English Grammar Help pls

lantz

United States762 Posts

February 18 2015 16:09 GMT

Hi,

Im about to send in a grad school app and cannot figure out which is the right use for the following sentence:

I have become aware of the stark difference in education levels

or is it stark differences in education

or is it stark difference in education

or is it stark differences in education level

God English is hard

Any English majors here? TIA!!

EDIT: I am trying to say I am aware of the differences in education levels of people inside the city.

iTzSnypah

United States1738 Posts

February 18 2015 16:32 GMT

The sentence just sounds pretentious to me. Maybe it's 'have become' as that implies you were blissfully unaware of the differences of education for a large portion of your life.

Edit: After thinking about it more the thing about that sentence that really irks me is that it's written in your point of view and has no thoughts of yours on the matter. So the sentence has absolutely no meaning whatsoever.

ggrrg

Bulgaria2716 Posts

February 18 2015 17:00 GMT

What bugs me the most is the lack of colons or quotation marks or any other kind of punctuation...
Anyway, I'm not sure why you would even want to make that statement. See the first reply.

MoltkeWarding

5195 Posts

February 18 2015 17:52 GMT

Is there any reason you are using the perfect tense here?

Deleuze

United Kingdom2102 Posts

February 18 2015 19:18 GMT

This:

What bugs me the most is the lack of colons or quotation marks or any other kind of punctuation...

Would you be able to give some context to what you are actually wanting to say.

Do you mean to say:

- "I know the difference between the demands of undergraduate and postgraduate study"
- "I know about the differences between levels of education as a subject of study" - i.e. in that you are applying for a course to study education
- "I know that the level of education across a range of different demographics varies significantly" i.e. you are aware of different abilities or educational expectations of a varied group

Regardless, the sentence should read thusly:

I have become aware of the difference(s)* between education levels.

*This depends upon whether you think there is just one difference between levels, or many differences.

I would strongly recommend that you reword it entirely dependant upon what you want to actually say.

Maybe it's 'have become' as that implies you were blissfully unaware of the differences of education for a large portion of your life.

I review postgraduate applications, showing that you have learned the difference between the expectations of different levels of study isn't a bad thing, though I would qualify it with some kind of example - 'I am aware... because I embarked grad level research in my dissertation' for example.

Personally, I would go into detail to say exactly what levels (and what differences) you are talking about - though this might be clear from the context.

lantz

United States762 Posts

February 18 2015 20:54 GMT

Thanks for the comments, I already gave up and turned it in. Englesh too hard.

micronesia

United States24788 Posts

February 19 2015 04:46 GMT

Which cities don't have major differences in education levels of the populace? You must be talking about a pretty remote and poor area.

lantz

United States762 Posts

February 19 2015 15:03 GMT

^^ This is why I fail at writing essays. You're right I just stated an obvious statement. Though hopefully the admissions gets my idea. I wrote about Philadelphia

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