attention to what you're saying, just like in real life. Your first track in particular should be a lot more lively, a lot more "GET THE FUCK UP." Unlike some of the other people in this thread, I like the beats you have chosen for this. They should be easy to work off of and establish the energy I mentioned above. Good luck! You're on the right track. I've known countless rappers who had delivery and talent but no drive or commitment. You clearly have this final aspect - the rest will come with time, practice, and equipment. This is pretty nice, I like it! In a few moments it feels like you might have a little too much going on, but you transitions are often fresh. In some tracks (TouchMyFlow in particular) your progression of transitions is a little too linear (as in, it goes the same amount of bars before every layer gets added/removed almost every time), although I have heard many other DJs do this and it might be the right way to go about it? Idk, just my opinion. I guess I do like more cacophonous techno so perhaps its just subjective. like OnFire, which is my favorite of yours so far (haven't listened to ALL of them, ~10). Definitely like your choice of sounds. Your opinion is correct that song is usually a 8bar transition and a lot of them have similar styles of composition and layering. It's just easier for those kind of tracks when your trying to shop them to artists, to have the changes occur on a meter-scale that is easily recognisable and predictable; although I need to start producing more electronica/abstract pieces...what can I say though sometimes the oldest trick in the book is the best haha Also based off what you said, OP should practice moving the mic farther away from mouth, if it's a headset mic make sure to get one of the little fluffy covers for it, it's the next best thing to a proper popscreen(vocal recording 101, sound of breath-wind making contact with mic=bad). I'm thinking the OP should look into proper gain-staging as well. It seems to me as if possibly your issues come from the fact that if you are louder/more expressive with your raps, you may be overloading your mic(I used to be like that when I started to). The trick is you need to find the balance between gain, mic position and voice control where you have the ideal fit between vocal quality, loudness and clarity. Try to turn down your mic via Windows controls or whatever program you use to record, move your mic further away from your mouth and practice basically screaming out your raps like you were drunk at the club and they played your favorite song ever until you find the perfect balance to get a credible rap. On May 21 2013 02:01 Capped wrote: No replies. I think you upset him. Well, seeing how the OP started with "Starting my Rap Career, would you buy my music" and being a complete amateur, kind of set himself up for a letdown no? | ||
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PanN
United States2828 Posts
+ Show Spoiler + You can have the best lyrics and won't get that far if you've got no soul behind it. You can have the worst lyrics with a lot of soul and be successful. You created all this music, throw more passion into your voice and make the listener know what you're saying is important to you, and means something to you. | ||
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GaNgStaRR.ElV
Canada535 Posts
On May 21 2013 05:07 PanN wrote: You need the power of soul. + Show Spoiler + http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eBynJX6RBuI You can have the best lyrics and won't get that far if you've got no soul behind it. You can have the worst lyrics with a lot of soul and be successful. You created all this music, throw more passion into your voice and make the listener know what you're saying is important to you, and means something to you. Dear God. Jimmy Hendrix. His voice is like the presense of God on Earth. RIP and wellplayed, sir. Well played. | ||
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Alborz
Canada1551 Posts
Some of the comments are very upsetting, but I can take criticism. I bought an APOGEE ONE microphone. I guess I will return that and just work on getting on stage after practicing more. | ||
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ninazerg
United States7291 Posts
On May 21 2013 06:12 Alborz wrote: Hi, Some of the comments are very upsetting, but I can take criticism. I bought an APOGEE ONE microphone. I guess I will return that and just work on getting on stage after practicing more. That's not how you respond in the hip-hop industry. You just go "Fuck all the haters, I'm gettin' paid off rap." and then quietly take the criticism to heart and make adjustments. Also, you have to not let others tell you what to do, so don't follow this advice. | ||
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YPang
United States4024 Posts
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GaNgStaRR.ElV
Canada535 Posts
I wouldn't work on getting on stage first and selling all your recording because you get some negative feed, I mean sorry but listen to what you did and compare it to a successful rapper, did you honestly think you stacked up? You just need to actively work on improving, work on recording techniques, writing techniques etc. | ||
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JamesArk
Canada37 Posts
Your version will either be, (A) not particularly great or (B) a decent cover. It doesn't matter either way as the goal is simply to understand how the best are doing what they do. You don't have to release it or anything, it's just important that you listen to the difference between your lyrics/delivery and theirs. The goal is to understand what makes a song work/develop an ear for quality. Then you can work on closing the gap. I come from visual art (drawing/3D/other shit). In visual art there are either people that understand what makes something look nice or people that CAN'T physically tell the difference between good and bad art. It's a trait that is developed through research/practice/constant repetition. Some people never do understand the difference between quality and mediocre work and feel perfectly content to release things/stop working on things that are far from their potential. They have not developed an eye for good art and therefore their art is not good. The same can be applied to music (or any other creative field). TL/DR: Understand what makes good rappers sound good and focus on doing that. Edit: Also, unless your song is on the radio don't charge people to hear it/download it. The internet is bananas powerful but you lose all of that if people have to pay, especially if it's something they aren't sure about/wouldn't otherwise purchase. Ideally I assume you would want a large amount of people to hear it which won't happen if everyone has to shell out $7 to download. Sure you could maaaaybe make like $50 from people willing to buy it, but then 99% of the rest of the people that hear it who can't be fucked to download it will instantly forget about you. | ||
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PanN
United States2828 Posts
On May 21 2013 06:12 Alborz wrote: Hi, Some of the comments are very upsetting, but I can take criticism. I bought an APOGEE ONE microphone. I guess I will return that and just work on getting on stage after practicing more. Remember, you're already miles ahead of so many people, many don't even have the balls to try (my self included =) ) so massive props. | ||
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Alborz
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ninazerg
United States7291 Posts
On May 21 2013 15:56 Alborz wrote: Thanks PanN A lot of positive words here. I did what the other guy said and said fuck the haters, but took all the advice to heart secretly. I will make the adjustment. I am tired of being afraid cause of social anxiety so I did this. I will keep going and freeflowing. Im not sure if I should make all my downloads free. Wouldnt be awkward to go from free downloads for like 5 albums to paid albums later? What would make the transition, when my fanbase is huge? I might download your album twice. | ||
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