1) There's a point when you nearly break into terran base but your troops didnt move in but stuck at choke. I know you cant finish the base but taking a few factory or supply would be great.
2) You didnt do multiple attacks from different area. I would suggest a templar drop storm + some suicide would be great at two different areas.
3) why not get some cosair with web. It can serves many purpose.
.................... I hope it helps.....................
Anyway, why cant toss turtle too, just find a chance to mind control a scv then the terran will be forced to find you.