The updates have been slower. It's a symptom of me being a lot busier at work this week though, and nothing else. My writing time outside of work is taken up completely by my novel, so if I don't get anything done at work then nothing gets done at all. I don't have anything scheduled for the first half of the day tomorrow though, so if that doesn't change then I'll probably be able to finish it then, as there's not a whole lot more left.

triangle

United States3803 Posts

August 07 2008 17:35 GMT

#270

This is one hell of a long night :p

Mathieu C.

Canada2 Posts

August 07 2008 19:03 GMT

#271

After several years of reading forums I finally decided to suscribe,

OneBlueAugust, your story is awesome!

I can't wait for the ending, very captivating!

Ghost151

United States290 Posts

August 07 2008 19:27 GMT

#272

meh.

It reads like anything by King. Lots of unimportant details that aren't relevant. (The comparison to a movie scene...why? That whole part is just lame IMO) Gets very tedious after you mention any major event in the story. Use of imagery and sense appeal is good though. Overall you know how to fill out a book, but your subject matter sucks to begin with frankly.

note that all of this is opinion, but since nobody is gonna care about that anyway, go ahead and flame the hell out of me. I find the story boring, hit me with what you got.

calgar

United States1277 Posts

August 07 2008 19:33 GMT

#273

This last update was cute.

Orome

Switzerland11984 Posts

August 07 2008 19:35 GMT

#274

On August 08 2008 04:27 Ghost151 wrote:
meh.

It reads like anything by King. Lots of unimportant details that aren't relevant. (The comparison to a movie scene...why? That whole part is just lame IMO) Gets very tedious after you mention any major event in the story. Use of imagery and sense appeal is good though. Overall you know how to fill out a book, but your subject matter sucks to begin with frankly.

note that all of this is opinion, but since nobody is gonna care about that anyway, go ahead and flame the hell out of me. I find the story boring, hit me with what you got.

You're welcome to find the story as boring as you like, but when somebody puts that much effort into something, posting just to say his story sucks is not a very nice thing to do.

Nightmarjoo

United States3360 Posts

August 07 2008 19:35 GMT

#275

no u

Nice update, eagerly awaiting what's next!

OneBlueAugust

United States153 Posts

August 07 2008 20:08 GMT

#276

Man, it's about time. There's no way in hell anyone's going to write a story that everyone likes, so the fact that I wasn't getting any negative feedback was weirding me out. I expected a lot more of it, frankly, since as you said, the subject matter isn't for everyone.

I do have to say, though, that while your comparison to King was apparently meant to be something less than a compliment, in my opinion it's pretty high praise. That guy has been writing for decades, which is something that I can only aspire to. And even if his stuff's gotten a little stale lately, IT, The Talisman, and some of the Gunslinger novels are in my top favorite reads of all time.

aseq

Netherlands4016 Posts

August 07 2008 20:24 GMT

#277

Could you put lines in between your updates, please? Right now it's a little annoying to look up where I left. Or maybe you could make several spoiler tags, one for each part...awesome story nonetheless.

a-game

Canada5214 Posts

August 07 2008 20:34 GMT

#278

enjoying the updates man, thanks for continuing to work on it