EPTOn April 26 2013 01:11 Stratos_speAr wrote:
I think that the poster that said that he was turned off by the sexuality in your presentation is implying a common concern. We all know that it would be fantastic to have more females in the e-sports scene, but it tends to merely be females that have little to no clue about how the game actually works at an even remotely respectable skill level being shown off merely as eye candy, and it can make gamers cynical rather quickly. I personally appreciate having an attractive individual to look at when I'm watching something nerd-related, but the worry is a valid one. I think concerns about sexuality in the business will die down somewhat once there are more proven female personalities in the SC2 scene. Until then, you'll probably continue getting unwarranted hate.
As for the content, I really like it. It seems like something that I could show someone who plays SC really casually; not only will they not be turned off by ultra-nerdy, un-attractive males talking about nerdy things, but the stuff that you talk about is actually relevant and can really help newer players. I think it would be great for you to stick to the more newb-friendly tips, as there seems to be an abundance of sources for individuals who are Diamond+ that need tips.
That said, I'm a little iffy on the language. You use very casual language, which I would guess is in an attempt to be casual and connect with the nerd demographic more. However, it almost comes across as "too" casual. Things like "it slows the crap out of my units, making it really suck when I have to run away" (talking about the Mothership Core ability) felt a little awkward and out-of-place. Yea, people may use that language in everyday conversation, but when you're taking the time to tape a video of yourself doing a prepared presentation, I feel like we can expect (and be ok with) language that is slightly more sophisticated, as that language makes you sound more like an authority on what you are saying, as opposed to just expressing some random opinion. You don't have to go all Shakespeare on us, but there can be a little more sophistication.
Anyway, just my feedback, and hope it helps.
I think that the poster that said that he was turned off by the sexuality in your presentation is implying a common concern. We all know that it would be fantastic to have more females in the e-sports scene, but it tends to merely be females that have little to no clue about how the game actually works at an even remotely respectable skill level being shown off merely as eye candy, and it can make gamers cynical rather quickly. I personally appreciate having an attractive individual to look at when I'm watching something nerd-related, but the worry is a valid one. I think concerns about sexuality in the business will die down somewhat once there are more proven female personalities in the SC2 scene. Until then, you'll probably continue getting unwarranted hate.
As for the content, I really like it. It seems like something that I could show someone who plays SC really casually; not only will they not be turned off by ultra-nerdy, un-attractive males talking about nerdy things, but the stuff that you talk about is actually relevant and can really help newer players. I think it would be great for you to stick to the more newb-friendly tips, as there seems to be an abundance of sources for individuals who are Diamond+ that need tips.
That said, I'm a little iffy on the language. You use very casual language, which I would guess is in an attempt to be casual and connect with the nerd demographic more. However, it almost comes across as "too" casual. Things like "it slows the crap out of my units, making it really suck when I have to run away" (talking about the Mothership Core ability) felt a little awkward and out-of-place. Yea, people may use that language in everyday conversation, but when you're taking the time to tape a video of yourself doing a prepared presentation, I feel like we can expect (and be ok with) language that is slightly more sophisticated, as that language makes you sound more like an authority on what you are saying, as opposed to just expressing some random opinion. You don't have to go all Shakespeare on us, but there can be a little more sophistication.
Anyway, just my feedback, and hope it helps.
Hmm, thanks! It did help!
It's weird because everyone over at Zoomin in the comments were saying it sounds too formal and scripted, and it didn't seem natural. That's actually why I went more casual with it. I actually prefer to give news in a fun, yet formal and intelligent manner. I think half of the people want to see more of my personality, and the other half want to be informed.
It's a hard balance to find. >.<
