• Log InLog In
  • Register
Liquid`
Team Liquid Liquipedia
EDT 17:43
CEST 23:43
KST 06:43
  • Home
  • Forum
  • Calendar
  • Streams
  • Liquipedia
  • Features
  • Store
  • EPT
  • TL+
  • StarCraft 2
  • Brood War
  • Smash
  • Heroes
  • Counter-Strike
  • Overwatch
  • Liquibet
  • Fantasy StarCraft
  • TLPD
  • StarCraft 2
  • Brood War
  • Blogs
Forum Sidebar
Events/Features
News
Featured News
Team Liquid Map Contest #22: Results and Winners7Code S Season 2 (2026): RO4 and Finals Preview12TL.net Map Contest #22 - Voting & Ladder Map Selection7Code S Season 2 (2026) - RO8 Preview8[ASL21] Finals Preview: Two Legacies21
Community News
[TLMC] Summer 2026 Ladder Map Rotation05.0.16 patch for SC2 goes live (8 worker start)43ZeroSpace at Steam NextFest - Last free demo25Weekly Cups (June 8-14): Clem and Solar double, PTR tested0RSL: S6 Finals played at BlizzCon 202611
StarCraft 2
General
take on 5.0.16 5.0.16 patch for SC2 goes live (8 worker start) ?Bug in new patch Daily SC2 Player Grid - feedback wanted SC2 Planner - The StarCraft II Build Planner
Tourneys
RSL Revival: Season 6 - Qualifiers and Main Event Sparkling Tuna Cup - Weekly Open Tournament GSL CK #4 20-21th June Douyu Cup 2026: $20,000 Legends Event (June 26-28) Master Swan Open (Global Bronze-Master 2)
Strategy
[G] Having the right mentality to improve
Custom Maps
Work In Progress Melee Maps [D]RTS in all its shapes and glory <3
External Content
The PondCast: SC2 News & Results Mutation # 531 Experimental Artillery Mutation # 530 One For All Mutation # 529 Opportunities Unleashed
Brood War
General
Fact based Zerg Upgrade Tier List BGH Auto Balance -> http://bghmmr.eu/ STARCRAFT MOVIE - Last Night at the Command center BW General Discussion Battle cruiser feet vs Carrier fleet
Tourneys
[BSL22] GosuLeague Casts - Tue & Thu 22:00 CEST [Megathread] Daily Proleagues CSLAN 4 is Coming! Small VOD Thread 2.0
Strategy
Why doesn't anyone use restoration? Simple Questions, Simple Answers Relatively freeroll strategies Creating a full chart of Zerg builds
Other Games
General Games
ZeroSpace at Steam NextFest - Last free demo Rogue Command Stormgate/Frost Giant Megathread Beyond All Reason Nintendo Switch Thread
Dota 2
Looking for a Dota Mentor Official 'what is Dota anymore' discussion
League of Legends
Heroes of the Storm
Simple Questions, Simple Answers Heroes of the Storm 2.0
Hearthstone
Deck construction bug
TL Mafia
Vanilla Mini Mafia
Community
General
US Politics Mega-thread Things Aren’t Peaceful in Palestine Russo-Ukrainian War Thread [H]Internet/Gaming Cafe Tips and Tricks The Games Industry And ATVI
Fan Clubs
The HerO Fan Club! The herO Fan Club!
Media & Entertainment
Movie Discussion! [Req][Books] Good Fantasy/SciFi books [TV/BOOK] *SPOILERS* Game of Thrones Discussion
Sports
2024 - 2026 Football Thread McBoner: A hockey love story TeamLiquid Health and Fitness Initiative For 2023 Formula 1 Discussion Cricket [SPORT]
World Cup 2022
Tech Support
Computer Build, Upgrade & Buying Resource Thread Facing Challenges in Mobile App Development
TL Community
The Automated Ban List
Blogs
How To Predict Tilt in Espor…
TrAiDoS
An Exploration of th…
waywardstrategy
I'm an arrogant trash talke…
FlaShFTW
Gauntlet SC2: A Retrospectiv…
Ctone23
Why RTS gamers make better f…
gosubay
Customize Sidebar...

Website Feedback

Closed Threads



Active: 7999 users

Story written by me, enjoyy =)

Blogs > letsbefree
Post a Reply
letsbefree
Profile Blog Joined January 2008
Canada123 Posts
March 28 2008 03:10 GMT
#1
The Paper Ring

She was waiting. In a chily night in November 2005. Carol Morson was sitting alone on a bench in a park.
"Eleven o'clock..." she murmured to herself while looking at her watch.
The person who was supposed to be here with her is still nowhere to be seen. At this hour, there were only a few people and couples in the park. THe night is getting darker and darker, and suddenly, the wind blew, and Carol shivered.
"Where is he..." she murmured to herself again, "Why do I always have to wait!"
The people around her looked at her for a second, and they all returned to what they were doing. She felt very lonely. A while later, she looked at her watch again, it reads 11:15 pm. She felt frustrated and tired, she decided that she is not going to wait anymore, she stood up and got ready to leave.
"Carol!" A voice broke the quiet night. A man wearing the uniform of a famous fast-food store came running towards her.
"Sorry I'm late! I got to work because there were a lot of customers today." The man in uniform said.
"Customers? Every time we have a date you would have a lot of customers, is work more important than me Allen?" Carol exclaimed.
"No, definitely not! I'm sorry. Anyways, I brought something for you." Allen pulled out a paper ring from his pocket. "I know this is paper, but i will give you a real one sometime later. I promise."
Carol just smiled, and she puts the ring in her pocket.
Allen felt a bit disappointed because she didn't put it on her finger.
There was silence.
"Eh.. we were suppose to go to a movie right? But I suppose the movie ended already, haha.."
Carol felt her anger rising. "Then why did you come late? You could've told your boss that you have to leave early!"
"But... but i really need money so i have to work, don't you understand? Only that way we can get married, just wait and we will have a wonderful future!"
Silence again.
"Then...i guess we are not going to the movie, how about we go to get something to eat?"
"...sorry," Carol said with deep sorrow, she felt pain in her heart. "Sorry Allen, I'm really sorry, but i can't wait anymore."
"What do you mean? You want to go home for tonight? That's ok, we will find another time and..."
"No...I.." Carol stopped.
She needed not to say no more, suddenly, everything was understood, Allen was stunned and he just stood there speechlessly, silence came once again.
"I..I am sorry Allen, but I've been waiting for too long now. I've waited for you, for years and years! Yet, you still haven't changed a bit! I think it would be better for both of us if we break up." WIth this said, Carol turned around and quickly walked away.
Allen stood in the silence of the night, drowning in his unspoken words of sorrow. After that night, Allen tried to save the relationship, but he failed. Time went by, and seasons wither, the connection between the two became weaker, until finally, all contact was lost.

A few years passed. On a sunny day in Summer, Carol was sitting in a nicely decorated room. Her two year old child Danny was playing around with her stuff.
"Danny, you got to be careful with those, you better not break anything!"
Just after she said that, Danny picked up a thing that looks like a small piece of paper and played with it. Carol looked at the paper, it was a ring, a paper ring. She felt weird because she can't remember where it came from.
"I don't remember my husband giving me anything like that..." She said to herself. Although she couldn't remember, a feeling of sadness passed her body.
"Would you give the ring to me sweetheart?" But Danny threw it across the room.
DING~~
"What..?" Carol was shocked that the paper made such a sound. SHe walked to the place where the ring landed and picked it up. "This is..." She unfolded the paper with her hands.
A bright light shone from the ring, it was the light of the diamond. SUddenly, as if the light is a flash of memory, she remembered. Tears are gathering in her eyes, she looked at the paper that was used to fold the ring, it was a note:

Dear Carol:
Will you marry me?
Love you,
Allen Walker

Tears came flowing down her cheeks. On the back, it reads 17th Nov.2005. She remembered that is the day she broke up with Allen.
Under the sunlight of summer, the ring shone brightly, and it seems to resemble the smile of a man that has long been forgotten. This ring, it would never be put on the finger of the person it meant for. But perhaps somewhere in this world, someone's still waiting, waiting for the girl that will never return to him.





hehe...
ZaplinG
Profile Blog Joined February 2005
United States3818 Posts
Last Edited: 2008-03-28 03:30:26
March 28 2008 03:29 GMT
#2
The idea of the story is good, but your grammar leaves much to be desired. Watch out for the tense shifts; you flip from present to past a lot and it takes me as the reader out of the story. Also, work on your sentence format (i.e. when you have someone talking, start a new sentence) Just look in your favorite book to see how they did it.

The ending was a bit unbelievable, though. You're telling me years later her 2 year old son magically finds a paper ring that she didn't know she had been keeping amongst her stuff? Probably not. Also, if there had been a ring wrapped up like you said, the weight would have given it away when she first received it. In addition, I think her boyfriend would have said something like "Open it" when she completely ignored it rather than just walking away from an expensive diamond ring and the girl he loves.
Don't believe the florist when he tells you that the roses are free
KwarK
Profile Blog Joined July 2006
United States44123 Posts
March 28 2008 04:11 GMT
#3
I liked the concept.
ModeratorThe angels have the phone box
XCetron
Profile Joined November 2006
5226 Posts
March 28 2008 04:18 GMT
#4
On March 28 2008 13:11 Kwark wrote:
I liked the concept.

dancefayedance!~
Profile Blog Joined November 2006
396 Posts
March 28 2008 04:24 GMT
#5
what zapling said. the story and the dialogue isn't believable. it sounds like a sappy love story. try looking for your own voice
7c.nEptuNe
Profile Blog Joined October 2005
United States153 Posts
March 28 2008 04:58 GMT
#6
i liked it =D
paper
Profile Blog Joined September 2004
13196 Posts
March 28 2008 07:14 GMT
#7
i do not remember wrapping around a diamond ring

>_>

<_<

>_>
Hates Fun🤔
Please log in or register to reply.
Live Events Refresh
Next event in 12h 17m
[ Submit Event ]
Live Streams
Refresh
StarCraft 2
mouzHeroMarine 795
ProTech142
Livibee 81
ViBE13
SpeCial 2
StarCraft: Brood War
ZZZero.O 129
League of Legends
Doublelift2947
Counter-Strike
summit1g8186
minikerr25
Super Smash Bros
PPMD35
Other Games
Grubby4691
shahzam558
C9.Mang0277
UpATreeSC169
Organizations
Other Games
BasetradeTV178
StarCraft 2
Blizzard YouTube
StarCraft: Brood War
BSLTrovo
[ Show 17 non-featured ]
StarCraft 2
• StrangeGG 97
• Hupsaiya 90
• musti20045 24
• AfreecaTV YouTube
• intothetv
• Kozan
• sooper7s
• IndyKCrew
• LaughNgamezSOOP
• Migwel
StarCraft: Brood War
• blackmanpl 10
• STPLYoutube
• ZZZeroYoutube
• BSLYoutube
League of Legends
• TFBlade1161
Other Games
• imaqtpie1126
• Shiphtur221
Upcoming Events
The PondCast
12h 17m
Douyu Cup 2020
1d 7h
Oliveira vs Trap
Jieshi vs XY
soO vs FanTaSy
TY vs Coffee
OSC
1d 18h
Douyu Cup 2020
2 days
Neeb vs Impact
MacSed vs Cyan
Scarlett vs Kelazhur
INnoVation vs Dear
Douyu Cup 2020
3 days
Maestros of the Game
3 days
herO vs Classic
Maru vs Serral
BSL22 NKC (BSL vs China)
3 days
Douyu Cup 2020
4 days
BSL22 NKC (BSL vs China)
4 days
Online Event
4 days
[ Show More ]
RSL Revival
5 days
RSL Revival
5 days
WardiTV Weekly
5 days
RSL Revival
6 days
Liquipedia Results

Completed

Proleague 2026-06-19
WardiTV Spring 2026
Heroes Pulsing #2

Ongoing

IPSL Spring 2026
Acropolis #4
CSCL: Masked Kings S4
YSL S3
BSL 22 Non-Korean Championship
CSL Season 21: Qualifier 1
SCTL 2026 Spring
Maestros of the Game 2
Murky Cup 2026
IEM Cologne Major 2026
Stake Ranked Episode 2
CS Asia Championships 2026
Asian Champions League 2026
IEM Atlanta 2026
PGL Astana 2026
BLAST Rivals Spring 2026
IEM Rio 2026
PGL Bucharest 2026

Upcoming

CSL Season 21: Qualifier 2
CSL 2026 Summer (S21)
CSLAN 4
Blizzard Classic Cup 2026
Kung Fu Cup 2026 Grand Finals
RSL Revival: Season 6
CranK Gathers Season 4: BW vs SC2 Team League
HSC XXIX
Douyu Cup 2026
BCC 2026
Light Tournament 2026
Eternal Conflict S2 Finale
Eternal Conflict S2 E1
Heroes Pulsing #3
BLAST Open Fall 2026
Esports World Cup 2026
BLAST Bounty Summer 2026
BLAST Bounty Summer Qual
Stake Ranked Episode 3
XSE Pro League 2026
TLPD

1. ByuN
2. TY
3. Dark
4. Solar
5. Stats
6. Nerchio
7. sOs
8. soO
9. INnoVation
10. Elazer
1. Rain
2. Flash
3. EffOrt
4. Last
5. Bisu
6. Soulkey
7. Mini
8. Sharp
Sidebar Settings...

Advertising | Privacy Policy | Terms Of Use | Contact Us

Original banner artwork: Jim Warren
The contents of this webpage are copyright © 2026 TLnet. All Rights Reserved.