Well if you are a passionate comic artist you shouldn't be in need of some financial assistance from Blizzard or anyone else. Looking at your portfolio I can see that you're a very capable artist but I can't say the same from the comic. Every page looks something that was done in an hour(the foreshortenings I see there give me headaches) and the story progression is bad and the characters need a lot of work. Also there are typos that even I'm able to notice. It feels like an unfinished draft for something bigger I don't know if that's what you're going for for now but I'd expect a ''passionate comic artist'' to put more effort into this. So at least to get me to read this the art and the story really need to go up a couple of notches. What I see now is a messy comic that tries to be a Starcraft version of those clichéd shonen sports mangas. I know you can do better and I hope you will, good luck.

SehWho

69 Posts

June 25 2013 03:47 GMT

#42

The art is very good, but the dialogue sounds a bit unnatural. I feel like this has more potential if it focuses more on inside the game. (as in the units and what's actually going on rather than just a dude clicking and describing it) Either way, it's visually interesting and I love it.

High[5]

United States61 Posts

June 25 2013 04:06 GMT

#43

amazing so far!

OSM.OneManArmy

United States509 Posts

June 25 2013 05:05 GMT

#44

ME GUSTA :D

Ketch

Netherlands7285 Posts

June 25 2013 08:02 GMT

#45

Beautifully done!

Technique

Netherlands1542 Posts

June 25 2013 08:09 GMT

#46

Cool idea, but get rid of the manga style imo... use proper anatomy.

TheSwamp

United States1497 Posts

June 25 2013 08:46 GMT

#47

Great idea! Now, how do we grow webcomics?

Reality-

Denmark20 Posts

June 25 2013 09:15 GMT

#48

Cool comic I enjoyed it.

but you should really go over the dialog again. You have a ton of grammar mistakes.
And you might consider using contractions, don't instead of do not and so on, sounds less forced in speech

Fairon

Russian Federation80 Posts

June 25 2013 09:36 GMT

#49

Man it looks AWESOME! Totally approve the idea of starcraft webcomic!

Facultyadjutant

Sweden1876 Posts

June 25 2013 11:34 GMT

#50

finished reading and i loved it absolutely

kemihan

Brazil16 Posts

June 25 2013 13:45 GMT

#51

Good stuff.

Facultyadjutant

Sweden1876 Posts

June 25 2013 17:09 GMT

#52

I am really surprised something like this hasn't already been done in korea etc

9-BiT

United States1089 Posts

June 25 2013 17:53 GMT

#53

"MATZ JUST WON THE THUG OF WAR"
Might want to fix that. The comic is super cool though, keep it up.

Nayth

France17 Posts

June 26 2013 00:14 GMT

#54

Thanks a lot for the feedback everyone ! be it positive or negative !
I understand that this comic is aimed towards teenagers ... but I still have plenty of more 'mature' subject I'd like to incorporate about psychology, competition and all this stuff : ) hopefully I could aim a good balance. I just experimented a lot with this webcomic as it was my first big project !

English is not my mother tongue :C and I hardly ever speak this language at all ... and I'm too shy to ask anyone to correct my text anyway ...

My drawing style is still developing a lot ... you should also note that making 70 pages of comic takes a LOT of time. Time that I currently cannot waste for nothing :C I still work on other projects so one day I can live from drawing ... so bare with the low quality :X

this apply to drawing as well as starcraft of course !
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if there are some byun's fan in the audiance : p

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metric.system

United States20 Posts

June 26 2013 00:52 GMT

#55

That's amazing work.
I think the art style and quality are perfectly appropriate for this wonderful idea.

If anything, get someone to help with the writing; there's a mountain of material to make a esports themed webcomic fly but you can't half ass it with just your average sempiternal tale told through starcraft-tinted glasses. I'm sure there'd be plenty of people willing to help.

Best of luck!

xHadoken

United States171 Posts

June 26 2013 09:50 GMT

#56

Really enjoyed reading this! You have my support! Keep up the good work!

Facultyadjutant

Sweden1876 Posts

June 26 2013 10:55 GMT

#57

Hoping desperately for a cameo soon, maybe by watching starcraft on TV and he sees Idra or Mvp and gets inspired

Really stoked for next chapter!

3point14

Germany890 Posts

June 26 2013 11:08 GMT

#58

woah the style of drawing totally gets me!!
please make the comic!!
hope youre also as talented with storytelling as with drawing.

I think you will have no problems making money with it, cause it will get very high traffic and you can run ads from pokersites or whatever! if you include nice parts with Naniwa and Idra the traffic will explode!
a arrangement with blizzard should be possible.

there was a comic called +EV (poker related) and it was like the only pokercomic available and I guess with ads the guy had a pretty good income over years. it was done in 1pagejoke segments though which is much easier to enjoy during a small break or so

Good luck!

edit: come on that drawing style is ridicolously good, its gotta be used somewhere.
also youre gonna get a lot of respect from the sc2 community

Railgan

Switzerland1507 Posts

June 26 2013 11:23 GMT

#59

Read it, loved it.

Keep up the goodwork

Excludos

Norway8082 Posts

June 26 2013 11:28 GMT

#60

On June 26 2013 09:14 Nayth wrote:
English is not my mother tongue :C and I hardly ever speak this language at all ... and I'm too shy to ask anyone to correct my text anyway ...

Luckily, you're in a community filled with people who would gladly do this for you