What you like/dislike about my band's song.

On July 06 2010 12:38 vanskater wrote:
Ryan hardwick sounds like a girl trying to hard to be a boy.

and as with most bands, the music ant bad (bass vol needs to be a little lower) its thats it hard to get enjoy the music with voice in the back ground.

On July 06 2010 12:36 ieatkids5 wrote:
i listened to about the 7 minute mark. some parts of the song seemed repetitive (around 6:20 if i remember correctly), and i think the bass could've done something.... different throughout the song instead of just playing something similar throughout the song.

that's just some stuff i tried to come up with that's constructive. this isn't my type of music, but you can't make music that appeals to everyone. if a musician thinks his music sounds great, by all means make more.

On July 06 2010 13:09 Turbovolver wrote:
ROFL this isn't going to be the music for a guy with username "Goatlust" XD

I don't agree with ZZangDreamjOy that this sounds like many other bands. It's too busy doing many different things to just be written off like that (which happened to be what the rest of his post said, heh).

The first 55 seconds set a tone that I don't really dig. The screaming is fine, but the music under it sounds almost like some dancish indie band. Maybe some people like that combination but I am definitely not one of them - I see screamo-type music as using the screams simply as an extra instrument that is primarily rhythmical and compliments the beautiful guitar work and complex drumming underneath.

This musical trend continues in the next section, though there's a lot less screaming there. The vocals are pretty, but they are combined with music that feels like it's trying to be more "cool" than pretty. It does goes into a kind of psychadelic breakdown that's pretty nice.

The guitar that comes in at (2:36) is more the kind of stuff I like, a spaced out emo/screamo and I feel the tone of the vocals and music fit together nicely. There's some building in the drums to stop the section from getting repetitive too, which is good.

What comes in at about (4:00) sounds a bit like a new song. I'm guessing because it goes from pretty + clean vocals to pretty + clean vocals but with a different guitar part. This section is quite extended out, it sounds like it could be a part of the <typical long and wandering album closer> of any band in this sort of genre.

We go back to a sort of indie cool stuff at 7:00-8:00. It vaguely reminded me of Tubelord. Again, not really my thing.

8:00-9:00 Don't know what to say here. Didn't care for it so much, to be blunt. I think part of it was the effect on the spoken word stuff not really gelling with me.

9:00-close This sounds like it could join up with the stuff from 4:00-7:00. It feels like it's using the same type of scale (keyboard giving an almost Egyptian feel) and songwriting approach. And as it gets deeper into this part the drumming really accentuates the rhythm (nice!) and the keyboard part from the beginning comes back in. It feels like it works better here. Maybe because I'm a sucker for the drumming and 7/4 parts that led into it.


A song that was just 4:00-7:00 joined up somehow with 9:00-11:22 would have been pretty awesome, I think. Then another song built around what was happening at 2:36-3:43 could be very good. I mean, I'm basically just picking out the parts of it that fit my tastes and saying those should make up the entirety of your songs, which feels kinda dumb, but that's my honest opinion so there it is.



Also check out the Saltwater EP from Pianos Become The Teeth if you haven't. That's keyboard+screamo stuff so it might be interesting to listen to for ideas. I'm not really saying it's particularly good, but eh.

On July 06 2010 16:13 Umbrella wrote:
I liked your song. Unfortunately, I don't know how to give constructive criticism for music, hehe. I guess the bass at 7:00-8:00 was a little jarring?


By the way, is your ID a reference to the band, Kidcrash?