EPTBut but but is that a bad thing? For instance i love swimming I love the feeling of weightlessness and the sense of privacy you get when surrounded by water. I can spend hours in the water just floating around diving around and swimming around. But again i suck at it I cant swim even a hundred meters before I collapse tired. One reason i love being in water is the fact my whole body of mass gets weightless.
Now I'm not very fat just weak nerd that spends 8 hours a day sitting and my muscles disappeared. Also I got a very large body, you know 2 meters tall and 100 kilo heavy. Anyway it's is starting to get personal and rambly back to the main problem.
I think I'm a bad writer but I like it so I was thinking of having a test "Who am i to judge me self." As the old people used to say. Or was it "Who are you to judge me?" It doesn't matter cause what did they now the old people hu?
I'm going to translate over a bit from my tries at creating a good begynnelse historia and see what the greatest forum in the world has to say about it. Are you ready? Am I?
The story of Thana and it's people by BiM
One day the leader of the gods Semua decided to have a competition...
This beautiful world he and his friends had created needed something extra something that took better control over it than those pesky squirrels that ran around all over the place something that would help it grow.
So Semua summoned his friends and shared his idea. The other gods liked the idea of a competition and they also had gotten itchy fingers wanting to create more stuff after they had seen how beautiful Thana had turned out. So they started working.
Arush the god of the winter and the wind and lover of the mountains in the north. Created a bear. He gave it a thick furry skin , strong claws and the power to survive any winter.
Peleda the god of wisdom and lover of the great forests in the west. Created the owl. She gave it intelligence, good eyesight and a beautiful voice.
Kitxch The good of greed and its opposite lover of the great planes of the south. He created the rat.
He gave it Flexibility, perfect climbing powers and survivability
Diszzio The god of fire and chaos!!!!! Lover of the sands in the east He created the demon. He gave it horns a tail and and incredibly twisted mind.
And Semua himself The appointed leader and father of all created the human. He gave it a pare of legs a pare of arms and a big brain.
The other gods laughed at Semuas creation
"How is it to survive the cold winter? It doesn't have any fur." Asked Arush in his deep booming voice.
"How is it supposed to survive the dark nights? When it cant see." Asked Peleda in her beautiful v singing voice.
"How is it supposed to get away and hide in small holes? Its to big and clunky" Asked Kitxch in is high pitched voice
"How is it supposed to put fear in the world around it? When it doesn't have ant scary features." Asked diszzio in is hoarse horrible voice.
"We will see how it goes" said Semua with a smile."
They placed there creatures on Thana and the competition was on. Directly the owl swooped down and.....
I'm gonna end it there please let me now what you think cause i really liked writing that and also let me know if you want more. But if it's no good maybe i should start working in a factory and forget my dreams
You can already see how this can turn out to be a good story with greedy people and intelligent people and evil people and big viking people from the north
TL:DR My second blog is it well written?
