EPTthese next seven, an embrace
what deliberate
innocuousness.
i’m undone, wholly immersed,
by these few haiku’s
unpunctuated,
melodramatic free verse.
what intimacy--
from such disarray,
inspires deconstructed,
poetic foreplay.
oh, get over with it already
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hyst.eric.al
United States2332 Posts
these next seven, an embrace what deliberate innocuousness. i’m undone, wholly immersed, by these few haiku’s unpunctuated, melodramatic free verse. what intimacy-- from such disarray, inspires deconstructed, poetic foreplay. | ||
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RoieTRS
United States2569 Posts
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Khenra
Netherlands885 Posts
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qrs
United States3637 Posts
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ella_guru
Canada1741 Posts
On June 10 2010 13:28 qrs wrote: "by" should be "in" (or the positions of "undone" and "immersed" swapped), but quibbles aside, I quite like it. Nicely done. We can just leave it be : ) | ||
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qrs
United States3637 Posts
Heil grammar! | ||
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