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I took to adventuring in the woods back then. The woods behind the house were full of brush and trees, but you’d never see any wildlife among them. The trees were barren year-round, but there were so many of them that, had you ventured far enough into the forest, you’d quickly lose track of where you’d been and gotten lost. Unfortunately we were miles away from civilization, and I had no neighbors whose houses I could use as landmarks to guide my way back home. I spent many days out there adventuring. Most of the time I never ventured far enough to see anything worthwhile.
That day was different.
I was home by myself, and bored. My usual pastime of reading was, unfortunately, not an option that day. I had just finished my current book, The Count of Monte Cristo, and hadn’t anything left to read. With not much else to do, I figured I’d take a long stroll through the back woods. Farther than I’d ever gone before. Of course, I knew I’d get lost in there if I didn’t have some way of finding my way back home. I rummaged through an unused drawer and found a dusty old green dress. I brought it with me and grabbed a knife from the kitchen before going outside.
I started going through my usual backwoods trail, climbing over fallen trees and patches of thorns until eventually I could go no further. The path becomes too thick with trees and brush to follow about a hundred yards in. It was here that I laid my first ribbon. I cut open the dress and tied a sizable amount of it to the tree nearest my path. My heart started beating quicker as I continued taking steps further and further away from my path...from safety. I laid another ribbon down within eyesight of my first ribbon, but still a fairly decent ways away. This continued for a while, with me cutting open the dress and tying it up to various trees along my route. By the time I had completely gone through the dress, I had a feeling that it was time to go back.
I wish I had listened to that feeling. Though it didn’t seem like it had been very long, it was already starting to get dark. Soon enough I wouldn’t be able to see the ribbons I tied up to guide me back home. I turned around to to head back when I noticed an area, devoid of any trees whatsoever. There were two graves in the shapes of a cross that were planted into the ground. I don’t know what made me think to do it, but I started walking over. Every step I took felt heavier than the last and my heart started racing again. When I knelt down, I saw the graves and immediately started crying.
Those were the graves of my parents.
+ Show Spoiler +Was this good or not? I honestly can't tell.
 
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good when its meant to be funny
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^ I was thinking of putting an alternate ending in there:
"There were chopped onions over the graves that made me tear up."
Or something like that anyways. Thought it would ruin everything though lol.
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well yes, a ending like that would ruin it imo. its good the way it is, just wasnt sure what your intentions were.
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ending is kind of random unless im missing something. Its lacking impact when he comes across the graves of his parents because we (the reader) didnt even know his parents were dead or if he even had parents for that matter before he seen the graves. also.. I would take a compass... not a dress lol.
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i like creepypasta but i really didn't understand O_O the story just went full 360 when he went into the woods
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On March 08 2014 09:09 Coagulation wrote:
ending is kind of random unless im missing something. Its lacking impact when he comes across the graves of his parents because we (the reader) didnt even know his parents were dead or if he even had parents for that matter before he seen the graves. also.. I would take a compass... not a dress lol.
I am pretty sure that this is the joke
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Well, the (supposed, anyways) creepy part is that he hadn't gone that far into the woods before, so he wouldn't have known what lies beyond, yet he somehow finds the graves of his parents, that he had no idea they were there before. So then the reader is confused as to why the graves were there to begin with, how the main character found them, and why he feels such remorse over seeing that they were his parents' graves. The intention was to leave it open-ended, so the reader could assume unreliable narrator who probably killed and buried his parents. That assumption was probably a bit too much if you didn't read into it though I guess.
I had another half-written creepypasta, but I guess I won't finish it. I'll go back to humor next week, just wanted to try something different.
^Also, you guys keep bringing up, "that's the joke." Did you guys actually find the ending so dumb that it was funny? Or am I missing something?
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i think they thought you made some sort of satire with creepy pasta
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On March 08 2014 09:37 Epishade wrote:
Well, the (supposed, anyways) creepy part is that he hadn't gone that far into the woods before, so he wouldn't have known what lies beyond, yet he somehow finds the graves of his parents, that he had no idea they were there before. So then the reader is confused as to why the graves were there to begin with, how the main character found them, and why he feels such remorse over seeing that they were his parents' graves. The intention was to leave it open-ended, so the reader could assume unreliable narrator who probably killed and buried his parents. That assumption was probably a bit too much if you didn't read into it though I guess.
I had another half-written creepypasta, but I guess I won't finish it. I'll go back to humor next week, just wanted to try something different.
^Also, you guys keep bringing up, "that's the joke." Did you guys actually find the ending so dumb that it was funny? Or am I missing something?
The problem is that when people see the name Epishade, they expect some sort of trolly story. There's a reason why when some writers are extremely famous for a certain genre, they have difficulty, or need to use pseudonyms when writing a different genre (no, I'm not asking you to make an alt account).
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Very spookey and scarey storey. unfortunately your reputation precedes you and I couldn't take it seriously 
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On March 08 2014 10:18 Pangpootata wrote:Show nested quote +On March 08 2014 09:37 Epishade wrote:
Well, the (supposed, anyways) creepy part is that he hadn't gone that far into the woods before, so he wouldn't have known what lies beyond, yet he somehow finds the graves of his parents, that he had no idea they were there before. So then the reader is confused as to why the graves were there to begin with, how the main character found them, and why he feels such remorse over seeing that they were his parents' graves. The intention was to leave it open-ended, so the reader could assume unreliable narrator who probably killed and buried his parents. That assumption was probably a bit too much if you didn't read into it though I guess.
I had another half-written creepypasta, but I guess I won't finish it. I'll go back to humor next week, just wanted to try something different.
^Also, you guys keep bringing up, "that's the joke." Did you guys actually find the ending so dumb that it was funny? Or am I missing something? The problem is that when people see the name Epishade, they expect some sort of trolly story. There's a reason why when some writers are extremely famous for a certain genre, they have difficulty, or need to use pseudonyms when writing a different genre (no, I'm not asking you to make an alt account).
Yup. Just like what I said when you (edit: 'you' being epishade) PM'd me a couple weeks ago. This different stuff is not bad by any measure (imo), it's just different than what we've come to expect when we see BLOG by Epishade. It just kinda throws off people who are familiar with your writing.
My advice, for what its worth, is to just keep writing what you want. Some of your first comedy pieces kinda went bust too, it happens. Keep working at it and it'll improve just like with the funny stuff. And after a while, I reckon people will stop expecting a punchline at the end of every epishade blog.
In short, bring on creepypasta #2 !
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Haha thanks. Overall I don't think this was a bad story, but like you guys said, I'm known for a different genre entirely. This was just an experiment for me, and I do prefer writing funnier pieces. I'll probably continue with what I'm used to. Probably won't finish creepypasta 2.
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On March 08 2014 12:18 Epishade wrote:
Haha thanks. Overall I don't think this was a bad story, but like you guys said, I'm known for a different genre entirely. This was just an experiment for me, and I do prefer writing funnier pieces. I'll probably continue with what I'm used to. Probably won't finish creepypasta 2.
If thats what you want to do, more power to you! I just hate seeing people get discouraged, is all.
You may recall I went off on a similar MOTIVATIONAL SPEECH early on in your funnies writing. 
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