You're awesome, Coag.

Could I suggest adding white borders between panels in the same image? It's sometimes difficult to tell the difference between frame borders and dark geometry in the scene, at the moment.

Also - and please don't take this the wrong way - have you considered hitting up one of the TL writers to polish the dialogue?
It's not that the dialogue is bad so much as that the art is so good that the reader expects the whole thing to be immaculate, and there is room for improvement in the text.

Dirkzor

Denmark1944 Posts

October 24 2012 09:27 GMT

#67

Coag you are truely amazing! Continue...

Percutio

United States1672 Posts

October 24 2012 09:31 GMT

#68

I think hotbid will win if it comes down to a war of sniping.

Also this is a great thread.

Rah

United States973 Posts

October 24 2012 10:26 GMT

#69

pros: The story you set up caught my interest, and the artwork was very high quality.

cons: The character dialogue was either generic comments or too intense for the situation, and the art style may be too dark.

Sinedd

Poland7052 Posts

October 24 2012 10:29 GMT

#70

thats some amazing drawing skillz

NICE !

-NegativeZero-

United States2141 Posts

October 24 2012 10:29 GMT

#71

Wait so what exactly is the skull on the robot, is it just a holographic projection that it uses as its "face"?

james5

United Kingdom26 Posts

October 24 2012 11:02 GMT

#72

This is very nice.

VaultD

Finland85 Posts

October 24 2012 11:20 GMT

#73

Amazing artwork, I love the style and the story seems very cool as well. However, some copy editing/ proof reading is warranted here as the current dialogue and text is a bit clunky and there are even some typos (unless I've missed an inside joke). For example, on page 6 the word should be "murmurs" not "murmers" and the sentences could use some restructucing to make them seem more fluent. These little things take some of the effect out of the story. Nevertheless, this is an amazing project and I truly hope to read more, keep up the good work!

Crissaegrim

2947 Posts

October 24 2012 11:30 GMT

#74

Nice. Keep it coming!

Niten

United States598 Posts

October 24 2012 12:03 GMT

#75

crazy amounts of win

Coagulation you're an incredible artist.

strongandbig

United States4858 Posts

October 24 2012 12:15 GMT

#76

Surprised at Manifesto showing up.

But this is pretty awesome.

Can't wait for old Blue to get here!

bluegarfield

Singapore1128 Posts

October 24 2012 12:21 GMT

#77

wow really awesome job with the graphics, story seems to be pretty interesting as well
one minor thing i wish is the text slightly larger so i can read the text while being able to look at the full pics and dont have to zoom in to read each portion, but larger text may block the graphic too much also. nothing much besides that, really really awesome piece of work

Batcatx

Sweden22 Posts

October 24 2012 12:25 GMT

#78

Really cool, hope there is a lot more to come!

BLinD-RawR

ALLEYCAT BLUES50121 Posts

October 24 2012 12:28 GMT

#79

MANIFESTOOOOO!

Kittan

Poland3999 Posts

October 24 2012 12:37 GMT

#80

I must protest, my good sir, but Manifesto is clearly more manly than the puny form you have temporarily bestowed upon him. Unless, of course, he has a battle mode transformation capable of portraying his true power. In that case we're good to go :D

Will the Liquid Creature really show up?