"Yo dawg, that was awesome man, just the shit, get your ass to hollywood!"

"Your look is amazing, and I think you have a done of potential."

"Absolutly, terrible, worst thing I have ever heard"

it was nice and interesting, and the lyrics are cool, but the "i'm a protoss" is REALLY out of tune. And i am a music major with 10+ years of exp, so I kinda know what im talking about

Nice job overall though.

Durn

Canada360 Posts

September 22 2010 04:31 GMT

#24

Needs anger. Sounds like you're whispering because you're scared people are listening.

Example:

True lyricism and flow^

Sick rhymes though.

Deleted User 3420

24492 Posts

September 22 2010 04:36 GMT

#25

"my buildings don't need builders to build them, they just warp theirselves in"

lmao, nice

jibber

30 Posts

September 22 2010 04:45 GMT

#26

the i'm a protoss part could be imrpoved.. but the rhymes are actually pretty damn good i was surprised

Mastermind

Canada7096 Posts

September 22 2010 04:51 GMT

#27

Well done. I really enjoyed that.

drekk

91 Posts

September 22 2010 04:51 GMT

#28

not bad imo you need to make ur voice a little deeper or somethin during the ima protoss choras

darklogos

1 Post

September 22 2010 04:56 GMT

#29

Awesome song. The zerg song is better though. Yes I rep teh toss!

Rah

United States973 Posts

September 22 2010 05:18 GMT

#30

good lyrics, but needs a better rapper. sorry.

QueueQueue

Canada1000 Posts

September 22 2010 05:43 GMT

#31

Good lyrics lol.

Shield

Bulgaria4824 Posts

September 22 2010 05:52 GMT

#32

Good, but voice needs to be fixed imho.

MacroNcheesE

United States508 Posts

September 22 2010 05:56 GMT

#33

Damn, I am really impressed w' this actually.

Meapak_Ziphh

United States6786 Posts

September 22 2010 05:58 GMT

#34

Lyrics were sweet, the chorus did lack a little intensity but hey, it's a really small point this is brilliant!

pzea469

United States1520 Posts

September 22 2010 06:02 GMT

#35

lyrics are great man, but you HAVE to re-record it. Put more energy on the lyrics and probably a better mic. But other than technical stuff and maybe a little lack of energy, its great

JHancho

United States166 Posts

September 22 2010 06:09 GMT

#36

Great job!

envee

United States27 Posts

September 22 2010 06:21 GMT

#37

get someone to do the chorus hahah. shit was sick dude. really flowed!

greycubed

United States615 Posts

September 22 2010 06:44 GMT

#38

Maybe if you got someone with less lispy and nasally voice to do it it would be cool- and I trust that it was clever- but I couldn't listen past the first couple lines.

edit-

On September 22 2010 13:31 Durn wrote:
Needs anger. Sounds like you're whispering because you're scared people are listening.

Example:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7tv5-ZBm8uo

True lyricism and flow^

Sick rhymes though.

maybe that's the issue