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I currently have a few pieces of writing on the go, and this weekend i'm off to Big White for a snowboarding trip.
I foresee some free time to write, and i'll hopefully get to a few of the pieces.
However, for those of you who enjoy reading my blogs, i would like you to vote:
Should i finish my piece entitled "Oh my, that's a fucking guillotine", or "Going to Confession".
Guillotine is an interesting experience of mine that i've wanted to write about for a while; but the writing style is out of my comfort zone and i'm a little shy about posting it. It may be a giant fail. A small excerpt below:
Oh my god. That's a fucking guillotine.
"Here". she said from behind her face mask, a low, monotonous, sex-less, voice. A drone, working the conveyer belt in a surgical factory. I, the next doll in line, features set to be altered and modified. Her latex covered hands reached towards my hesitant ones, two grey spheres of malleable foam rubber dropping from her fingertips, like what you imagine to be the inside of a memoryfoam™ mattress.
A frown slowly crawls across my face as i realize she's given me stress balls.
The room was dark and encroaching. The other inhabitants busy preparing their work stations, the doctor attending his stainless steel instrument tray. My blindfold had just been removed, the dimmed lights and staunch sterility now leaving me both suffocated and parched. An ominous steel table rests to my left, ominous if for no other reason than that it was not the bed that i had expected, that the one bastion of comfort that i could expect in this faceless intimidating encounter was in fact just as stark and cowing. shitfuck... i should have taken that Adavan.
Confession is a standard mora-story with a mora-approach written in classic mora-style. If you typically like my blog posts, this should fit you kindly. A small excerpt below:
Confession
“So, what brings you here today, Taylor… Falls is it?” Her hand is clasping some sort of encrusted gem, dangling from the necklace resting on the exposed skin below her neck. Her hair is wispy and brown, loosely tied and haphazard, what I’d imagine her after having had great sex.
“Fales actually”, I smile and offer, a bit sheepishly. This isn’t the first time I’ve come to confession. I come about every three months, though in the past six months I’ve been four times. “Well, it’s been almost three months since I’ve come in, and thought I was probably due”.
“Oh yes, I see”, she lifts her glasses by scrunching her nose, leaning forward, closer to the ancient fifteen inch CRT, “It says here: contact with H, is that correct?”
Poll: Which piece should i finish?
(Vote): Oh my god, that's a fucking Guillotine
(Vote): Going to Confession
Links to previous Blogs (in order of highest to lowest rated):
A Story
It's been a year
Life, Death, And Beauty
Filled With Happy
Turbulence
It's true
On the other side of 707
Nocturnal at Sunrise
Exit Music
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because i can't click on your blogs and find your posts on my own, could you please link to them? 
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oh, and i guess i could give first few lines of each Story!
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Guillotine! Challenge yourself man, that's the best way to improve :D I will definitely read when you post it.
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haha thanks mora. i was being sarcastic because i CAN view your blogs, but suggesting you link to the stories for people who don't think of it. and i assumed the stories were in your blogs
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On January 29 2010 13:28 KurtistheTurtle wrote:
haha thanks mora. i was being sarcastic because i CAN view your blogs, but suggesting you link to the stories for people who don't think of it. and i assumed the stories were in your blogs
i figured as much. it was a good idea. 
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bah, the stories are have completely different intentions.
guillotine is going to sound way better off the bat, but it's just a story. Confession is commentary about me, and i dunno, maybe even implied commentary on the psychology of being human?
oh well! i will finish the one with the highest votes!
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Big White? shit..my friends are all going and i was on the verge of going too LOL
shit i shouldve gone
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Big White??? Shiet man, that's like less than an hour away from me!
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On January 29 2010 15:01 Grobyc wrote:
Big White??? Shiet man, that's like less than an hour away from me!
where do you live? :O
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oh fuck Guillotine sounds awesome.. well Confession would be interesting too but I really want to read Guillotine.
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West Kelowna. I'm on the other side of the bridge, but it's not that far away. Going up to Big White on Feb 6th actually with a friend.
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I notice a lack of the "Both" option. 
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Korea (South)17174 Posts
as all writers with something to write
you already know which one you are more ready to / want to write asap
oh you silly tl-blog advertiser
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On January 29 2010 17:06 Rekrul wrote:
as all writers with something to write
you already know which one you are more ready to / want to write asap
oh you silly tl-blog advertiser
i want to finish guillotine but i'm struggling with it.
confession will require less [total time] put in.
i guess my blog post had 2 intentions:
1) advertise of course
2) provide motivation to just do one
thanks for pointing it out to everyone that i like to advertise though. that's stellar.
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Sound like you want to finish the confession-story to me Do what you like I will read anyway.
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Korea (South)17174 Posts
then the answer is simple, confession first
forcing your way through a peice that you know can be a masterpiece but you just haven't acquired the 'writers feeling' to write it just yet is literary suicide (not that you don't know that, cough attention whoring / getting ur audience ready for ur work)
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On January 29 2010 17:45 Rekrul wrote:
then the answer is simple, confession first
forcing your way through a peice that you know can be a masterpiece but you just haven't acquired the 'writers feeling' to write it just yet is literary suicide (not that you don't know that, cough attention whoring / getting ur audience ready for ur work)
hmm, you've not brute-forced your way through any of your writing?
I'd say half the [good] writing i do flows naturally, and the other half takes about 6 times as long and is just brute force.
as much as i'm an attention whore, i don't like the way you put it: getting your audience ready for ur work. It implies my writing will be good/worth 'getting ready' for.
I already have performance anxiety in the bedroom, i don't need it with my writing. Take it easy? lol
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