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United States1219 Posts
April 30 2011 20:48 GMT
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Real talk: the most fundamental problem in this essay is that it consists entirely of tropes and generalities. It is all claim and assertion and prophecy—no evidence and therefore no real argument. You probably want to narrow your focus down to one specific issue, maybe like one pedagogical goal that the internet could be effectively used to accomplish (because the assertion that education via internet will allow humanity to "to transcend to a global consciousness as one specie [sic]" and to leave behind concerns like "country" and "money" is nothing but grandstanding without at least a proposal of the of the mechanism(s) by which you think technology will usher humankind into this new golden age).

If I were grading this paper for my composition course, I would say:

+ good writing
+ interesting topic

- thesis too broad/unsupportable
- develops little to no supporting evidence appropriate to the argument
- relies too heavily on abstract and general commentary
If it were not so, I would have told you.
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