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United States4053 Posts
You swapped to second person (using the word "you") once or twice near the end. Try to avoid that. Your concluding sentence could probably also be shortened.
Good luck :D
@below: "you" is acceptable only if the entire essay is consistently third person. As is, the usage of "you" and "your" looks more out of place, and on top of that it's not even a difficult fix.
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Using "you" is okay depending on how much of a hard ass your professor is.
And I would focus on how skills from SC would help you with English 2010...instead of the actual techniques used, because your paragraph barely touches on that and that last sentence should be a lead-in (hopefully).
And the phrase "I think...." is godawful, nobody gives a damn about what you think; make a claim, support your claim, basic essay writing.
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The reason why I think that this has helped me is because there is extensive research done by players about there opponents and even themselves.
2nd there should be their
Players who want to better themselves do research about timings during the game, possibilities that could occur during those timings that they would need to prepare for, and windows of opportunity of there own where there opponent would be in a weak state and they could take an advantage and superior position in the game.
same thing, there=their, also the last bit "and windows of opportunity of their own where their opponent would be in a weak state and they could take an advantage and superior position in the game." has a lot of "and" in it, it might sound a bit better with a slight re-write imo.
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hmm judicator, I completely agree and am trying to do a revision, but how the hell do i explain starcraft research skills?
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Well, you can just briefly, and I mean BRIEFLY, mention the skills necessary in StarCraft and how it applies to English 2010 (I am assuming it's a general English class on research). Focus on how it translates over, not the what is being translated.
Personally, if I was to write this and decide to incorporate SC/BW, I would straight up do a particularly memorable game (everyone has at least one) and parallel it to my experience on breaking down a particular piece of work. My approach to the game/work, the actual game/work, the after-game/work things, etc.
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hmmm, so when your opponent does something, you react creatively rather than analytically?
by definition, reacting analytically should pretty much let you figure out the counter
thinking creatively, as in, "wow my opponent is 12 nexing, maybe i should take my SCV's and spell out 'noob' in hopes my wit and nerve to do such a thing would cause him to gg in fear?"
and i think writing about starcraft is going to cause your teacher to think less of you
this might not be good
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Well by creatively I mean that most enemies use siege tanks to contain someone or slowly push an assault. Who was the first guy to actually go HEY if i drop this behind a mineral line, I rape his economy. I know thats not SUPER creative, but its the concept of doing something new that may have not been done before. Or when people started using warp prism colossus mix or the warp prism immortal mix to snipe supply depots. By your enemy having the same units as other protoss, yet possibly doing something new taht you havnt seen or isnt common, you have to be prepared. Get what i'm saying. By him being creative and doing that, you may have to think creatively to think of a way to stop him from doing that to you. Make sense? haha sorry I am so bad at this, haven't been to school in almsot 2 years cause I had to earn money for college. 
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After mulling over the topic some more, it's surprisingly a pretty easy topic to write about. Just take a step back and think about everyone's individual approach towards the game both in the general context and in specific situations.
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The third experience in my life, and ongoing experience still, that has helped me prepare for my English 2010 class is my online gaming experiences. I have played an online game called StarCraft for the past twelve years. It is a real time strategy game where you attempt to defeat your opponent using different techniques and tactics. Through research done about your opponent you are able to find ways to beat them. The research skills you develop by looking at different opponents who have the same tools but utilize them differently has helped me look at situations more creatively then analytically. I think by being more creative you are able to see more possible solutions then just pure analytical thought could derive.
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The third experience in my life, an on going experience, that successfully helped me prepare for my English 2010 class is my online gaming experiences; 1.8 million copies were sold, all titled in bold, StarCraft. Starcraft can be related to human warfare, into the future, with massive battleships and extraterrestrial life. Staying ahead on weapons technology, tactics, strategy, espionage and resources are all used to gain advantage over your enemy; platoons and air-force take vital positions, so artillery may move up. In order to perform these tactics and strategies, one must use a wide spectrum of information; recalling previous battle experience instantaneously, while simultaneously micro managing armies, structures, and resources. A player must push through agonizing defeat after defeat, if one must learn from their mistakes; ambition and determination being an asset to keep progressing. My mind has experienced constant failure, followed by success through my online gaming experiences; only now am I prepared to take on my English 2010 class.
I found that what you were saying wasn't giving him a picture. I could see your prof at the end not understand exactly what starcraft is, and that can obvious reflect the way he understands your point. "Through research done about your opponent you are able to find ways to beat them." Why not provide real life examples so your prof can understand much better what he is reading? I'm not 4.0 or anything, so take what I say with a big grain of salt ^^ Hope that gives you some ideas? Edit: if there are any grammatical errors, I apologize 
IMO, using the word 'it' cheapens any paper. Why use it, when you can use a perfectly correct substitute that describes so much better?? you might as well put 'fuck' instead of it, because they are both extremely vague and shouldn't be in a paper.
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