Part 1 here: http://www.teamliquid.net/blogs/viewblog.php?id=411508

Hey guys, here's part two of a fun little Starcraft comic I've been working on, which is essentially going to be a short one-shot type of thing.

Please support me through Paypal here if you'd like to see more in the future! Any donators will get a .rar pack with Part 1 & 2 full size pages and some extras!

This is my first serious attempt at a comic, so I apologize in advance for some things that might look amateurish.

Thanks for reading, and enjoy!

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Some Fun Tidbits:

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- On page 4 of Part 1, the computer screen is displaying Team Liquid's home page.
- On page 9 of Part 1, a graphic on Sergei's shoulder reads "Yebat". You can look that up.

- On page 17 of Part 2, the speech bubble hides a section on the directory labeled "ESPORTS".

- On the last page of Part 2, the girl named Kif is named after Futurama's Kif Kroker.

United States163 Posts

June 12 2013 16:20 GMT

wow! still reading make more please

Coagulation

United States9633 Posts

June 12 2013 18:11 GMT

pretty impressive man.

Darkwhite

Norway352 Posts

June 12 2013 19:35 GMT

Maybe not the most productive feedback, but your characters tend to look incredibly flat. Your backgrounds and mostly everything else looks nice, the outlines are very well done, and the pictures you do shade seem fine.

Examples of what I mean are the full figure shot in page five and the last picture on page seven. I think part of the problem might be the contrast between rich background and low detail on the character. Ironically, the flatness would look better if the backgrounds weren't so beautifully done.

Also, Astrid and Valerie look maybe a bit too similar, but this might be hard to avoid with your realistic though not hyper-detailed style.

Sorry about focusing on where I think you could improve. Aside from what I mentioned, I feel it looks professional.

Yurie

11947 Posts

June 12 2013 19:37 GMT

I like it, keep going.

Sir.Phalanx

Japan195 Posts

June 12 2013 21:38 GMT

Personally, I don't like reading this sort of style (I've grown up reading manga rather than American comics, so my taste is just different). That being said, I still do think that your artwork its self is awesome! Not being able to actually draw myself, I always feel so envious

. Keep it up!

megapants

United States1314 Posts

June 12 2013 22:19 GMT

On June 13 2013 04:35 Darkwhite wrote:
Maybe not the most productive feedback, but your characters tend to look incredibly flat. Your backgrounds and mostly everything else looks nice, the outlines are very well done, and the pictures you do shade seem fine.

Examples of what I mean are the full figure shot in page five and the last picture on page seven. I think part of the problem might be the contrast between rich background and low detail on the character. Ironically, the flatness would look better if the backgrounds weren't so beautifully done.

Also, Astrid and Valerie look maybe a bit too similar, but this might be hard to avoid with your realistic though not hyper-detailed style.

Sorry about focusing on where I think you could improve. Aside from what I mentioned, I feel it looks professional.

darkwhite makes a good point, i believe you are focusing a lot more on design rather than form. that being said, your grasp on character design seems pretty advanced, so i would take some time looking into adding some volume and depth to your figures.

edit: really well done figure in page 2, panel 2 and page 12, panel 1. really nice sense of shape, weight, and scale. i'd really like to see you do more poses like that!

overall though, this is a really great comic!! i'm working on comics myself at the moment and it can be hard to appreciate just how much time and work goes into making them without trying it yourself, so i really admire your effort here. glad that you're enjoying yourself! keep it up! :D

ProV1

United States980 Posts

June 12 2013 22:19 GMT

Woot a comic with a promise of a good story!

Kaizen[7]

United States86 Posts

June 13 2013 00:24 GMT

Amazing work! I will definitely keep reading and if I someday have some funds I would gladly give you a little support in your efforts. Keep at it!

Sigrun

United States1655 Posts

June 13 2013 02:19 GMT

#10

Thanks for the comments guys!

@Darkwhite and megapants- I actually intended to make my characters look very simple and flat for time's sake, as I wanted to do a style that I could draw quickly and consistently- I normally don't draw like this. With the more complex backgrounds, I was hoping for a contrast that would make the simpler outlined characters stand out more, but I do see what you guys mean. Perhaps I'll tone the backgrounds down a bit next time. Thanks again!