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I awoke at 7am to
find your face on the welcome mat.
‘Moonwalker a reluctant hero’ it said,
and I believed it.
–
On the way to Narooma we drove
through the night. I sat between my brother
and
sister. And my parents were ahead.
And I leant forward and said that
I wanted to be an astronomer when
I grew up.
Dad said there was no money in the stars.
–
I don’t sweat. It doesn’t get to me like that. I’m not
sad that you’ve left.
I’ll breathe on and probably forget about
you in a couple of days. On one of them
someone will think to make
a movie about you.
Chiefly glorious, chiefly understated.
Mr Aldrin will spend most of his screen-time drunk,
and probably win an oscar.
–
I can’t
remember now what I’ve done
with that newspaper.
It doesn’t matter so much.
I’ll come across it
tomorrow
or the next day
and remark on
what a perfectly
ordinary face
you had and
that will move
me to tears.
  
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Dad said there was no money in the stars
Love this line! Fantastic job.
On an unrelated note, I really enjoy the song Longbow.
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If footprints are his legacy, then they will live forever in the stars.
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On August 29 2012 22:22 Azera wrote:Love this line! Fantastic job. On an unrelated note, I really enjoy the song Longbow.
Thanks man. I've made a few surreptitious edits in light of your quote.
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I'm Neil this scared me AH
Oh its about moonman Neil
EDIT: Read it and Good job 
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Good blog?! The thing is I don't know shit about poetry so I can't really appreciate it. I know that there's something quite artful and carefully crafted in front of me but my English and poetry skills aren't up to par 
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Very nice writing. He was a pretty amazing human being; to do something so incredible and yet be so humble, it's a rare combination.
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On August 29 2012 22:22 Azera wrote:Love this line! Fantastic job. On an unrelated note, I really enjoy the song Longbow.
yup, I liked it as well.
Gj
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nice to see some free verse, its actually harder to write than using rhymes and meters. As someone who thinks of himself as a lyricist (I'm a singer/songwriter), some of the lines could use a polish but over all its very good!
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Ah what a great read. Just came out of astronomy discussion too!
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On August 30 2012 11:48 emythrel wrote:
nice to see some free verse, its actually harder to write than using rhymes and meters. As someone who thinks of himself as a lyricist (I'm a singer/songwriter), some of the lines could use a polish but over all its very good!
Ta. Rhyming straitjackets language. Useful maybe for comedy, satire, irony - in other words, to make a point. Trenchant but limited.
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what is this actually about? Neil Armstrong went on the moon a long time ago... a grown (probably woman by the sounds of it) used to be a more innocent dreamer. but now reality is just ordinary.. and everything is useless .. thats what i thought
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On September 01 2012 23:21 meteorskunk wrote:
what is this actually about? Neil Armstrong went on the moon a long time ago... a grown (probably woman by the sounds of it) used to be a more innocent dreamer. but now reality is just ordinary.. and everything is useless .. thats what i thought
Interesting to hear your impressions. I guess I just tried to describe my visceral reaction to seeing a photo of him on the front page of the paper. I'll find it for you.
![[image loading]](http://i.imgur.com/kiz18.jpg)
A combination of indifference and, ultimately, something bittersweet (a feeling anchored in my childhood). I'm not trying to say anything affirmative; I don't think it's 'actually' about anything. Some little flicker of feeling that found its way onto a page.
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