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Whore (draft)
My parents were at odds, it seemed.
"You dirty whore!" my father screamed.
His tone alarmed me, so I swore
To learn the meaning of the 'whore.'
Upon request, a friendly neighbor
Confided, "Theirs is quite the art:
They are professionals who labor
By spreading thighs a ways apart."
A gymnast, then, but why the ire
On my progenitor's behalf?
What kindled such infernal fire
That now consumed his kindly laugh?
Another smirked at my misgiving.
I frowned. He told me to relax:
"They're simply folks who earn a living
In dirty fashion on their backs."
I nodded back. No need to panic;
A whore is also a mechanic.
A third disgustedly averted
Her eyes. I begged - to some avail.
Before she slammed her door, she blurted,
"Their carnal knowledge is for sale!"
A teacher also! Such acumen,
Such ingenuity and grace!
The very pinnacle of human
Accomplishment. My father's place
Was dwarfed. With obsolescence nearing,
He could not take it anymore:
What good was art or engineering
Beside the talents of a whore?
With this epiphany asmolder
I ran, I hugged my mom anew,
And let her know, "When I get older,
I want to be a whore like you."
For old funsies on the subject, Whores in Starcraft
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United States4549 Posts
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Ah words, I love them so.
You sir are quite good with them. xD
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Haha, really liked it. I find it funny that more... "advanced" words are used, yet the meaning of whore is misunderstood 
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That was great, 5/5 
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Great stuff! Did you just write that?
I only didn't really like the second to last paragraph. I didn't understand it and the sentences don't fit. Otherwise great job 
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Korea (South)17174 Posts
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good comical poems>>>> deep emotional poems.
And I don't mean comical like slapstick humor, but more what the OP did.
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Baltimore, USA22258 Posts
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United States24753 Posts
Was enjoyable. A question about poetry... is there any suggestion about whether to stick with ABAB rhyming or AABB consistently, or should you alternate, or is it completely up to the whim of the author?
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this poem is full of win.
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Automated voice: To promote this blog entry, please rate 5 stars.
this seriously needs to be sent as a viral email
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Very rarely do I vote for blogs; this one is an exception!
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On May 30 2010 10:21 micronesia wrote:
Was enjoyable. A question about poetry... is there any suggestion about whether to stick with ABAB rhyming or AABB consistently, or should you alternate, or is it completely up to the whim of the author?
Dont stick to anything, stick to your mind, let it evolve and let it free. Creating rules of poetry will only limit one's talent.
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United States24753 Posts
On May 30 2010 10:40 rAize wrote:Show nested quote +On May 30 2010 10:21 micronesia wrote:
Was enjoyable. A question about poetry... is there any suggestion about whether to stick with ABAB rhyming or AABB consistently, or should you alternate, or is it completely up to the whim of the author? Dont stick to anything, stick to your mind, let it evolve and let it free. Creating rules of poetry will only limit one's talent.
Is that only true for poetry or other writing as well?
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Very nice. I'm thoroughly impressed. Hahaha. xD
EDIT: And for some some reason, I totally awed at the last lines with.....narrator and mom? (don't know if it's a boy or girl)
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