I Wrote a Stupid Story

Jerubaal

United States7684 Posts

July 02 2016 05:57 GMT

Hello, friends. If that's your real name. I've been working on my magnus opus for far longer than I should have, but I'm very lazy. It's really still not done yet, as you'll see towards the end, but I figured I'd toss it out to the wolves to get some feedback. It's a bit over 30k words, hardly a novella, so it shouldn't take much time. If you find yourself bored, I'd appreciate any comments. Cheers.

It's a story about a young man with delusions of philosophical grandeur. And his sensei is a talking beaver.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kdWn3A-5AaKocF1QQMXapXNCsHWZvclmK5MBfYkTrhw/edit?usp=sharing

_fool

Netherlands682 Posts

July 02 2016 09:16 GMT

Having read only the first 5 pages or so, I have to say: I like the style

It's absurdist from the get-go.

If you haven't read Kurt Vonnegut, do so ("Slaughterhouse-Five" being most famous, but I loved "Cat's Cradle", "Galapagos" and "Breakfast of Champions" as well). He applies roughly the same dry 4rth wall breaking humor.

Jerubaal

United States7684 Posts

July 03 2016 01:10 GMT

Thanks! I havent read Vonnegut but i should soon. Another book you might compare it to is A Confederacy of Dunces. I hope I'm continuing the Southern neo-Gothic/Grotesque tradition.

Cynry

810 Posts

July 04 2016 23:42 GMT

Only thing that I find weird so far, is how you kinda break the fourth wall. Stuff like this "(That is, for a moment, not in a moment, which is an incorrect usage anyway.)" breaks the immersion for me. Maybe that's just Southern neo-Gothic/Grotesque style, as I have no idea what that is ^^ But hey, feedback !

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