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eborp
Profile Blog Joined January 2008
United States266 Posts
October 20 2008 01:16 GMT
#1
I'm just starting to write my college essays. I was wondering if you guy had any advice for what to include/what admission officers look for in an essay.

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il0seonpurpose
Profile Blog Joined January 2007
Korea (South)5638 Posts
October 20 2008 01:19 GMT
#2
Isn't there a topic you have to write about?
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20173 Posts
October 20 2008 01:19 GMT
#3
Whats the topic? Diversity is ALWAYS a good thing btw.
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eborp
Profile Blog Joined January 2008
United States266 Posts
October 20 2008 01:20 GMT
#4
The common app is open-ended, meaning that basically I can write about anything. Although they do cover stuff like write about a person, event, etc. that has influenced you, the last thing topic they have is a topic of your choice >.>
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SingletonWilliam
Profile Joined April 2008
United States664 Posts
October 20 2008 01:22 GMT
#5
The UC prompts are horribly generic and dull :/
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Ecael
Profile Joined February 2008
United States6703 Posts
October 20 2008 01:22 GMT
#6
I think this point has been done to the death, just write something that interests you if the topics are open enough for you to do that. This isn't like a class where you can gauge what the professor likes and stuff it with opinions to that effect. You should keep in mind that they are looking more for the ability to write in general as reflected by these essays more than some kind of high-strung ideal, while it certainly doesn't hurt to include the latter, the focus should be for you to write good pieces to read.
decafchicken
Profile Blog Joined January 2005
United States20173 Posts
October 20 2008 01:33 GMT
#7
On October 20 2008 10:20 Fangster wrote:
The common app is open-ended, meaning that basically I can write about anything. Although they do cover stuff like write about a person, event, etc. that has influenced you, the last thing topic they have is a topic of your choice >.>


tell them about why you're diverse and how you'll bring diversity to their university.
how reasonable is it to eat off wood instead of your tummy?
thunk
Profile Blog Joined March 2008
United States6233 Posts
October 20 2008 01:38 GMT
#8
On October 20 2008 10:22 SingletonWilliam wrote:
The UC prompts are horribly generic and dull :/


To be completely fair, almost all of them do. UChicago is the only one known for its prompts and past that you can get only marginally more interesting than the UC applications.

Plus, UC only gives you a thousand words, probably because they have a ridiculous number of applicants.
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theonemephisto
Profile Blog Joined May 2008
United States409 Posts
Last Edited: 2008-10-20 01:41:40
October 20 2008 01:39 GMT
#9
Pick something very specific that only you can write about. And I'd highly suggest starting with an extremely specific event or situation. Don't try to bring too much into your essay, they aren't looking for you to show off your accomplishments or your command of large words, they're looking to find insights into your person (along with writing ofc).

I'm currently writing a couple college essays, and I've found that the best ones all start out with going truly into detail about something random that's unique to you. It doesn't have to be deep, impressive, of profound, just something that you can show something about who you are.

EDIT: And yea, the Chicago prompts are great (but harder). And 1000 words is a ton, for most essays I wouldn't suggest going much over 500. Short and to-the-point. Boring the admissions officer is the worst thing that you can do. If your writing style is extremely natural and an easy-read, then you can pull off more, but keeping it simple is better.
CaucasianAsian
Profile Blog Joined September 2005
Korea (South)11602 Posts
October 20 2008 01:39 GMT
#10
talk about starcraft, and how you contribute to one of the largest and most skilled communities around the world
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BreaK
Profile Blog Joined April 2008
Canada890 Posts
October 20 2008 01:53 GMT
#11
Tell them how hard your life has been. Are you a minority? EVEN BETTER! Construct a sob story, but don't make it too obvious. Be original, be believable.
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HeavOnEarth
Profile Blog Joined March 2008
United States7087 Posts
October 20 2008 02:22 GMT
#12
On October 20 2008 10:53 ClouD.BreaK wrote:
Tell them how hard your life has been. Are you a minority? EVEN BETTER! Construct a sob story, but don't make it too obvious. Be original, be believable.

lol i did that :O
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Caller
Profile Blog Joined September 2007
Poland8075 Posts
October 20 2008 02:34 GMT
#13
My UChicago essay was essentially a rip off of Spore.

I got in, so go figure.
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thoraxe
Profile Blog Joined March 2007
United States1449 Posts
October 20 2008 02:38 GMT
#14
hey dude, your like me, except that my teacher is going to proofread it and give me a grade for it. oh, and its due tommorow with only a half-finished introduction rough-draft that is coupled with some math homework.
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GHOSTCLAW
Profile Blog Joined February 2008
United States17042 Posts
October 20 2008 03:03 GMT
#15
College essay readers are looking for two things: how good your writing is/how you answer the prompt, and what makes you different from the 1 bajillion other applicants to the school.

I'm convinced that a lot of the large public universities don't even read college essays though >.>
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OneOther
Profile Blog Joined August 2004
United States10774 Posts
October 20 2008 03:25 GMT
#16
I wrote about a unique experience I had and how it influences my outlook. I wrote my first draft on the diversity one, but it got way too generic. Make it personal! Don't write what you think the admission officers would want to read, write what you want to write.
shavingcream66
Profile Blog Joined February 2008
United States1219 Posts
October 20 2008 04:32 GMT
#17
On October 20 2008 11:38 thoraxe wrote:
hey dude, your like me, except that my teacher is going to proofread it and give me a grade for it. oh, and its due tommorow with only a half-finished introduction rough-draft that is coupled with some math homework.


yeah i wrote one for my class and it was like homosexually connotated. I thought it would be unique and all my friends loved it but the teacher told me not to do it.. I think still will because it's unique?
BanZu
Profile Blog Joined June 2008
United States3329 Posts
Last Edited: 2008-10-20 05:43:33
October 20 2008 04:45 GMT
#18
They want to know who you are.

Simple as that.

But writing it is easier said than done.

"The personal statement is an important part of your application for admission and scholarships. The University uses the statement to learn more about you as an individual and to understand the experience, accomplishments, and points of view you would bring to the University's undergraduate student body. The personal statement gives you the opportunity to discuss attributes and experiences that may not be evident through a review of your academic record."

"Although you may wish to seek the advice of others, the University expects you to write your own admission essay. At the same time, it is probably a good idea to have a friend, teacher, or parent provide you with feedback on how well your essay conveys what you want to say. Remember, however, the purpose of the essay is to gain insight about you on a personal level."

"There is no single "good" admission essay. We look for essays in which the quality of your character emerges. After we have read your essay, we will ask the question, "what do we know about this individual?" If we have learned little about you, the essay has not succeeded."

Just some excerpts from a packet I got from my English class.

Edit: Useful stuff on What kind of admission essay should I avoid?

One type of essay that usually does not succeed is the essay which simply lists information such as activities and honors. Because this information can be found elsewhere in the application, the list essay adds little to our understanding of you as an individual. A list tells the campus what you do, not who you are. You may, however, be able to compose an essay of this type if you discuss a wide range of activities, convey a sense of your broad interests and abilities, and in the process, reveal something about your character.

An example of the list type of essay is:
My Life
"I was born in Colorado and moved with my parents to California when I was in the sixth grade. both of my parents, and my older brother have degrees from Berkeley and I want to go there too. I received an award as the Top Student from my junior high school. I am now a senior in high school where I am editor of the yearbook, server on my class council, have the lead in the senior play, play varsity tennis, rank number 3 in my class scholastically, and volunteer two hours a week serving meals to the homeless.

Another kind of essay you should avoid is one that is so predictable and one-dimensional that is becomes a stereotype. This type of essay is so common that it is not useful to us in distinguishing among applicants.

Some examples are:
My Summer Trip
"I went to South America this summer. I ate different food, learned different customs, and met different people who spoke a different language and led a different way of life. it changed my life."

I Learned a Lot from Sports
"I learned how to set goals, to be a team player, to give 110%, and to overcome getting up early on cold mornings to practice."

A third type of essay to avoid is one that tries to be very comical or that relies heavily on a gimmick. While a sense of humor is a valuable quality and may add a pleasing dimension to an essay, most essays that attempt to be exceptionally funny do not succeed and do not help the applicant in competitive admissions.

An example is:
I am Like the Busy Ant, the Faithful Dog, the Worker Bee, and the Friendly Chipmunk
"I am like the ant always working hard to make my dreams come true. I am like the dog, dedicated and faithful in doing my school work. I am like the worker bee always striving for the benefit of others in every way but never buzzing around telling others what I am doing. I am like the perky chipmunk, not too nutty, but friendly, making everyone feel like they belong."

Other essays lack focus They are too general, as if the writer hadn't been able to decide what to write about.

The D's
"I have the determination, discipline and desire for admission to your campus."

In composing your essay, you should not automatically reject writing about any of the subjects listed above. The problem with such essay is not the topic, but the manner in which the essay is presented. Essays about these (or other) subjects can be successful if they elaborate on the insights you gained from your experience and on the ways this experience influenced your outlook, activities, commitment, or goals. remember, no matter what you choose to write about, your essay needs to provide an answer to the basic question, what do we know about you as an individual?
Sun Tzu once said, "Defiler becomes useless at the presences of a vessel."
stanley_
Profile Blog Joined December 2007
United States816 Posts
October 20 2008 05:02 GMT
#19
i can't think of anything good : ( Mine is due tommorow as well.
hoorah
OneOther
Profile Blog Joined August 2004
United States10774 Posts
October 20 2008 05:21 GMT
#20
you guys are lucky your teachers actually care about the college essays..
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