EPTI need help with whats in red. I can't think of a better sentence starter going over my essay
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Spenguin
Australia3316 Posts
I need help with whats in red. I can't think of a better sentence starter going over my essay | ||
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il0seonpurpose
Korea (South)5638 Posts
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Jonoman92
United States9110 Posts
Perhaps you could say something like. On page 57 Scout (shows, exhibits) this learning... Also, where you have your first comma that should be a period. Thats a blatant comma splice/run-on. | ||
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Spenguin
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fusionsdf
Canada15390 Posts
its a useless word in this sentence | ||
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fusionsdf
Canada15390 Posts
On June 08 2008 13:16 Spenguin wrote: Atticus is the main teacher of moral education to Scout, this is one example of his teachings and is used by Scout near the end of the novel on page 307 where Scout is “viewing” the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s eyes and understanding Boo’s ways of living. From this same lesson on page 57 of the novel Scout shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus: I need help with whats in red. I can't think of a better sentence starter going over my essay also your first sentence is awkward Atticus is the main teacher of moral education to Scout, This is fine. Every word is necessary (main might be a little extraneous) and the subject is clear. this is one example of his teachings and is used by Scout near the end of the novel on page 307 where Scout is “viewing” the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s eyes and understanding Boo’s ways of living. "this" is the subject. What does it refer to? You've basically switched subjects in the middle of a sentence, and it isn't really clear what the new subject is. better would be: Atticus is the main teacher of moral education to Scout. By teaching Scout to see the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s, he gives her a strong moral foundation and teaches her to empathize and fight for others (page 307). Scout shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus (pg 57) because of this. its still not perfect, but it doesn't feel like a run-on sentence, the subjects are clear, its not too wordy and the sentences fit with each other. | ||
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FragKrag
United States11567 Posts
If you're using MLA format, you want (author last name #) Atticus is the main teacher of moral education to Scout, this is one example of his teachings and is used by Scout near the end of the novel on page 307 where Scout is “viewing” the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s eyes and understanding Boo’s ways of living. From this same lesson on page 57 of the novel Scout shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus: Atticus is the main teacher of moral eduction to Scout. One example of Atticus's teachings is near the end of the novel, where Scout is "viewing" the events of Maycomb through Boo's eyes, and understanding Boo's way of living (Lee 307). Due to his lessons, Scout shows great respect and admiration for Atticus (Lee 57). | ||
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fusionsdf
Canada15390 Posts
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FragKrag
United States11567 Posts
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ScarFace
United States1175 Posts
On June 08 2008 13:16 Spenguin wrote: That book is a piece of shit. Throw it at your teachers face. Atticus is the main teacher of moral education to Scout, this is one example of his teachings and is used by Scout near the end of the novel on page 307 where Scout is “viewing” the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s eyes and understanding Boo’s ways of living. From this same lesson on page 57 of the novel Scout shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus: I need help with whats in red. I can't think of a better sentence starter going over my essay | ||
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Wizard
Poland5055 Posts
On June 08 2008 14:39 ScarFace wrote: That book is a piece of shit. Throw it at your teachers face. It's a great book, what are you talking about. | ||
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GeneralStan
United States4789 Posts
On June 08 2008 13:16 Spenguin wrote: Atticus is the main teacher of moral education to Scout, this is one example of his teachings and is used by Scout near the end of the novel on page 307 where Scout is “viewing” the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s eyes and understanding Boo’s ways of living. From this same lesson on page 57 of the novel Scout shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus: I need help with whats in red. I can't think of a better sentence starter going over my essay Most of Scout's moral education comes from Atticus, for instance near the end (page 307) where Scout views the events of Maycomb through the eyes of Arthur "Boo" Radley. Scout is able to understand Boo's way of living, and similar to earlier (page 57) shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus. I think I kind of missed the point. I was trying to recreate a flow to the whole of the paragraph, but the abrupt shift from page 307 to 57 is hard to flow smoothly. I also used the page numbers in parenthesis because it strikes me as such a noobish thing to do to refer nakedly to the page numbers. Maybe I'm thinking too much | ||
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fusionsdf
Canada15390 Posts
On June 08 2008 14:44 GeneralStan wrote: Most of Scout's moral education comes from Atticus, for instance near the end (page 307) where Scout views the events of Maycomb through the eyes of Arthur "Boo" Radley. Scout is able to understand Boo's way of living, and similar to earlier (page 57) shows great respect and admiration for her father Atticus. I think I kind of missed the point. I was trying to recreate a flow to the whole of the paragraph, but the abrupt shift from page 307 to 57 is hard to flow smoothly. I also used the page numbers in parenthesis because it strikes me as such a noobish thing to do to refer nakedly to the page numbers. Maybe I'm thinking too much yeah I noticed the same thing it changes subjects abruptly which makes it very hard to interpret | ||
thedeadhaji
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HeavOnEarth
United States7087 Posts
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LxRogue
United States1415 Posts
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Muirhead
United States557 Posts
Atticus serves as the primary guiding influence for Scout and her developing morals. As early as page 57 we are told of Scout's great admiration for her father, and so we comprehend her desire to understand and imitate his ideals. One can see Scout use his teachings near the end of the novel on page 307, when she views the events of Maycomb through Arthur “Boo” Radley’s eyes. Only after Atticus urges Scout to imagine herself as Boo does she begin to understand Boo’s ways of living. If you have other examples you should stick them between the page 57 and page 307 sentences, as there is a bit of a jump there. | ||
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