EPTPersonally, I enjoyed it, and I thought it was interesting.
The true story of selling Heroin in New York - Page 8
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S.O.L.I.D.
United States792 Posts
Personally, I enjoyed it, and I thought it was interesting. | ||
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reincremate
China2216 Posts
The writing style, with crappy metaphors like "The belt wrapped around her bicep made them puffy, a muted blue like sky before sunset." face-palmingly stupid names like "Scrazzle Dazzle" and descriptions like "and I remember with a bizarre clarity his emphasis on those last two words, fucking money. It sticks out in my mind." really detracts from the quality of the story, which already sucks (guy sells drugs, gets into trouble that isn't particularly interesting, escapes lifestyle). | ||
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leo23
United States3075 Posts
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Disciple7
United States198 Posts
On February 05 2011 13:53 reincremate wrote: Plausible or not, it was a really boring read, like some third rate Hollywood drama. The writing style, with crappy metaphors like "The belt wrapped around her bicep made them puffy, a muted blue like sky before sunset." face-palmingly stupid names like "Scrazzle Dazzle" and descriptions like "and I remember with a bizarre clarity his emphasis on those last two words, fucking money. It sticks out in my mind." really detracts from the quality of the story, which already sucks (guy sells drugs, gets into trouble that isn't particularly interesting, escapes lifestyle). 1) You're right, that is a horrible metaphor, however, if that line was a simile I think it would describe it very well. 2) The names were most likely plays on the person's actual name, and considering these people were of the less sophisticated type, they probably went by names similar to the ones used. 3) Hmm idk, maybe he actually DID remember it that way and it DID stick out in his mind? I don't understand how anyone could not be absolutely enthralled with this story, let alone call it boring/cliche/horrible etc. I am not the type to be moved by writing, or feel emotion while reading, but while reading this story my heartbeat pounded, and my body shook. This man was so close to death, yet used the same cleverness which got him into the mess to get out of it. It amazed me how aware of situations he was so quickly and how he reacted so well (he would prolly be amazing at sc o_O), especially with no prior experience. He made all the right moves within the business (other than becoming involved with it, obviously), and I can't help but to think that with his mind and ingenuity he has already gone on to do great things, depending upon when this was posted originally. Those who say the premise of the story sucked and has been overplayed watch too many movies. | ||
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craz3d
Bulgaria856 Posts
On February 04 2011 12:50 pfods wrote: I love all the hemingways this thread has brought out of the wood work. Please, literary greats, post the amazon links to the books you've written. Or the the new york times links to your op-eds and critique stories. I'd love to read either. Ironically, the only book that I've read of Hemingway (A Farewell to Arms) had writing that was simple and to the point, much like the op. | ||
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Noxie
United States2227 Posts
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plutonian
United States6 Posts
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RighteousDan
Canada99 Posts
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reincremate
China2216 Posts
On February 05 2011 15:17 plutonian wrote: You can tell this story is fiction because it has characteristics common to most if not all good fiction. The motivations of each character are clearly explained, each character is fully unique and distinguished from all others, and the plot has a clear beginning, rising action, and denouement. No true story would ever be this fleshed out and yet neat. Maybe the author dealt drugs at some point, and maybe he knows a couple of junkies. But this story doesn't read like it was even loosely based on true events. Even so it could have been good if it was well written and if the plot was more interesting. | ||
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Darkalbino
Australia410 Posts
On February 04 2011 10:47 Mellotron wrote: Yawn. Mediocre writing ability, mediocre descriptive skills/imagery, boring/cliche subject matter, copy/pasted internet meme that glorifies the selling and use of a nightmare substance that destroys human beings who are too stupid to know any better. Mankind will take a step forward when it stops romanticizing ridiculous shit like this. But i dont ever see it happening. Humans are going to grind their gears on the same 5 subject matters until the end of time, never learning anything, never realizing anything, never moving past the basic. But it wont matter, because there will always be a fresh crop of new humans to pick up being miserable and spinning their wheels right where the last generation left off. So lesson learned is: if you are going to write a song, poem, story, book, or movie, just make it about heroin and youll get ten times the attention from the public. Even if the story or writing is talentless. In fact, you could probably slack off quite a bit in your skill, and just rely on controversial subject matter to bail you out. You might get like... who knows... 5 guys out there out of 10000 that see through you and call you on being a hack, but the rest of the people will call you a genius and an artist. Why waste time trying to tell a great story when you can just be like "drugs blah blah blah, murder blah blah blah, more drugs blah blah" and cash in? Edgy subject matter is a piss poor substitute for strong writing. Piss. Poor. United States lol | ||
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ohlala
Germany232 Posts
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Aegeis
United States1619 Posts
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RoosterSamurai
Japan2108 Posts
A sound argument, it seems. | ||
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HydroXy
United States513 Posts
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Marquise
United States50 Posts
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Mooncat
Germany1228 Posts
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Rev0lution
United States1805 Posts
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Sabu113
United States11075 Posts
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dcberkeley
Canada844 Posts
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HULKAMANIA
United States1219 Posts
Don't you have some kangaroos to hunt with your boomerang? Don't you have some exiled criminal forefathers to venerate or some Lebanese immigrants to protest against? Or can we, instead, go ahead and dispense with dismissive national stereotypes? | ||
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