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Invisible Fear
Protoss enemies are my favorite to beat
There is no other that I love to defeat
Most of the time their army I destroy
Except when that unit, they deploy
My third base has finished just fine
I believe his strategy suited to mine
So I lay my Spire to slowly create
And lay back in my chair to silently wait
Suddenly a voice cries "We're under attack!"
To my dismay all my drones die before I react
Now the quiet warrior moves to my third
To destroy it silently, without a word
Overlords creep to the spot so slow, still
I cannot speed them up with only my will
Once again I cower in invisible fear
The future, for me, becomes all to clear
Alt+Q+Q out of this horrid excuse of a game
I retreat to my bed to cry the night in shame
Though sleep will be hard to find this dark night
As DTs haunt my dreams and cause me fright
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haha awesome! 
I agree DTs are lame
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I once thought of a haiku in my head. It involved Dark Templar, drones and swearing.
Don't remember it anymore though.
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Nice poem. This is the exact reason I always send an overlord to my third. Screw protoss.
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Lol~ awesome.
Freakin' Dark Templars...
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this is why i always try to position my overlords strategically in the beginning so theres one where I'm going to expand. I forget a lot tho =( Fucking dts
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The followup to this poem should be titled "Ventral Sacs"
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United States17042 Posts
Nice poem. DT's are awesome when you use them, and suck when they're used against you.
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United States24676 Posts
I really enjoyed it. I'm not expert on poetry but I do have one comment. As I read it, the syllables were mostly lining up in my head, but there were some lines where I thought shortening or lengthening them by one or two syllables would line them up better with the previous/following rhyming line. Just for an example...
"Alt+Q+Q out of this horrid excuse of a game
Retreat to my bed to cry the night in shame"
The way I read this in my head is...
"Alt Q Q out of this hor- rid ex- cuse of a game
Re- treat to my bed to cry the night in shame"
Note how the first line has 13 syllables while the second has 11. An example of a possible solution:
"Alt Q Q out of this horr- i- ble game"
"Back to my bed to cry the night in shame"
Lines up with 10 and 10... honestly doesn't seem like the ideal fix either because a sort of emphasis seems to get put on 'the' but you get the idea I hope.
Is this just personal preference?
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Meter is supposed to match up like that unless you are trying to direct readers to a specific point, then you may feel comfortable to have a nonparallel meter.
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Lol once you talked about a unit that you hated, somehow i knew it was teh dt...
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Someone nominate this man for the Nobel Prize in Literature.
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Katowice25012 Posts
This inspired me to write a haiku
Corsairs and DTs
Friends forever, boundless love
Drones and ovies; dead
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