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rushz0rz
Profile Blog Joined February 2006
Canada5300 Posts
Last Edited: 2010-11-28 08:43:15
October 19 2008 21:36 GMT
#1


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Sfydjklm
Profile Blog Joined April 2005
United States9218 Posts
October 19 2008 21:49 GMT
#2
im really good at essays. Extremely enjoy writing them too, was writing them for all my friends at one point xD. However all my essays come out... too narrative
I just feel that a facts essay is way too boring and pointless, always wrote if i felt my writing would be interesting for people to read
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Chef
Profile Blog Joined August 2005
10810 Posts
Last Edited: 2008-10-19 21:52:38
October 19 2008 21:51 GMT
#3
Some teachers are just dumb. Essays are really subjective to mark, so I wouldn't worry yourself too much about it.

General tips are.... Don't use words like "I," "me," "think," "opinion." Get down to the facts right away (don't set a scene, except maybe in the introduction). Be careful about just giving the person a history lesson... You're supposed to be analyzing it, not regurgitating it.

GL GL. Hope you have an original point a view, because that usually gets extra points with teachers who are bored of reading the same essay 10,000 times.

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fight_or_flight
Profile Blog Joined June 2007
United States3988 Posts
October 19 2008 21:58 GMT
#4
I would say

1) Don't mention the names of individual people. No one person was responsible for the events of history, it was caused by things like economics, technology, etc. Individuals should be more of an afterthought.

2) Perhaps organize things on more of a major-events-based approach rather than a chronologically-based approach, with those events not being the actions of individuals, but the causes of those actions and the reasons why they succeeded.
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Dknight
Profile Blog Joined April 2005
United States5223 Posts
October 19 2008 22:05 GMT
#5
Its hard to give you advice on how avoid writing a narrative when you don't post your essay.
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Lemonwalrus
Profile Blog Joined August 2006
United States5465 Posts
October 19 2008 22:07 GMT
#6
Idk, I feel that the best history writings are narrative. Sounds like a crap reason to lower your grade imo. Now I have to get back to squeezing the entire history of Greece into 5 pages using only primary sources.
Chef
Profile Blog Joined August 2005
10810 Posts
October 19 2008 22:17 GMT
#7
1) Don't mention the names of individual people. No one person was responsible for the events of history, it was caused by things like economics, technology, etc. Individuals should be more of an afterthought.

Bad advice. Profs, especially sociology and history, LOVE to hear credit of individual names. It's something that pisses me off, but it's something you have to do. You lose credibility if you don't name the names, and overall it makes you essay less convincing, and more sounding like you only have a very general idea of what happened.

That said... It definitely depends on the topic, for the validity of that statement... There's no point in naming the names of some random soldier if there's no one notable to mention, but you can't write a essay about the communist revolution in Russia if you don't name Marx and Lenin. You can't talk about any war really, if you don't name the leaders of both sides.
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Chef
Profile Blog Joined August 2005
10810 Posts
October 19 2008 22:17 GMT
#8
On October 20 2008 07:07 Lemonwalrus wrote:
Idk, I feel that the best history writings are narrative. Sounds like a crap reason to lower your grade imo. Now I have to get back to squeezing the entire history of Greece into 5 pages using only primary sources.

It's an essay. He has a thesis, he's trying to prove it. He's not telling a story here.
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RaGe
Profile Blog Joined July 2004
Belgium9947 Posts
October 19 2008 22:20 GMT
#9
I advise you to look into the social consequences of the Versailles treaty in 1919 (after WW1) as one of the main reasons why nationalistic socialism made a rise. There are a lot more reasons, but I think that's one of the historically interesting reasons. Especially if you look at the different approach taken after WW2.
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Ecael
Profile Joined February 2008
United States6703 Posts
October 20 2008 04:26 GMT
#10
What's the topic of the first essay?

I'll probably PM/email more detailed response.
GrayArea
Profile Blog Joined December 2007
United States872 Posts
October 20 2008 04:45 GMT
#11
Hamburger format? anyone remember this?
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