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On May 20 2009 04:12 Tensai176 wrote:
Love everything but the script could use some work. I`m not an expert but you should try playing on Irony, the most simplest example i can think of is,
Zero: Only an idiot would buy that shitty game,
*After work, Zero comes home*
Leo: Hey, check out this awesome game I got.
And such, that's the simplest one, but jokes like this make me laugh =)
Hi Tensai!
Thanks for the suggestion!
We are always trying to improve, both the art, and the script.
We will give some thought to the "quick and easy...but funny" ideas, like your example. Like I mentioned before, this is only our seventh comic, and this is just the begining. (We are always learning!)
Deep regards,
Leo
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On May 20 2009 04:41 SoulMarine wrote:Show nested quote +On May 20 2009 00:37 ZeroCartin wrote:On May 20 2009 00:29 choboPEon wrote:
i read all 7. here are my thoughts:
these comics dont really seem to have a point. they're as incoherent as a 4chan thread except they've got stick illustrations instead of image macros. is english not your first language? maybe try comics in spanish - smaller audience perhaps but i bet you know your way around the language.
i think i like the art work. theres a lot of potential in them. maybe try less stick figure and more full drawings - you seem to have the talent to go outside of the stick figure cliche.
epic/win/boobs/gay does not a funny comic make.
so, go the extra mile with the art - you obviously have potential.
and plan out a story with a beginning middle and end. this is not to say that all comics must be structured in such a plain way, but you should start there and work your way to more advanced concepts later.
or just stick with epic boobs, whatever.
Thx man  Yeah, its not our primary language, and we DO want to keep it kinda random * we like that sense of humor*. And stick figures is kinda like the style we are definetely keepin, so srry bout that  And about the story, we've been tryin to work on it more and more on each comic, trying to get it to flow better Thx for the c&c! you pretty much took into consideration none of what he said. You basically sugar coated "well I don't like your ideas, i'm truckin' old school." and you say your'e open to c&c. Also, I used to make signatures at NSL and criticism there is pretty hardcore.
I didnt bash his crits, i just dont agree.Taking c&c doest mean u have to agree on everything someone has to say. I do appreciate the input, and I know that we must keep improving on alot of stuff :p
What is NSL btw?
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On May 20 2009 04:41 SoulMarine wrote:Show nested quote +On May 20 2009 00:37 ZeroCartin wrote:On May 20 2009 00:29 choboPEon wrote:
i read all 7. here are my thoughts:
these comics dont really seem to have a point. they're as incoherent as a 4chan thread except they've got stick illustrations instead of image macros. is english not your first language? maybe try comics in spanish - smaller audience perhaps but i bet you know your way around the language.
i think i like the art work. theres a lot of potential in them. maybe try less stick figure and more full drawings - you seem to have the talent to go outside of the stick figure cliche.
epic/win/boobs/gay does not a funny comic make.
so, go the extra mile with the art - you obviously have potential.
and plan out a story with a beginning middle and end. this is not to say that all comics must be structured in such a plain way, but you should start there and work your way to more advanced concepts later.
or just stick with epic boobs, whatever.
Thx man Yeah, its not our primary language, and we DO want to keep it kinda random * we like that sense of humor*. And stick figures is kinda like the style we are definetely keepin, so srry bout that And about the story, we've been tryin to work on it more and more on each comic, trying to get it to flow better Thx for the c&c! you pretty much took into consideration none of what he said. You basically sugar coated "well I don't like your ideas, i'm truckin' old school." and you say your'e open to c&c. Also, I used to make signatures at NSL and criticism there is pretty hardcore.
Guys, in the first post, Zero asked for "constructive criticism".
comicnoobs.com is WHAT WE DO. We draw it in a "stick figures-style" and we want all comics to be about something "new and random".
Of course we will listen if you want to help us improve...examples that we have listen to so far: "improve the script!", or "I dont get the punchline, it needs to be BETTER"
But if someone comes and says "I dont like the style. You should change it." and "I dont like it to be random. Change it".
Then that's NOT being constructive. Thats like saying "I dont like stacraft, is 2D. Change it." and "I dont like it being an RTS. I want it to be ALL ACTION CLICK CLICK CLICK"
My thoughts on the subject.
Regards,
Leo
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Hahaha, love the new one. Keep the humor level at or above what it is now, and the art/style/charm makes up for the rest!
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On May 20 2009 00:29 choboPEon wrote:
i read all 7. here are my thoughts:
these comics dont really seem to have a point. they're as incoherent as a 4chan thread except they've got stick illustrations instead of image macros. is english not your first language? maybe try comics in spanish - smaller audience perhaps but i bet you know your way around the language.
i think i like the art work. theres a lot of potential in them. maybe try less stick figure and more full drawings - you seem to have the talent to go outside of the stick figure cliche.
epic/win/boobs/gay does not a funny comic make.
so, go the extra mile with the art - you obviously have potential.
and plan out a story with a beginning middle and end. this is not to say that all comics must be structured in such a plain way, but you should start there and work your way to more advanced concepts later.
or just stick with epic boobs, whatever.
but, i like it random
though i do agree that it might be BETTER if there was some sort of a plot going on
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Hey how long does it takes you guy to produce one comic strip of those? Excluding the time to come up with a script, I mean only the graphic part.
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On May 20 2009 06:55 VIB wrote:
Hey how long does it takes you guy to produce one comic strip of those? Excluding the time to come up with a script, I mean only the graphic part.
Umm, about 4 hours, from sketch to lines, to shading to colors, to text layouting
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That is interesting to know. I thought it took much longer.
One little suggestion that I would like to add: more starcraft comics. I'm sure many people would find it funny if it isn't in depth, just because it's something that is familiar to them. If you happen to have some knowledge of the sc pro-scene, I bet many of us would laugh at stuff like that. Like comic strips comparing Reach to Chuck Norris or mocking Savior for failing in 2009 could get you many comments from TL.net members.
Overall I don't think there is much else I could say. Your drawing style is awesome, but your scripts could use a little bit of more thought.
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On May 20 2009 08:49 VIB wrote:
That is interesting to know. I thought it took much longer.
One little suggestion that I would like to add: more starcraft comics. I'm sure many people would find it funny if it isn't in depth, just because it's something that is familiar to them. If you happen to have some knowledge of the sc pro-scene, I bet many of us would laugh at stuff like that. Like comic strips comparing Reach to Chuck Norris or mocking Savior for failing in 2009 could get you many comments from TL.net members.
Overall I don't think there is much else I could say. Your drawing style is awesome, but your scripts could use a little bit of more thought.
Thx man ^__^
I am planning on putting more SC related comics, but I want to keep it as general audienced as possible, so not TOO much progamer reference *although I MIGHT just do something*
Thx for the input, much appreciated ^^
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