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redFF
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Zim23
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the balance of power has seems to have been changing. Get rid of 'has' or get rid of 'seems to have'. | ||
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jalstar
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For a long time Awkward opener, and it hasn't been "a long time" since 2004. Indeed, since 2004 only two teams out of “The Big Four” have finished in the top 4 positions of the premier league. Do you mean outside of the top 4 positions? Last season, The Big Four was broken To be accurate, the hold the Big Four had over the PL was broken. more and more No. Just say "a larger amount" or something similar. "more and more" is not good writing. to spend on the level of The Big Four on new players Awkward preposition usage. Try "as much as". mould Just because you're writing about something British doesn't mean you should use the British spelling.  The fact that Tottenham is now not just a big team in England, but also in Europe, is a huge boost for English domestic football. Explain your thoughts on this. Soccer fans, especially outside England, are more familiar with the big 4. How does having lesser-known teams compete outside England boost English soccer? Arsenal and Chelsea drawing to Blackburn and Stoke City this weekend respectively. Chelsea drawing to Stoke City is just one example of how competitive this league currently is, and this is fantastic for fans and for the sport in general. Are Blackburn and Stoke City just outside the top 4 or are they bottom-feeders? Why is this fantastic? Don't the big 4 have more fans than the other teams? | ||
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redFF
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jalstar
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On April 04 2011 12:10 redFF wrote: OMG thanks so much for the feedback ^^. It's good that teams outside the big 4 are winning more because it makes the league itself far more competitive and exciting to watch. I would prefer a league where anyone can beat anyone than one dominated by a select few teams. Anything boosting the competitiveness of the domestic league is a boost to soccer imo. I'll edit it with the grammatical suggestions later too tired to right now. Thanks again. ^^ The questions were suggestions for content. The middle part of your post (from "it's good" to "bosst to soccer") would improve your article immensely. | ||
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