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Tis the end of starcraft,
Or so its fine to say,
has the entire community gone daft?
listen'n let me lead the way
Don't be so hasty!
To judge sc2's imminent end,
because juuu'st maybe
Starcraft's not on the descend
Stream views aren't declining
So what the fucks wrong?
Just because LoL is, upwards climbing
Star-two doesn't belong?
I don't see what the problem is,
Starcraft is doing just fine,
I think it's time to stop the shiz,
And give blizzard time.
Time, time, it's coming out soon!™
True it's the only thing we hear
I promise you by the end of next june,
then the changes will be near™
It's no secret, that blizzard doesn't care + Show Spoiler +(doesn't change anything and keeps people waiting for whatever reason(I'm sure they do care))
Because sc2 is the best game
In e-sports I declare!
I seek no fame just the truth
Why blizzard.
Don't you change your UI spoof
The koreans will never leave the game
for some lame new fad
From BW the best just came.
People with passion won't leave for the nab...
Seems that people don't realize
That overall e-sports grows in size (LoL, dota2, CS.)
The popularity to starcraft also applies...
And the "opponents" are really just allies.
Thank you very much! Feel free to crap all over my poems and mention how I am getting worse, I really just do these for the funzies, and twas enjoyable! And if you do find it worthy do post in the comment section so it doesn't immidiently drown.
  
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Huh. There seems to be actual improvement in your poesy, Mr Bimbles. I mean, the meter is still bad, and there's still a few nonsensical forced rhymes, and some grammar issues, but overall its done well. It even has a volta-esque bridge and a obvious structure, with decisive statements and a logical thought process you guide the reader through.
so yah. it aint winning a pulitzer any time soon, but it's a fun read ^_^ keep it at it man.
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Not crazy about the rhymes, but gj overall.
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Actually, BroodWar is the best game. Rainbow Dash is the best pony.
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On October 25 2012 10:37 Fishgle wrote:
Huh. There seems to be actual improvement in your poesy, Mr Bimbles. I mean, the meter is still bad, and there's still a few nonsensical forced rhymes, and some grammar issues, but overall its done well. It even has a volta-esque bridge and a obvious structure, with decisive statements and a logical thought process you guide the reader through.
so yah. it aint winning a pulitzer any time soon, but it's a fun read ^_^ keep it at it man.
success! ...
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whoa! nice poetry writing skills. Honestly, (to use a cliche metaphor) it is a much needed breath of fresh air for someone to actually voice the same very tired thoughts about "esports ending for sc2 due to LoL" in a creative and crafty/artistic way. and actually you are writing against those people. THANKS
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On October 25 2012 22:28 meteorskunk wrote:
whoa! nice poetry writing skills. Honestly, (to use a cliche metaphor) it is a much needed breath of fresh air for someone to actually voice the same very tired thoughts about "esports ending for sc2 due to LoL" in a creative and crafty/artistic way. and actually you are writing against those people. THANKS
I really did do my best to try and make a sensible and fun poem, and thanks if you are not being sarcastic!
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On October 25 2012 10:37 Fishgle wrote:
and there's still a few nonsensical forced rhymes, and some grammar issues, but overall its done well.
Did some modifications, english isn't my native language so if you see some let me know!
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On October 25 2012 22:51 Mr.Bimbles wrote:Show nested quote +On October 25 2012 22:28 meteorskunk wrote:
whoa! nice poetry writing skills. Honestly, (to use a cliche metaphor) it is a much needed breath of fresh air for someone to actually voice the same very tired thoughts about "esports ending for sc2 due to LoL" in a creative and crafty/artistic way. and actually you are writing against those people. THANKS I really did do my best to try and make a sensible and fun poem, and thanks if you are not being sarcastic!
yes, it shows. At first glance, I thought it crap and that you didn'tknow how to write a poem but i reread it and saw that you actually did use an effective metre. It read like an old time ballad. Since you are ok with modifying it, I will give a more critical opinion.
This part that goes just because LoL is "upwards climbing" sounds really cool and it really gets an interesting tone across to me. Personally I would remove "does that mean" from the sc2 does not belong part in favour of fewer syllables maybe even "so sc2 does not belong?" but its likely better even without the so. You can get away with that because you already have the first unit of the sentence which implies it.. fuuuck cant explain it. hope you understand.
Stream views aren't declining
So what the fucks wrong?
because LoL is, climbing
star-two doesn't belong?
lol thas what i'd say. just my own taste..
Also, I believe you used the word "fab" thinking it had some connection to "fad" meaning a trend that will pass but fab is just short for fabulous.
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On October 25 2012 23:11 meteorskunk wrote:Show nested quote +On October 25 2012 22:51 Mr.Bimbles wrote:On October 25 2012 22:28 meteorskunk wrote:
whoa! nice poetry writing skills. Honestly, (to use a cliche metaphor) it is a much needed breath of fresh air for someone to actually voice the same very tired thoughts about "esports ending for sc2 due to LoL" in a creative and crafty/artistic way. and actually you are writing against those people. THANKS I really did do my best to try and make a sensible and fun poem, and thanks if you are not being sarcastic! yes, it shows. At first glance, I thought it crap and that you didn'tknow how to write a poem but i reread it and saw that you actually did use an effective metre. It read like an old time ballad. Since you are ok with modifying it, I will give a more critical opinion. This part that goes just because LoL is "upwards climbing" sounds really cool and it really gets an interesting tone across to me. Personally I would remove "does that mean" from the sc2 does not belong part in favour of fewer syllables maybe even "so sc2 does not belong?" but its likely better even without the so. You can get away with that because you already have the first unit of the sentence which implies it.. fuuuck cant explain it. hope you understand. Stream views aren't declining
So what the fucks wrong?
because LoL is, climbing
star-two doesn't belong?lol thas what i'd say. just my own taste.. Also, I believe you used the word "fab" thinking it had some connection to "fad" meaning a trend that will pass but fab is just short for fabulous.
I actually ment to say fad... xD
Also makes sense what you said ^^.
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Don't be so hasty!
To judge sc2's immidient end,
because juuu'st maybe
Starcraft's not on the descend
imminent
adjective
likely to occur at any moment; impending: Her death is imminent.
Edit: the word you used doesn't exist.. i don't think people really mind. secretly I just want more people to read it because i like it... and because you took some of my advice so i'm very proud!
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On October 26 2012 00:14 meteorskunk wrote:Show nested quote +Don't be so hasty!
To judge sc2's immidient end,
because juuu'st maybe
Starcraft's not on the descend
imminent adjective likely to occur at any moment; impending: Her death is imminent. Edit: the word you used doesn't exist.. i don't think people really mind. secretly I just want more people to read it because i like it... and because you took some of my advice so i'm very proud!
ohhhhh....
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